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[Round 3] 2. Advanced Placement vs (N/A) JaysonFresh/evaD — AP Advances
8 lines per PERSON. That's 16 lines per TEAM no more & no less
If both teams agree to it, you can do more than 16 lines. 16 is the absolute minimum. ----------------------------------------------------------- Check in by 1/29/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST You won't be disqualified if you don't check in, but please just do it. It's a common courtesy ----------------------------------------------------------- Verses due Friday, 2/4/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST (yes, Eastern) It's a lot of time and not a lot of lines, don't ask for extensions ----------------------------------------------------------- All the usual rules apply (No biting, recycling, pm'ing for votes, etc.) If you complete your verse early, feel free to post it or send it to me via PM. I will only post verses once both teams have submitted. Don't bitch about votes. If you have any complaints, PM me directly and I will assess the situation. Votes without explanations or that appear to be aliases will not be accepted @Dominate @Aero @JaysonFresh @evaD |
Good luck fellas.
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Gluck 16.
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Check
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I'm ready
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I have 16 from evaD/Fresh
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Small ext please. Won’t even be 8hrs from deadline
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Look,
we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters. while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >> & every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater. More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss & Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem? Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room |
No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer” & look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents |
Bullet point, wordle and weak in the knees
Small circle and mastercard Thought Nanny and castaway were bad. Strayaa was a no for me and Ayers Rock was a nice reference but didn’t like the way you used it as a hard dick and they’re gay concept. Lesser stars was a nice idea but fell flat. Wack 9mm small dick joke. Fresh aer was a good concept but who says ‘get that breath of fresh’? Fuck is that supposed to mean? Maybe it’s some new slang idk about but I’m going to assume it’s just dumb. Dead to rights boring. Turn down for what kind of funny but eh. It’s close. I’ll come back. |
d&b was aight, clever idea
bulletpoint was ok like the nanny idea but somethin with execution castaway was cool wordle is good but had to google and lost some luster weak knees was funny, solid bc generics were gettin a lil tiresome last two fell off vs didnt like 9mm so we doing big butthole lines now huh haha nahhh fresh aer ehhh dead to rights aight, missing some harshness turn down for what was funny avy was alright.. clever but missing somethin for me mastercard was good..wasnt thrilled ab the execution hooray was a throwaway close, but dom/aer had more misses.. both had execution issues for me but dave/fresh had better ideas and more shit i liked v dave/JS |
Look,
we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters. I wanted to like this & thought Dave& Busters was a good idea if reworded, but its a miss as it while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >> cool, havent seen this aero flip but im sure similar have been done.. this was a creative hit tho imo but not a heavy hit & every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny lol. nah here, decent attempt yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater. this reminds me of the castaway lines when that tom hanks film came out, this wasnt it imo More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz This was alright.. good for initial flip, had looked it up.. Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss lol. i liked this one.. broke the monotony w humor, best line so far imo & Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem? Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin Ok. seen this on Dom before.. not that its played or anything but Ok as is, The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room Didnt feel this so much.. maybe its a regional thing No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking cmon now.. lol Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen this was better but i can tell Aero is doing these She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer” I liked this, wouldve liked to see it revised a lil bit but cool & look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest This was Ok. Nothing crazy I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him Same as above.. feels like its missing something.. wording so far helped, still decent My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too Aight. Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard Hmm, one of those i liked the concept, the contacts list as mastercard feels like it coulda been something different, still thought it was decent and good idea. People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents so so.. felt lazy This could go either way, depending on preference.. i have Dom/Aero here in a close one mostly bc of execution and havin less misses imo vote AP |
Dave and fresh
Wordle, crouching to kiss Rest of verse was pretty average Dom aero Small circle, Mastercard (LOTB), turn down for what was cool too LOVED the Mastercard bar. I got dom and aero here Good battle y’all Vote D and A |
[QUOTE=evaD;819221]Look,
we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters. I don’t get the Dave&busters thing, maybe I’m missing something but oh well. This was a miss for me as I don’t get it. Sorry. while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >> Ehhhh, I get it but it’s really light to me. Just okay, lacks any real sting to it. & every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny Again here it’s kind of light in its execution, lacks punch power of anything either humorous or cold blooded. It just feels a bit flat in its payoff. yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater. I did feel this was better conceptually, for sure, but again here the wording made it sort of easy to telegraph where it was going as soon as you read castaway and then it doesn’t have a misdirection to the execution so there’s no real zing or anything to it come the punchline, it’s just sort of statementish but doesn’t feel like it does any damage to the opposition. More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz This was better conceptually, kind of wordy I guess but I’ve been playing Wordle too recently so I fuck with it Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss This was nice again, worded well and with humour to it. & Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem? Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin Nah, this one was a huge miss for me personally. Not a fan. The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room Concept was absolutely brilliant, never seen that done before, execution maybe lacked some of your usual humour for me but what a blinding idea to tie in the two of them. I liked the creativity of this. |
[QUOTE=Dominate;819222]No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking LOL worded very clean, reminded me of Killing Spree’s stillborn line from earlier in the tourney if I’m honest. Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen lmao She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer” Nah I wasn’t so keen on this one, I get the idea but the execution was lacking for me & look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest I wasn’t keen on this one at all personally, felt a bit lazy if I’m honest. I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him Nice idea, not seen this done before. My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too This one missed for me, just seen too many similar to this I guess but not necessarily bad, I just thought it wasn’t the most original concept Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard This is almost the complete opposite of the line above, worded well and a great idea. Very strong People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents Ehhhh I was kind of indifferent about this one, not entirely sure if I caught it or not to be fair. Overall I think Dave had a very strong showing here, Dom also had a banger in MasterCard which was arguably LOTB for me personally, Turn Down For What was good also. Aero had that anus line which completely caught me off guard and I thought it was hilarious, Fresh kind of had ideas I half-liked but his wording took away from the payoffs pretty heavily to the point where I felt like they were back to back light jabs not really doing much damage to their team at all. I think that’s what lead me to my decision here, Aero/Dom kind of had a consistency to them where I felt they did better as a team overall than Dave/Jayson did here. Dave and Dom were prob the strongest two overall but I think Aer/Dom did the best as a cohesive unit here. Vote - Aero / Dominate |
Jay and Dave
Opener a decent meta.. talk game with lesser stars is a cool swag concept to me.. multi lazy af tho Bulletin wp been done a bunch but I thought this was still cool with the np flip Nanny is a big miss.. I'm someone who usually likes these kind of lines but I don't think the concept is strong enough here Castaway was ight but could've been cleaned up Wordle is a cool and pretty dece current event concept.. they "yellow" worked well as delivered Weak in the knees is a hilarious short bar Is straya a common phrase used for AUS? feels a bit forced conceptually but maybe I'm wrong... wp is cool Ayers rock is a cool concept but I think maybe I'm missing the wink and skip reference to it? Vs. 9mm is funny and a pretty solid start Keep her circle small is hilarious. Fire concept Fresh Aer nah.. light np Dead to rights is played... the wording is really good on this bar but it's a played idea as is the arrest tie in Turn down for what is a banger.. lmao... lotb probably, great delivery Arm out is pretty good for an avy punch.. not a fan of them in general really unless it's a pic diss but this was pretty creative and well delivered for an indirect gun bar Mastercard is flames. Dope concept Hooray is an okay wp.. chuckle worthy Good read guys. Pretty good battle overall. Both teams I think were pretty consistent with a couple misses from both, but some very enjoyable concepts as well Pretty close to me but I loved the Mastercard and Turn Down for What bars so the strengths of the highs edge this to Dom and Aero for me Props to all |
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I've got 5 - 1 in favor of Dom and Aero who advance to the finals
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