FINAL WEEK: Swerve 0-0 VS Doc Savage 0-0 SAVAGE WINS
 

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Good luck, gentlemen

How much u wanna go @Swerve

16?

Alright bud

Dagger precise as a needle, this cancer is past fucked,
I’ll wipe this disease from the earth so quick, Pfizer and Modena go bankrupt.
Too cold to hold, I’ll end your life don’t get it mistaken bruh,
If you’re feeling Randy, Savage – here’s a Flying Elbow for your trachea.
You’re a rookie at this shit, this pedo’ll end up in a ditch,
He’s known to Chase Young…and even the NFL player thinks you’re a bitch.
Switchblade shows you’re bitchmade, that verse aint got no promise,
If they say doctorate up, its the one on the wall at his gynecologist’s office.
When it comes to girls, you get none…your dating life toast,
This dude begging for the link so often that Ouch started taking notes.
Swerve’ll break your back, spine in two, I could go on and on,
I’ll leave that column so beaten and damaged it’ll look like the Parthenon.
Messiah when I spit, every verse is practically hallow,
And I’ll leave you hanging on every word…tree, rafters and gallows.
Clips are endless, pull that hammer back and spray,
Doc’ll get a barrel treatment so long, his blood’ll turn to Cabernet.

..talk about creative drive, smh

try to ride w/ the big boys & our text scene falls back
when Swerve gets IN my Laney Boggs it down; Freddie Prinze in 'She's All That'
this raw facts, paralysis sloweddd ur back movement
battlings not ur strong suit, the exoskeleton for what ur spine CAN'T do is
not bout street life. never keeps packs or squeeze gats
if we talkin numbers on this characters sheet, it's from rolling D&D stats
my diet plans are killer though. at 14% fat I drop weight
swerves cut phase in the teens left a memory of scars in his goth days
blue, uni, pulse, kung.. fuck even barcs making the tier
how you in the top 5 active when you're not even top 5 canadian here?
eagle ON the hip - leave Patrick's crew shot to shit
you'll see metal pop out the Desert faster than the Utah monolith
oh yeah..
my team walked by & seen ya wife by a street stop sign
said ur Ds small fry; we fit the right inches in her walls like them sheetrock guys
every morning she hears u bitch cause ur a known loser
u 'woke - on the wrong side' & she's in fo' war like an Alex Jones truther

Quotes: Pfizer/Moderna, Randy Savage, Parthenon, hanging on every word, barrel treatment
Close: doctorate up

Nice verse man, you have some bars. Good wording, clever concepts, you did your thing. Maybe could have quoted doctorate wp, but it hit kinda light to me.

Quotes: exoskeleton, characters sheet, cut phase, utah monolith
Close: Alex Jones

Liked the exoskeleton bar, that was nice. Had a couple misses mixed in, but overall a cool verse.

Vote: Swerve I have swerve taking this by a quote. Good battle on both sides, looking forward to reading more from you.

draw

Swerve -

Dagger precise as a needle, this cancer is past fucked,
I’ll wipe this disease from the earth so quick, Pfizer and Modena go bankrupt.
Too cold to hold, I’ll end your life don’t get it mistaken bruh,
If you’re feeling Randy, Savage – here’s a Flying Elbow for your trachea.
Swerve’ll break your back, spine in two, I could go on and on,
I’ll leave that column so beaten and damaged it’ll look like the Parthenon.

Those were your strongest to me. Chase Young was a solid idea, execution fell flat though. doctorate's a bit of an old wp, the flip was cool, but overall felt light in the punch. Ouch angle has been sorta done to death this year. trees, rafters and gallows was cool, i usually enjoy a good list punch, but this felt a little on the lazy side. still, overall, solid verse, you incorproate the setup into the punch well, and obviously know what you're doing.

Doc Savage -

not bout street life. never keeps packs or squeeze gats
if we talkin numbers on this characters sheet, it's from rolling D&D stats
blue, uni, pulse, kung.. fuck even barcs making the tier
how you in the top 5 active when you're not even top 5 canadian here?
eagle ON the hip - leave Patrick's crew shot to shit
you'll see metal pop out the Desert faster than the Utah monolith
my team walked by & seen ya wife by a street stop sign
said ur Ds small fry; we fit the right inches in her walls like them sheetrock guys

Laney Boggs wp was wtf-levels of no, lmao. Like, congrats on making it make sense, but that doesn't make it a banger. exoskeleton was also a no for me. cutting phase was just done by Zuch the week before last, and Alex Jones was light. That all said, Monolith was LOTB for me and I've got you with one more quote i liked than Swerve.

Cool battle, enjoyable read.

V - Savage

Dagger precise as a needle, this cancer is past fucked,
I’ll wipe this disease from the earth so quick, Pfizer and Modena go bankrupt.
Too cold to hold, I’ll end your life don’t get it mistaken bruh,
If you’re feeling Randy, Savage – here’s a Flying Elbow for your trachea.
Swerve’ll break your back, spine in two, I could go on and on,
I’ll leave that column so beaten and damaged it’ll look like the Parthenon.
Clips are endless, pull that hammer back and spray,
Doc’ll get a barrel treatment so long, his blood’ll turn to Cabernet.

Vs

not bout street life. never keeps packs or squeeze gats
if we talkin numbers on this characters sheet, it's from rolling D&D stats
eagle ON the hip - leave Patrick's crew shot to shit
you'll see metal pop out the Desert faster than the Utah monolith

V/swerve. stylistically i preferred his wording, column was fire and first 4 went hard. Whos doc savage alias? The monolith bar was dope, maybe some of the other bars went over my head but i didnt feel like googling anything.

sorry for not breaking this down but on phone and really wanna vote on thiss.. this is a clash of styles and both came pretty good with some bangers.. however when it breaks down to style and execution I got savage here...his wording was smoother and let.me flow thru the verse nicely.. on the other hand swerve had some simple wording for what could have been harsher punches..

Nice job tho for both but I got savage here

This was a nice read. Haven’t seen either of you before and both of you brought it. I think Swerve edged it with just consistent hits. Savage was more up and down but he had some bangers. Especially the Utah monolith bar. Cut phase was used just last week I think so that one was tainted a bit but nice nonetheless. Actually having reread I think I’m gonna call this a tie. Savage had the nameplays which were cool but maybe not the highs savage had

Vote - tie

this is randy savage vs monolith to me
monolith was dope and hit harder
wasn’t feeling much else from either
good to see swerve back at it

v/savage

I got savage


Monolith bar was dope


Haven’t heard of either of you guys. Not a fan of a lot of the wordplay but the wording and concepts were nice both ways. Lol @ the Laney Bogs bar. Good shit guys


Vote Savage