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Zen 01-30-2013 01:19 PM

The Match and The Fuse
 
A.K.A. The Impeccable Story of the Inseprable Match and The Fuse

Ok well let me go ahead and tell you this is not intended as a rap song...In fact I don't know what it's intended to be lol. I've messed around with the flow of the song because I can hear the song in my head playing and know when to change it so this might be a difficult read for some just a warning but I figured some of yall might wanna read it. Oh and this is completely different from anything I ever write so it's probably not for everyone.

Feel the wind, Hear the sound
Of the rain hitting the ground.
Fears here again, So much that you can taste it at last
As you see the thunder crash
So...
God damnit the Night's getting Darker, Ever since the Last Time I Saw Her
And now my Might's drifiting Farther, I'm just wondering what it's Like Bein A Father
But Now...
I wish I could tell ya but I don't know and that's the truth
Sometimes I Just feel like a failure and goin on has no use
I wish I could get out this trailer and kill my bastard roots
And Now...
I feel like half a recluse, I don't even remember why I'm mad at you
Maybe we're a match and a fuse, Baby we're a match and a fuse
So I say We...
Light it Quick, Ain't no reason to fight this shit
This is the only life we get, And you best believe I'd die for it
What about you?
Now I know you got feelings too, So let's say Me and You
We Decide to see it through, Then would you believe it's true
Now...
I don't know if I'm okay I suppose I'm right in between
But I was thinkin someday You'd sit at my side as my queen
Now I do what I say, and I say what I mean
But sometimes you gotta pay with life for your dreams

Geno 01-30-2013 09:07 PM

Upping for feed.

Camp Bell 01-31-2013 11:29 PM

this was perfect...had a nice flow all the way through, concept was consistent
it had that poem feel, maybe with a beat, it would be a dope verse to a song..
my faves:

God damnit the Night's getting Darker, Ever since the Last Time I Saw Her
And now my Might's drifiting Farther, I'm just wondering what it's Like Bein A Father
But Now...

This is the only life we get, And you best believe I'd die for it
What about you?
Now I know you got feelings too, So let's say Me and You
We Decide to see it through, Then would you believe it's true
Now...

I don't know if I'm okay I suppose I'm right in between
But I was thinkin someday You'd sit at my side as my queen
Now I do what I say, and I say what I mean
But sometimes you gotta pay with life for your dreams

Zen 02-01-2013 12:12 PM

Appreciate that Camp. Much love


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