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Frank 11-26-2022 12:42 AM

XI WK 1: Master Rock (0-0) vs. Civil Rawr xD (0-0) (MASTER ROCK WINS)
 


VERSES: Thursday, December, 1st, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion

VOTES: Sunday, December, 4th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty

MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON!


TOPIC:

Master Rock 11-27-2022 06:20 PM

Check! Minimum.

Civil Rawr xD 12-02-2022 09:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Master Rock (Post 828291)
Check! Minimum.

You may have ext

Master Rock 12-03-2022 03:31 PM

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I need some time to ease, so give me space to breathe
but in the pain conceived
All I'm left with is screams constantly bickering,
boiling my blood skin on the verge of blistering
grinding my gears, intensely the sparks are flickering
vaporizing my tears torment of a furnace, immensely it's sears
burning every single aspect of my sphere it, I can't escape, just too near it
for the record skips and yet I still hear it
on repeat, it's taking its toll, I can't sleep
I seek a reprieve, grasping my skull
roaring into the night until my vocals raw
digging my nails in as they claw into my flesh until bleeds
somehow it seems that this pain relieves the twisted reality that I have witnessed and perceived
then I realize everything has its hand down demanding its fees are paid through the toll I drive
through It's my thoughts that are seemed cursed with a payment for the
flashbacks that burst (are you not entertained) watching no popcorn life in reverse leave the stain
In my mind constantly looping in rewind playing the scenes
I saw many mistakes and all I made
shivering up my spine down buried it under deeply it laid
beauty facade under in my tundra, flourishing at the wonder
an expense is frozen in time
after time I feel the chills in my bone as the thaw won't resign
the condensation drips, I'm traumatized
by the cracks, they're chiseling on the in and the outside
suffering prosecution of a crime, circumstantial, never mine
evidence subjugated the scapegoat based on status
third eye blind the web caught me fly
I attempt to claw myself out of the bind
my two scents changed, this makes no sense no matter how I arrange
No matter what I do I can't change the scent of this lament
Imagine being blamed meanwhile, I can't repent
persecuted at the wrong place at the right time to stain
filthy wipe smearing my freedom away I need my freedom to hand me more than my rights
coercing false testimonies threaten perjury towards the supposed snipes
Give me back my life, give me back my time, my children, my wife, my home
the faded memories of who I was now muted, why am I paying that price
sentenced to death how can I take the rap? the fuse is lit, combustion shall suffice

Civil Rawr xD 12-03-2022 04:46 PM

You lying sumbitch fuck you

Master Rock 12-03-2022 05:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Civil Rawr xD (Post 828516)
You lying sumbitch fuck you

Nah @Civil Rawr xD , that was my minimum if you like me to figure out how to cut it down I'll try my best. I have no idea how I got to this line count (guess I was zoning out), I didn't mean to write that much but its not the max.

Quill 12-04-2022 08:03 PM

@Master Rock On the fence with thus one. Mechanically, you were up and down. Flowed good in some spots, and felt really verbose in others. Topically, I feel like its a bit of a reach, and the last line was a half baked tie in. That said, the potential is there.

Frank 12-05-2022 08:17 PM



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