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Vulgar 02-01-2013 12:06 AM

The Oligarchy Always Ends
 
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Split 02-01-2013 12:39 PM

Yo don't worry about links, OM works better without that system

now I pray to Elohim's accomplices in a cottage lit by kerosene & hostel wicks

I thought this was cool... quite the sweeping epic. I'll be back to reread on my laptop. Welcome to AOB btw

Geno 02-01-2013 07:30 PM

Bout time the god arrived. I will gett this with feed over the weekend. Bruh

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PancakeBrah 02-01-2013 09:57 PM

I read this entire thing last night. It was good. There a couple lines I would quote for their quality. But I'm not going to go in depth. So you get the 'this is good' and you should be happy about you attention whore.

Sharp 02-06-2013 03:40 PM

Deserves more feed... hopefully mine does the job

This lived up to the high standard set by seeing Vulgar attached to an OM. The construction of the piece is all there and more. I really dug the perspective you took, definitely felt out of the ordinary even considering how many introspective pieces get posted - this was a lot something out of a play, making you an actor very effectively taking on the character. Incredibly well done.

My gold provisions, my goal, to visit a place of bold resistance
To take a humble path. Atonement for my lineage -
Even Castro knows his limits... don't pass the coca
I'll be a casanova, perhaps tending to pastures of Roman women

I thought that section really summed up the impressions I got from this piece. Thoughtful, intelligent (but not heavy-handed) use of vocabulary, with great flow and rhymes. Hopefully you post a lot more in this OM.

Camp Bell 02-06-2013 05:01 PM

i dont give feed where its not needed

this was definitely worth a read tho, anything with smooth rhymes
but the way you wrote this was more amazing
the vocab was very intelligent and well used
a few quotables i liked


A christened drab ambrose that glistens like timeless manifolds had risen
Our lives are too rife in this ruckus - diamonds encrusted in grandiose positions
Mother nature's panty-hose are missin'
though Saturn’s glow is distant, it contributes to the last imposed ellipsis
Me being glad to own the kingdom is in the past, a woe, unholy tempest
Allow me to blast this "noble" image while I harass the classic low percentage
I’m ready to trade in my crown, my throne, my mittens
My gold provisions, my goal, to visit a place of bold resistance
To take a humble path. Atonement for my lineage -
Even Castro knows his limits... don't pass the coca
I'll be a casanova, perhaps tending to pastures of Roman women

Darth Yoda 02-07-2013 10:42 PM

Very cool.


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