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asylum 12-21-2024 09:31 PM

you dont have to live like that
 
my body changes always like there's different sides of me
keep my inner self within as well no need to hide the bones
my skeletons long out of the closet and made to freely roam
there's freedom on this planet and i'm taking my share
losing all that i had just to find the peak of when you're aware
but the process is lost on the shoulders of those who've tried
so at this point it's time to try to live back on this side
the side of normality and calm, not grief and distress
worrying too much about repeated bad choices makes you truly depressed
so i wont, no i dont. no thank you, ..I practice saying at night
.. desperately practicing staying alive.
when you're dead to all you know because you're under the weather
remember that falling on the wagon isn't always forever
through better or worse and the most bitter of moments we live to succeed
strive for all that you love taking advantage of all you perceive
you've got to believe in yourself because you're on your own time
so pick yourself off dust off and take control of your mind

Alice 12-27-2024 03:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by asylum (Post 851535)
strive for all that you love taking advantage of all you perceive
you've got to believe in yourself because you're on your own time
so pick yourself off dust off and take control of your mind

Definitely highlights to me. Though it’s a bit of a used statement, the ending turned out really well I thought. Strong opener as well, lost momentum towards the middle but overall a nice read


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