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Wise Wiggles 10-30-2013 09:25 PM

the throat-stuffer
 
You mind if Jason watch? Heinous thoughts
of Peyton raping Megan Fox while her face is hanging off..
Know what's a decent hobby? Freezing bodies
On some: how'd I get here? No beam-me Scottie's
Exhale the devil's lettuce & breathe in godly
No one knew this wicked was in me, Richard Kuklinski, is that you?
Industry taboo. Epiphany smash through. Do you dare hold back?
I'm not one to blare cold facts, but I'm an accident. The flares show that
Feel it yet? <3 the Scarecrow gas. It's scrumptious air, so plastered.
Copped a dream in a baggy, that Christina Aggy. Pristine & savvy
Fapping to flabby queefs? Attaching wings to thinking badly
Nasty things. Hatchet swings. Magma. Drinking gasoline, le trashy
I admit. I have some baggage.. Excuse the smell, I stupor well. You lose a nail?
You know when you click, it's something crazy.
You ever hunted babies? Or punched a cunt..
Til it's poussing some mustard gravy?
Sitting there.. Hungry.. Craving..
Mother hates me. So I.. Gein out &'do the Bundy-Gacy
I've wasted at least a'half'a dozen save me's
On the shit I would've done if I wasn't lazy
I'm peeing circles with this genius journal
I'll spit the dimensions, you just bleed through the worm holes
My breathing is burnt coals. Ingredient's worse, though.
I'm cheesing, eating a girl's nose. Squeezing her purple
There's no leaving these dirt roads
Y'all want the dope shit? This scratching addicts w/bolt cutters
Axing faggots. Yup, both lovers. Casting matches in home cupboards
Been asking for acid this whole summer. Acting active in slow stutters
Flashing fat chicks the throat-stuffer.
Norman's full potential. Stabbing at it, so don't, mother!
Been reading a lot of easy shit, instead of ether
I don't share my corpses. Greedy as Ebenezer
Face-fucking w/machetes, instead of wiener
These poet scribes'll blow ya mind, on some Kurt shit
Haunted person. There's a ghost inside that wants to surface

Geno 10-30-2013 10:48 PM

On some: how'd I get here? No beam-me Scottie's

Feel it yet? <3 the Scarecrow gas. It's scrumptious air, so plastered.

My breathing is burnt coals. Ingredient's worse, though.

I liked those, a lot.

Nice to see you back in action more lately
Stop sleeping people, wise da gawd

Wise Wiggles 11-03-2013 07:30 PM

This shit sucks asshole

breathless 11-05-2013 05:07 PM

Well, I had a fairly in depth review and then my phone rang and it didn't reload what I wrote...

Kuklinski (ice man) / freezin bodies drew me in immediately
Your unorthodox multies where pleasing to the mind ear... But I couldn't translate them to a consistent flow throughout
I've also been asking for acid (real lsd) all year, and no one has it, I'm convinced its gone... But the fake blotter, 2ci analogs are fun to meddle with...
If this had more connective substance aside from a couple serial killers and braggardness it could been pretty damn nice
With all that said, I have to downgrade this to just damn nice

I'm peeing circles with this genius journal
I'll spit the dimensions, you just bleed through the worm holes

This line had my laughing aloud, in a good way
Your weird ass rhymes throughout almost reminded me of some old hot 97 word game stuff, but way smarter and thoughtout
Good work, but not something i'd recommend to my grandma

PancakeBrah 11-06-2013 08:04 PM

I've read this three or four times. Liked it a lot when I first read it and came back to it just to read it a few times. Best compliment I can give forgoing an in depth breakdown.

My personal favorite of the last few you've put on here.

KwaL!ty 11-07-2013 11:21 AM

You mind if Jason watch? Heinous thoughts
of Peyton raping Megan Fox while her face is hanging off..
Know what's a decent hobby? Freezing bodies
On some: how'd I get here? No beam-me Scottie's
Exhale the devil's lettuce & breathe in godly


You know when you click, it's something crazy.
You ever hunted babies? Or punched a cunt..
Til it's poussing some mustard gravy?
Sitting there.. Hungry.. Craving..
Mother hates me. So I.. Gein out &'do the Bundy-Gacy
I've wasted at least a'half'a dozen save me's
On the shit I would've done if I wasn't lazy


some of this was pretty decent .. the content & lyrics where pretty on point the flow was nice & some of this was pretty sick ...

Mr. J 11-07-2013 08:05 PM

This was pretty slick wise, I always enjoyed your multi usage
you always use a different approach when writing
it has a different vibe, but it comes off effortless most of the time
this time was no exception, you tend to surprise me usually

You know when you click, it's something crazy.
You ever hunted babies? Or punched a cunt..
Til it's poussing some mustard gravy?
Sitting there.. Hungry.. Craving..
Mother hates me. So I.. Gein out &'do the Bundy-Gacy
^^^
this was smooth, smooth enough for me to recap

either way keep doing what you do my friend
I will always be around to peep what you have...
and I'll get back when I have time...like today

CopyPat 11-08-2013 12:01 AM

hey wise. this is ur feed 50% of the time:

"I read this, i'll come back later with real feed after i jerk off etc.."

then never do.




i won't do that to you cause we're super best friends tho

i had a smile on my face this whole verse. ur obviously fucked in the head, its very entertaining!!! fun read, came out pretty smooth, nothings forced, except the content.. cause the content is u forcing urself sexually on dead burning baby corpses, or some shit. but yeah its cool. i like reading these.. if not only for the sweet one 2 schemes u come up with. hella hella original. plus the brooding concepts are always literally disgusting. stay around bro! and most importantly don't get caught!!!

brokenhal0 11-08-2013 03:46 AM

I'm peeing circles with this genius journal
I'll spit the dimensions, you just bleed through the worm holes
My breathing is burnt coals. Ingredient's worse, though.
I'm cheesing, eating a girl's nose. Squeezing her purple
There's no leaving these dirt roads

'
yup that right there ;] fiya

Scripter 11-08-2013 09:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PancakeBrah (Post 201186)
I've read this three or four times. Liked it a lot when I first read it and came back to it just to read it a few times. Best compliment I can give forgoing an in depth breakdown.

My personal favorite of the last few you've put on here.

wow is that it I read it like 30 times some people have no appreciation SMH

overall on a serious note I thought it was well worded but could have been a little more like fluid if you wanted it to be. I meant fluent

no but seriously it totally rocked

PancakeBrah 11-08-2013 11:52 AM

Scripter you are not good at writing things or posting things.

Geno 11-08-2013 12:20 PM

Ya. Your rite, it does suck.

Wise Wiggles 11-08-2013 02:29 PM

</3

:"^(

Objective 11-08-2013 10:45 PM

The flow was rather sporadic at times to me like when the Kuklinski line comes in, here's another example:

I've wasted at least a'half'a dozen save me's
On the shit I would've done if I wasn't lazy
I'm peeing circles with this genius journal
I'll spit the dimensions, you just bleed through the worm holes


but overall I enjoyed it and it picked itself up fast. Most of the time it was on point tho', thought the content itself was cool and witty, kept me entertained throughout, dope closure. Keep it up.


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