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Objective 07-25-2024 07:48 PM

Everything has beauty, but not everyone sees it
 
"Everything has beauty, but not everyone sees it"

I was complacent and bold when sedated on rum.
Then deflated the sun when finally hatred begun.

- By stargazing limón you're complacent with phases of vacant and cold -

Them ivory cages seem spun
when faced with raised hands you can't fold.
Can't fake it? Then make it contagious and run,
don't see 'til later your fate also changes your mom.
The struggle and hustle to be greater and fun
was a puzzle to throttle the engine I favored to none.
It's rough when the work on yourself is a labor of love
but all that you see is what you've failed to become.
A gravitational shift
was ordered before the morbid statement of "done".
Which meant distorted got sorted then cornered and killed
by the force behind doors of a strong yet tormented will.
Such a potent reveal when moments are real
and your omens choke on their hopeless ordeal.

Not to cope but I thought
it was dope that there's hope to me still.
Now I'm connected yet cordless and chill,
plus richer than ever!

You can't buy growth for a mil

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EBcAXwMY1ug

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Etherwave 07-25-2024 08:57 PM

and your omens choke on their hopeless ordeal.

Not to cope but I thought
it was dope that there's hope to me still.
Now I'm connected yet cordless and chill,
plus richer than ever!

You can't buy growth for a mil

This was beautifulllll! The whole flow throughout was water! Love reading your work!

Objective 07-25-2024 09:05 PM

That might be the best compliment I've ever received on my writing, defo brought a smile to my face. Appreciate the kind words a lot, thanks for taking your time to read & feed @Etherwave

Witty 07-27-2024 01:01 PM

I really liked this. I was really impressed by how you played around with the rhyme scheme. It's something I love to do as well so I appreciated the technical ability required to move your rhymes about so much while maintaining the flow. You did a great job here and you should be proud of this verse.

Loved it.

ACTIVATE SELF 08-06-2024 11:26 AM

Sup, O?

Man, this joint was a pleasure to read. The flow was super bouncy and fun. Definitely enjoyed it.


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