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e11even 11-11-2013 04:30 AM

Clam Chowder
 
Celebatory masturbating to mating calls
between dead dinosaurs is amazing, dog!
Fossilized jizz-cicles capsulized
in stalactites his how i procreate with natures caving walls

Astroprojected sexual encounters of the third kind spellbind...
as I probe thy intergalactic palm creases as a biblical nail might
reaching my twelfth night with fail spills to fairy sprites...
Hail whites on digits like youtube's robed males...right?

When I'm inside her, its like I'm inside a dream...
I feel like an insider on The Insider's screens
Residing beside her inner thigh purse seems,
I scream inside, why her? when mine is so mean...

which perhaps would be why her cavity's lacking me.
tracking 'bread' crumbs back to these balls of napkin trapping seeds.
Bask in this domestic catastrophe of semen on ass-trophies.
And as for V? Celebatory past vid dating is why I fap to ME.

Objective 11-11-2013 04:43 PM

Didn't really like the first half, seemed rather weird to me and I was left with an ''Wat.. Okay?'' It wasn't bad, just thought it was hella weird, and for it to be that I guess it's cool in some way.. I don't know what to feel about it tbh. It was something else and it wasn't wack, let's just leave it at that.

I thought the second half was dope though. The flow and the stuff you presented had some cool similies. Overall; cool shit. Keep it up.

CopyPat 11-11-2013 06:01 PM

yeah i dunno i didnt really get this whole wacking off on dinosars shit lol... seemed like a hella fast kesytyle, looks like it shoulda been a cypher post. cool to see u just spit whatever though but i felt the flow was real choppy. wasn't ur best work thats for certain. ive written stuff real quick like this, posted it and then ended up regretting it.. better to take ur time and do it properly. keep the keystyles to the cypher brah. p.s. not hating...i just know what ur capable of

e11even 11-11-2013 06:10 PM

I agree with both of ya'll. I just threw this one together lol. thanks for the feed guys.


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