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UPN Zuch 12-15-2020 11:15 AM

WILDCARD WEEK: #5 Dave VS #12 Adverse / ADVERSE ADVANCES
 
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Verses due 11:59pm PACIFIC December 18, 2020 (Friday)

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Good luck, gentlemen

evaD 12-15-2020 05:39 PM

Check, pics? 10?

Adverse 12-15-2020 06:57 PM

Why not

I’ll send a pretty one

Adverse 12-15-2020 07:04 PM

https://i.ibb.co/QC6vbpH/9-EB277-E6-...771-CC4-CD.jpg

evaD 12-16-2020 02:32 AM

https://i.ibb.co/PcGNdy6/3-C5-B63-CD...92-ADB0419.jpg

Orc 12-16-2020 04:17 AM

Go on Dave lad

evaD 12-18-2020 07:43 AM

https://i.ibb.co/QC6vbpH/9-EB277-E6-...771-CC4-CD.jpg

What are thoooooooooooooooooooose?


That whole outfit proves this fool never Mack it
I Haven’t seen red over camo looking so ugly since full metal jacket
You can judge a man by his surroundings and seeing those cars I know it’s over
Just look at that run down piece of trash in red AND the wreck over his shoulder
And I don’t give a shit what he say
He’s only stood in a dirt lot because he bought those kicks on eBay
Scraped into the playoffs, now this big softy needs some luck
He fought tooth and nail to get here?! those items could probably beat him up
Not even a pair of new kicks.. That’s the outfit I’ma bury you with
Felled by a foreigner; Tell the coroner he’ll be there in two ticks

Adverse 12-18-2020 12:00 PM

https://i.ibb.co/PcGNdy6/3-C5-B63-CD...92-ADB0419.jpg

LISTEN BITCH

Everybody else gives you praise but I’ll give you endless caps dude
Say u a legend in the making..till ur gettin carved with the metal like that Hendrix statue
And BELIEVE if it comes to hands this bitch gettin killed
Spotty ass beard...uppercuts give that ‘patch work’ till dude need more stitches than quilts
Knock you to the street with ease, you’re a guy I can tell ain’t macho
Y’all ain’t seen ‘a bitch get drug over bricks’ like this since Griselda Blanco
Dave’s a fucking bum bruh and that get-up lends facts to my claim
After they snapped the pic he sat down, shook that cup n started askin for change
I’m a wildcard fam cuz it wouldn’t take much for me to be a threat in this bitch
Dave’s a wildcard, too. I Can’t tell if he’s a Justin Bieber Stan or a lesbian chick

UserName 12-19-2020 06:09 AM

Dave -

That whole outfit proves this fool never Mack it
I Haven’t seen red over camo looking so ugly since full metal jacket
Scraped into the playoffs, now this big softy needs some luck
He fought tooth and nail to get here?! those items could probably beat him up

Overall, not your strongest verse. looooooved the opener, and while I get the misdirection attempt in the followup, I think it could've used some tinkering. Ebay and closer were kinda just a whiff for me. Sorry.

Adverse -


Everybody else gives you praise but I’ll give you endless caps dude
Say u a legend in the making..till ur gettin carved with the metal like that Hendrix statue
And BELIEVE if it comes to hands this bitch gettin killed
Spotty ass beard...uppercuts give that ‘patch work’ till dude need more stitches than quilts
Knock you to the street with ease, you’re a guy I can tell ain’t macho
Y’all ain’t seen ‘a bitch get drug over bricks’ like this since Griselda Blanco

Solid verse, man. Hendrix line was on the cusp of good, I quoted it, but it's a little TOO on the nose for me to be a really GREAT pic diss. Still, I'm giving half points for the attempt. Patch work was nice, Griselda blanco was inspired and dope. Change line and closer were a hard pass for me.

So ummmmmmmmmmmmmmm... I'm kinda torn here. Dave had LOTB to me in the full metal jacket line. But I've got Ad with like half a quote more. Griselda Blanco was a runner up for LOTB for me, so I guess, and I never saw this coming, I'm leaning Adverse?

I'm kinda shocked, no offense, but yeah. I'm going with Adverse.

Wow.

V - Adverse

UPN Zuch 12-19-2020 03:09 PM

Dave-

Full metal jacket was nice. I also like the misdirection with the over the shoulder bar. After that though, things started to cool of heavy. The eBay line I gotta be missing something, I just don’t see the connection s my bad.


Adverse-

Quilts and blanco bars were cool, and the change cup line hit as well. Nothing else after this.


This was a very close battle and a case of a really good writer hiring a rough spot, and adverse really starting to put it together. Was really looking forward to Dave in the quarters but I gotta go adverse here based on number of quotables. He had one more.

Good battle guys


Vote- adverse

fraze 12-20-2020 12:00 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by evaD (Post 796179)
That whole outfit proves this fool never Mack it
I Haven’t seen red over camo looking so ugly since full metal jacket
something is off to me about the wording but this still hits. creative.
You can judge a man by his surroundings and seeing those cars I know it’s over
Just look at that run down piece of trash in red AND the wreck over his shoulder
should have moved this away from the opener. these punches are too similar they steal impact from each other. misdirection punch is ok
And I don’t give a shit what he say
He’s only stood in a dirt lot because he bought those kicks on eBay
this is light
Scraped into the playoffs, now this big softy needs some luck
He fought tooth and nail to get here?! those items could probably beat him up
could probably - passive writing is bad. punch is light
Not even a pair of new kicks.. That’s the outfit I’ma bury you with
Felled by a foreigner; Tell the coroner he’ll be there in two ticks
i don't see a punch, my b if i missed it. rhyme is cool

Quotes: full metal jacket
Close: piece of trash in red

You usually drop harder than this, the verse feels rushed. I also feel like you could have done more with the pic. It feels weird you didn't touch the Christmas tree at all. Full metal was your best bar, didn't have a lot else.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 796200)
Everybody else gives you praise but I’ll give you endless caps dude
Say u a legend in the making..till ur gettin carved with the metal like that Hendrix statue
kinda obvious but well executed.
And BELIEVE if it comes to hands this bitch gettin killed
Spotty ass beard...uppercuts give that ‘patch work’ till dude need more stitches than quilts
wording in the punch is a little long but this still works
Knock you to the street with ease, you’re a guy I can tell ain’t macho
Y’all ain’t seen ‘a bitch get drug over bricks’ like this since Griselda Blanco
i like the concept but the flip doesn't work both ways as worded.
Dave’s a fucking bum bruh and that get-up lends facts to my claim
After they snapped the pic he sat down, shook that cup n started askin for change
funny. a little light but cool
I’m a wildcard fam cuz it wouldn’t take much for me to be a threat in this bitch
Dave’s a wildcard, too. I Can’t tell if he’s a Justin Bieber Stan or a lesbian chick
nah

Quotes: Hendrix, patch work
Close: Griselda, asking for change

Ok verse. No haymakers but the only real miss was the closer. I really wanted to like the Griselda Blanco bar, nice idea. Don't know what was up with that closer.

Vote: Adverse Feel like evaD could have made this closer, he definitely has the skill to compete, but the verse this week falls short. Adverse had a consistent drop, that neither over or underwhelmed. Nice pic battle.

Hush 12-20-2020 12:19 AM

Adverse got this
Fire verse

Good showing

iSpaz 12-20-2020 12:12 PM

Fmj, wreck kinda

Vs

Hendrix, patch work

V/ adverse. I've seen much better from dave before. ad came wit it

UPN Zuch 12-20-2020 12:17 PM

Adverse wins 5-0 and advances.


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