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Spoken 12-17-2021 12:11 AM

New Jersey 1972
 
The passions...

...burning memoirs of the slightest decree,
Hindsight to a beach where the shores wade into sea.
Get it? Cause it's... Nevermind fuck an apology
I'd rather rot beneath if we're speaking honestly.
I mean it with each ounce outta me because I'm done,
Being a facade to a cause in a war with no gun.
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As the tar burns I inject my disgust but at least im fed
Bleed truth through dyslexia; often misused or misread.
Intrepid dreams looming
These screams are soothing
Words bruising...
...bird's eye view
The abnormalities that I loved once in a blue moon.
Desecrated hearts bound by chariot dreams,
Concealed from the peripherals of simpletons.
Lungs filled with gasses infecting the streams,
No youth for the future as we remain the little ones.
The seed hath fallen; makers of our own demise,
Tainting the very truth that we misconstrued in the lies.
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Amidst the nights calling as the street laid silent,
Waffle and chicken plates fed our minds in that climate.
Drawing memories onto that glass case, should have seen how the past chased.
Sparking every follicle to stand tall yet with a masked face.
That dreary night crept into my mind merely half baked,
I'm passed aches as the murder continued of those who didn't have faith.
As silver pierced embodiments with only half haste,
The plating burned; tugging the skin leaving many with a bad taste...

That's enough. Order in the court.
Mr. Michaels I've heard enough out of you.
Had one chance to plead your case
You chose to flaunt the very tears you consumed.

I here by sentence you to death.


But I've only begun...
... There is more.


-Story

Candy 12-17-2021 07:46 PM

dope the vocab was off the chain..
the hath word was a dope drop i havent read that in years.. the all round flow of it was top knotch and the story rocked..
in fact i felt like you didnt even need to add the jail part to the story because it was that emotionally driven

Spoken 12-17-2021 09:35 PM

Word prt2 coming

timeless 03-12-2022 12:27 AM

Very nice.

Being a facade to a cause in a war with no gun.

Most of it this seemed effortless. Couple parts couldve been dismantled and beought back together but i enjoyed this for sure.


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