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e11even 10-17-2013 02:31 AM

Clash of the Lycans
 
I bet you'd suck ejected dog balls through glory holes in your mom's walls.
YOU ARE ANUS!!! If memory serves, they already made a planet where you should fuck off.
You pretentious, feaux-religious, ghetto indigenous PRICK!!
Nobody cares about your metro-ridiculous flare, despite the fact you're never mentioning dicks.
Moniker to give off that mysterious vibe, like, "Who's that lil pimp in disguise?"
Only to find out the midget on the over-sized keyboard was a remote-con TROLLER just living a lie!
You're an alt... everyone knows it... yet they ignore, tend to your bore, and blow stick.
Well I'll set you straight, fag... your wife is a whore, yet Home Sweet Home's on your door
and you've never been closer to your right hand and that lotion!!

I swear dude... let you grow a fan base on Cees... they'll all get aired too!
And since we were on the subject of BALLS... I could tear them all in pairs too!
You're a queer noob with a keg tummy and beer boobs.
Bet your instagram suggests you're fly... but with the homies your girl's legs get more air time than leers do!
You ol', 'my avi looks serious, but i'm bi-curious' lookin ass nigga!!!
No matter how many small Asians you fuck, their moans'll never suggest your getting bigger!!

Fall off and get lost loser, I'm a bruiser... you'll never compete with me.
You a Yung Berg and J-Kwon, I'm lyrically Shifty to your 50.
You'd actually hafta lyrically 'get me' just ta get me...
So, again, tell me- who the fuck comes luke warm at Wayne Gretsky?!?!
Your rhymes are way thin, and I am Jason... red knife and mask after I erase men...
And you the Green Ranger??... come and attend your leviathan's annihilation!!

Don't write pretend... u stay on that play shit...
On vicodin I'm more coherent in my displays, bitch!
Probably once had an empire, but now you're in mom's basement...
So when you rebuild those forts with trash, its obvious- in your past life you were hatian...

VividlyVague can suck a dick. I fuckin hate him.

Kaeo Seru 10-17-2013 06:38 AM

This was kinda all over the place. a few clever lines here and there. some sharp ideas that could've been worded better. the flow could be a bit tighter in places. i guess you were going for comedic value with this self diss? it was a cool read none the less. something different from the usual. which i can appreciate.

e11even 10-17-2013 01:15 PM

much appreciated

CopyPat 10-17-2013 03:25 PM

hahaha wtf. well yeah u surprised me with the ending lol. i def gotta give u props for originality.. and emotion.. haha u came at urself pretty hard, lol sounds gay. i agree with Leg, it was def all over the place and not smooth but that clearly was not the point here which was comedy etc.. it was different and something fresh to read, and a bit funny, and i was wondering who u were dissing right till the end so u tricked me there. check out my shit called another squalor i think u'll like.. its kindof along these lines as far as just dumb funny shit

e11even 10-17-2013 03:35 PM

@CopyPat it was a gem. btw I fed it like days ago. Good shit, Sir.

CopyPat 10-17-2013 03:38 PM

whoops im an idiot.. yeah i even remember ur feed, my bad, lol!! check out taste the rainbow then??? ahahaha

Pakistani Hand Cannon 10-17-2013 03:49 PM

i dont use this word often

but this occasion seems fitting

this was crap lmfao aint even worth insulting past that

btw i only read the first bit

#1

e11even 10-17-2013 05:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rugged (Post 183106)
i dont use this word often

but this occasion seems fitting

this was crap lmfao aint even worth insulting past that

btw i only read the first bit

#1

hilarious that you insulted an insult. Thanks for attempting to read.

Mr. J 10-17-2013 07:36 PM

This was interesting, I really like the title first and foremost
either way this was an all over the place sort of piece
I see you really exercising your writing process though
you seem like the only one to go back and forth with me in the Cypher
and I thank you for that, this piece had a few dope lines
I feel like if you broke it up a bit and made the structure easy on the eyes
it would get a few feathers riled up...even your own...nice drop

Darth Yoda 10-18-2013 04:30 PM

I thought I commented on this. I liked the tenacity.

e11even 10-18-2013 05:11 PM

Thanks! stuff like this is good vent therapy lol.

Just Write 10-18-2013 06:42 PM

that opening line tho, ROFL!!!

wasn't really going in any direction but for a flex piece i dug it. funny as fuck tho. keep at it bro. peace


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