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Scripter 09-30-2013 03:12 PM

Failure
 
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Broken within
by my own thoughts reflecting in
deflecting them
another opening in my heart
to be tore apart by criticism once again
I am in no competition
when my composition comes kicking in
I am my own man
call me a nomad
I just riddle them and move on like I should be on Ritalin
I'd toss the guitar
after I cut the strings an rig up the fiddle than
I refuse to bow
an not blow every syllable ta pieces, bits and shreds
I re-light an refuse an develop a bomb ass style instead
the thought that your not worth it
get rid of it.. get that shit out ya.. your misread
cause when you look up
you expose the harder side of your head

Mr. J 09-30-2013 03:37 PM

This was interesting. more of a statement than anything
maybe reassuring yourself as well as others. had a nice flow to it
the shorter segments of bars should have allowed more to be added
but leaving a piece where it is at is often what I do unless compelled to do more
keep writing

Scripter 09-30-2013 03:58 PM

Thanks for the feed. I agree some times I add more and other times I'm just not in the mood.
I should of made the title Faliure


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