syllable count..
 

Lettin loose a bit fellas. Be gentle. Im out of practice.

Let me straighten the record, im a vet kid..
Cause when im blazin a session i get ya hard like sex did...

Even though i rap in a basement,
i leave you bastards in awe..
when i leave cats in amazement,
You a bitch slapped in the jaw..
You know my tactics are raw..
My fuckin craft is amazing..
I got the type of pep in my step,
Thats crackin the pavement
Im an ill cat, puttin ya to sleep like a sick kitten..
better than me? Cut the jokes and quit trippin.
Cause what im writin like..
Is fight night when mike tyson fights..
Something hype.. spit raw?
Ya muhfuckin right
Vicious like a pit dog,
dont tempt me to blast ya..
Comin at ya with shells motherfucker
without the pasta..

I guess ill pen longer verses/flexes to expect any feedback.


Peace

i dont think its the length no good. its kinda a rhyme about nothing. its a flex piece. which is cool to do on audio, but a little boring to read. so to make up for that you need some sick metaphors and complex rhyme scheme. this didnt really have either tbh.

dont get me wrong im sure it would sound dope on a track. it did have its moments though

cause what im writin like..
Is fight night when mike tyson fights..
Something hype

i enjoyed the scheme there. even though mike tyson doesnt fight anymore. lol damn you said be easy and being harsh. my bad

good to see you posting again. hopefully you get involved in some topical tournys and or leagues. you know im a fan of your work brother. pz.

@Mike Wrecka

Thank man. I feel you on that. Ill have to drop some other shit sometime and try to make a name for myself here. Im too much of the un-noticed grey guy. Ill step things up a bit. Thx for feeding bruh

This was pretty fresh.. got illy as fuck imo after the fourth line. Shit was dope nogood. Post more damnit!

Thx @Genocide i appreciate the kind words
@Mike Wrecka as well

You dudes wanna collab?

wasnt all that bad, wasnt all that good
that ^ was nice
^ thats just weak

not really much else to say, might peep something else you drop, might not

#1

Always down for a collab. Get a verse to me and I'm all in

All good man. No worries. Thx for reading. I wasnt going for a show stopper here ..just work8n out the kinks flexin a bit like a warm up. This was keyed pretty quick..

What up NG? I agree with Mike. It'd be dope to listen to but not too fun to read, but I know you're a talented writer and I'm currently working out my own kinks so I understand lol. Keep droppin bro

@Genocide @nO gOoD! , send that collab my way when you guys are done and ill get in on it

Riteous
@Mike Wrecka. Will do, I think the content will be pretty self explanatory when u see it.. but ill shoot it to you with a breakdown of what's going on