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UPN Zuch 12-20-2020 05:06 PM

QUARTER-FINALS: #2 Blue Bayou VS #7 UserName OPEN FOR VOTES
 
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Blue Bayou 12-20-2020 05:45 PM

24 as discussed


We're at the Comfort Inn. Room 112.

I love you,

Frank.

UserName 12-26-2020 11:52 PM

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Nope, never happened, who gave this brother acid?
If you choked on my dick any more, I’d have to name it Summer Classic
And that match with Zuch was absolutely littered with pit falls
Next time you go 60, make it miles per hour, & into a brick wall
You’re a short, tiny-footed, fake bachelor faggot
That hairline’s all a show & it stops behind your ears like amateur magic
Not to drive a wedge, but we both give ur wife the gnarly goods
We got the same technique, but your gear’s a lot smaller like Charlie Woods
Been plotting your demise, quit begging me to make it stop
I’ve got a “sure, fire” plan... when the hitman asks if he can take the shot
What in the Dickens? Yeah, Charles wrote about a sick, hurt kid
But his Tiny Tim ain’t half as sad as the pair you’ve gotta slide inserts in
It’s like you’re crafting music, I’m all for it, rock on bud
Cuz ur verses lead more people to bridges than a good pop song does
Blood in his urine, loose teeth, Imma beat ya dead
But there’s nothing I can do to him he can’t blame on his Propecia meds
Condoms never fit him, his dick gets compared to Cheetos
Bro, you’re never reaching that Reservoir tip again, like Tarantino
Stays drinking hard seltzer’s, loves it when it hits his tongue
This guys a Claw machine, and the size of a prize that you can win from one
Your wife used to be loyal, wanted the kids, house, and the stash
Now our plan’s finally coming together, and watching it drip out of her ass
Lying about his Peloton, you shouldn’t share stuff, my friend
Please, the only conditioning you do is after visits to Hair Club For Men

Blue Bayou 12-26-2020 11:58 PM

i admit it UPN. you’ve really brought a vibe to the sector
congrats to Zuch for champin, Dave for verses of the week. & User for the .500 record
think ur the heart of The Tropics cuz you shout ‘teamwork’ hoe?
yeahhh man you’re the Key...we roll our eyes at in the chat like “reword bro”
ironic you ran from UPN lookin’ like SUCH a coward..
cuz committing to switchboards is also why you make $12 bucks an hour
i give my friends advice so their lives can thrive..
when tony weighs in on something he takes a second glance then dies inside
i’m a gifted singer, live a passionate life
Tony’s got pipes too. zuchs in his left hand & fracs in his right
striking out on tinder has reallly left this guy defeated
it’s time to beat it. if User wants to see Sparks Fly he needs to go & drive a Prius
Tony gun bars?! we’ve never seen your waist with a gat punk
we only think ur Carrying cuz one look at ya belly screams eight & a half months
scope locked. i’m perched up stalkin’ the scene
when i see his dome i’m ‘picking off the hair’ like User dropping a wing
it’s 2020 & if we meet up on the street to get raw..
only curbside pickup you'll be dealing w/ then are ur teeth & your jaw
fuck you whitey i don’t need to let the Wesson spray..
give you the George Floyd treatment, neon your neck like a techno rave
sex is something he never will masta
i called his ex, she said the rigatonis so small it resembles the pasta
you worked in a urinalysis lab? HA i’m glad you gave ur notice fam
asked ppl to ‘fill up the cup’ & u’ll do the same in 10 years as a homeless man

El Muffin 12-27-2020 02:17 AM

Nope, never happened, who gave this brother acid?
If you choked on my dick any more, I’d have to name it Summer Classic
( this hits. Good open )
And that match with Zuch was absolutely littered with pit falls
Next time you go 60, make it miles per hour, & into a brick wall
( short n succinct . Humorous misdirection )
You’re a short, tiny-footed, fake bachelor faggot
That hairline’s all a show & it stops behind your ears like amateur magic
( lmao . Fire )
Not to drive a wedge, but we both give ur wife the gnarly goods
We got the same technique, but your gear’s a lot smaller like Charlie Woods
( I fw this . Nice touch with the setup . I see what you did there )
Been plotting your demise, quit begging me to make it stop
I’ve got a “sure, fire” plan... when the hitman asks if he can take the shot
( cool concept . Never seen that before )
What in the Dickens? Yeah, Charles wrote about a sick, hurt kid
But his Tiny Tim ain’t half as sad as the pair you’ve gotta slide inserts in
( this is just ok)
It’s like you’re crafting music, I’m all for it, rock on bud
Cuz ur verses lead more people to bridges than a good pop song does
( mmmm. Not feeling this as much . At first glance it’s ok but I think you could’ve done without )
Blood in his urine, loose teeth, Imma beat ya dead
But there’s nothing I can do to him he can’t blame on his Propecia meds
( eh . Ok . Thus far you are doing a bang up job of not missing completely )
Condoms never fit him, his dick gets compared to Cheetos
Bro, you’re never reaching that Reservoir tip again, like Tarantino
( never mind . I stand corrected . This needed more dome to it to drive it home but I’m not seeing what else you could have done . One of those concepts you unfortunately have to shoot in the head n get rid of)
Stays drinking hard seltzer’s, loves it when it hits his tongue
This guys a Claw machine, and the size of a prize that you can win from one
( corny at first glance but it’s cool )
Your wife used to be loyal, wanted the kids, house, and the stash
Now our plan’s finally coming together, and watching it drip out of her ass
( needs rewording. Don’t like it as is much )
Lying about his Peloton, you shouldn’t share stuff, my friend
Please, the only conditioning you do is after visits to Hair Club For Men
( decent / cool close )


i admit it UPN. you’ve really brought a vibe to the sector
congrats to Zuch for champin, Dave for verses of the week. & User for the .500 record
( good open . Direct & effective )
think ur the heart of The Tropics cuz you shout ‘teamwork’ hoe?
yeahhh man you’re the Key...we roll our eyes at in the chat like “reword bro”
( I don’t think even you know what you managed to do here . This resonates like a mf .. with me . )
ironic you ran from UPN lookin’ like SUCH a coward..
cuz committing to switchboards is also why you make $12 bucks an hour
( clever. I fw this )
i give my friends advice so their lives can thrive..
when tony weighs in on something he takes a second glance then dies inside
( lol here come the big jokes. This was well done though )
i’m a gifted singer, live a passionate life
Tony’s got pipes too. zuchs in his left hand & fracs in his right
( ha . Ok )
striking out on tinder has reallly left this guy defeated
it’s time to beat it. if User wants to see Sparks Fly he needs to go & drive a Prius
( ehhhh )
Tony gun bars?! we’ve never seen your waist with a gat punk
we only think ur Carrying cuz one look at ya belly screams eight & a half months
( niiiice )
scope locked. i’m perched up stalkin’ the scene
when i see his dome i’m ‘picking off the hair’ like User dropping a wing
( lmao . Nice )
it’s 2020 & if we meet up on the street to get raw..
only curbside pickup you'll be dealing w/ then are ur teeth & your jaw
( fresh concept . Surprised I never seen this . cool )
fuck you whitey i don’t need to let the Wesson spray..
give you the George Floyd treatment, neon your neck like a techno rave
( goddamn wypipo I swear . Lol . This 0retty cool though. Nothing heavy )
sex is something he never will masta
i called his ex, she said the rigatonis so small it resembles the pasta
( wp is sound . That’s the most impressive part . Guarantee that hasn’t been done on him . I think you were lazy with the tie in but fuck else were you gonna do . I get it )
you worked in a urinalysis lab? HA i’m glad you gave ur notice fam
asked ppl to ‘fill up the cup’ & u’ll do the same in 10 years as a homeless man
( not feeling this . Pretty bland play on exposed information )

Relatively close .. by the looks of things I think I have blue taking it by one quote ( 6-7) but I can see it going either way . A couple of Users bars had so much “ potential “ like for example the resevoir tip one . That was creative as hell but it just needed to be tied in better . Kinda bit him in the ass on a couple of those types of executions fs .

V/ blue by one quoteable

Good shit fellas

evaD 12-28-2020 06:43 AM

And that match with Zuch was absolutely littered with pit falls
Next time you go 60, make it miles per hour, & into a brick wall
You’re a short, tiny-footed, fake bachelor faggot

That hairline’s all a show & it stops behind your ears like amateur magic
Been plotting your demise, quit begging me to make it stop
I’ve got a “sure, fire” plan... when the hitman asks if he can take the shot
It’s like you’re crafting music, I’m all for it, rock on bud
Cuz ur verses lead more people to bridges than a good pop song does

Stays drinking hard seltzer’s, loves it when it hits his tongue
This guys a Claw machine, and the size of a prize that you can win from one
Your wife used to be loyal, wanted the kids, house, and the stash
Now our plan’s finally coming together, and watching it drip out of her ass


Vs

ronic you ran from UPN lookin’ like SUCH a coward..
cuz committing to switchboards is also why you make $12 bucks an hour
i give my friends advice so their lives can thrive..
when tony weighs in on something he takes a second glance then dies inside
i’m a gifted singer, live a passionate life
Tony’s got pipes too. zuchs in his left hand & fracs in his right
Tony gun bars?! we’ve never seen your waist with a gat punk
we only think ur Carrying cuz one look at ya belly screams eight & a half months
fuck you whitey i don’t need to let the Wesson spray..
give you the George Floyd treatment, neon your neck like a techno rave
sex is something he never will masta
i called his ex, she said the rigatonis so small it resembles the pasta

you worked in a urinalysis lab? HA i’m glad you gave ur notice fam
asked ppl to ‘fill up the cup’ & u’ll do the same in 10 years as a homeless man
This woulda been fire but adverse did very similar against me last week

evaD 12-28-2020 06:47 AM

I’ve got blue with one more quotable but user with more haymakers and blues last bar was a debatable. I’ll have to come back to decide this one

fraze 12-28-2020 01:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by UserName (Post 796846)
Nope, never happened, who gave this brother acid?
If you choked on my dick any more, I’d have to name it Summer Classic
harsh but simple
And that match with Zuch was absolutely littered with pit falls
Next time you go 60, make it miles per hour, & into a brick wall
this is ok
You’re a short, tiny-footed, fake bachelor faggot
That hairline’s all a show & it stops behind your ears like amateur magic
kinda ok, kinda light. concept is cool but punch is lacking
Not to drive a wedge, but we both give ur wife the gnarly goods
We got the same technique, but your gear’s a lot smaller like Charlie Woods
had to look up charlie. light punch
Been plotting your demise, quit begging me to make it stop
I’ve got a “sure, fire” plan... when the hitman asks if he can take the shot
this is ok
What in the Dickens? Yeah, Charles wrote about a sick, hurt kid
But his Tiny Tim ain’t half as sad as the pair you’ve gotta slide inserts in
not sure what this was
It’s like you’re crafting music, I’m all for it, rock on bud
Cuz ur verses lead more people to bridges than a good pop song does
ok. light
Blood in his urine, loose teeth, Imma beat ya dead
But there’s nothing I can do to him he can’t blame on his Propecia meds
kinda funny. this is cool
Condoms never fit him, his dick gets compared to Cheetos
Bro, you’re never reaching that Reservoir tip again, like Tarantino
funny but wording is slightly off w/ again
Stays drinking hard seltzer’s, loves it when it hits his tongue
This guys a Claw machine, and the size of a prize that you can win from one
wording is off. concept is ok
Your wife used to be loyal, wanted the kids, house, and the stash
Now our plan’s finally coming together, and watching it drip out of her ass
funny
Lying about his Peloton, you shouldn’t share stuff, my friend
Please, the only conditioning you do is after visits to Hair Club For Men
funny but light

Quotes: go 60, sure fire plan, Propecia, coming together
Close: Summer Classic, amateur magic, Charlie Woods, pop song, Reservoir tip, Claw machine, closer

A lot of good concepts. This is a nice verse but it was held back in a few places by wording that felt rushed and light punches. I only had one legit miss which is impressive for 12 bars. A lot of creativity, props for a dropping a good read.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blue Bayou (Post 796847)
i admit it UPN. you’ve really brought a vibe to the sector
congrats to Zuch for champin, Dave for verses of the week. & User for the .500 record
funny but still a light jab
think ur the heart of The Tropics cuz you shout ‘teamwork’ hoe?
yeahhh man you’re the Key...we roll our eyes at in the chat like “reword bro”
wordy for what you did with this.
ironic you ran from UPN lookin’ like SUCH a coward..
cuz committing to switchboards is also why you make $12 bucks an hour
funny. cool wp
i give my friends advice so their lives can thrive..
when tony weighs in on something he takes a second glance then dies inside
funny. kinda mean
i’m a gifted singer, live a passionate life
Tony’s got pipes too. zuchs in his left hand & fracs in his right
flip is there but not feeling this. punch is corny to me
striking out on tinder has reallly left this guy defeated
it’s time to beat it. if User wants to see Sparks Fly he needs to go & drive a Prius
concept is ok. think you could have worded this better
Tony gun bars?! we’ve never seen your waist with a gat punk
we only think ur Carrying cuz one look at ya belly screams eight & a half months
this is ok
scope locked. i’m perched up stalkin’ the scene
when i see his dome i’m ‘picking off the hair’ like User dropping a wing
light to me
it’s 2020 & if we meet up on the street to get raw..
only curbside pickup you'll be dealing w/ then are ur teeth & your jaw
this is cool
fuck you whitey i don’t need to let the Wesson spray..
give you the George Floyd treatment, neon your neck like a techno rave
cool flip.
sex is something he never will masta
i called his ex, she said the rigatonis so small it resembles the pasta
cool wp but stretched to me as worded
you worked in a urinalysis lab? HA i’m glad you gave ur notice fam
asked ppl to ‘fill up the cup’ & u’ll do the same in 10 years as a homeless man
this is too straight forward for me

Quotes: switchboards, weighs in, carrying, curbside pickup, neon your neck
Close: UPN opener, got pipes, sparks fly, rigatonis

This was also a nice read. Curbside pickup was LOTB to me, weighs in and neon also standouts. Your quotes hit a little harder to me in general than User's. But also had more misses (reword, picking off the hair, closer).

Vote: Blue Bayou I read Users verse and thought he gave Blue space to walk away the win, but Blue had more misses than I'm used to seeing from him. Hard battle to call. I have User with a edge on consistency, but Blue has harder punches. This is really going to come down to style preference. Both had some really creative concepts, but I think I liked Blue's concepts+execution slightly better. I think User actually had more good concepts but let the wording slip on a couple that would have been quotes. Both are great writers, so this is about as close as it comes to as tie in my book as possible. But if only one can win, I would pick Blue for harder hits.

UPN Zuch 12-28-2020 01:58 PM

I see people viewing. Appreciate that guys, feel free to drop a vote as well for these guys.

Adverse 12-29-2020 07:32 AM

I didn’t really wanna vote between you two, read a couple of times and guess I’ll finally state what I think, for the record it’s close.

User:
Summer classic was a decent opener
Brick wall and amateur magic both good bars
Charlie okay
Sure, fire was decent
Tiny Tim was a decent reference
Pop song okay but kinda out of place
Tarantino nah
Claw machine Ehhh
Wasn’t overly feeling the blues wife bar
Closer is decent but funny

As for Blue:
.500 was jokes
Reword was really long winded and lacked impact
Switchboard was decent not too harsh
Weighs in was a burn. Ouch
Got pipes is okay
Drive a Prius was a funny visual and an okay bar
Eight and a half months was funny as well
Dropping a wing was decent
Curbside was decent
Techno rave is cool
Rigatoni’s is funny but brooo that rhyme didn’t work for me
Closer was okay but was just that

Both of you guys sort of fell off towards the end in my opinion, I think Blue had the more consistent verse but this an entertaining matchup definitely. User was maybe another quotable at the end away from taking this. But as it stands

V/Blue

UPN Zuch 12-29-2020 06:29 PM

Damn @evaD you figure it out homie?

Answer 12-29-2020 08:35 PM

Evads indecisive, don’t rush him zuch.

UPN Zuch 12-29-2020 08:52 PM

Blue Bayou wins 4-0 and advances.


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