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WEEK 8: Adverse 4-3 VS Wanderer 4-3 WANDERER WINS

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Mannnn let’s go! You want to do 16?

16 done.. can drop whenever u like

Hmm ur last 4...

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
& Zuch lost but voters were scared. I’m calling that unfair..
Ur shocking top head robbery was the one genetics pulled off on ya hair
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
Gun bar plots in ur verses but no evidence of ur plans
Still no finished article.. & newspaper’s the only time residue’s on ya hands
BUT I’ll prove I let the bird fly if u don’t think I’m honest
Hand extended waiting for the finger motion to rock u, pinky promise
As for Ad getting pussy.. I’ve seen ur pics so it’s doubtful bro
For u pillow talk is pleading while I hold one over ya mouth & nose
Inspiring the youngins.. I’m a force that’s filled with adrenaline
If Ad’s influencing these kids it’s just corporate subliminal messaging
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors

16 bitch

Wand feeble so I draw eagles n shotties he gettin merked now indefinitely
Bring turkey day to the UK show ur fam
the spread then put the bird on his centerpiece
It’s been a tough couple battles, this time dude’s getting trashed by me
And way Zuch made you his bitch bet you’ll do reviews for the mag this week
My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
Ironic he got that bird physique and is an actual featherweight, right??
You’re literally Dave Lite, got a quarter of his skill n ur half his dang size
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish
Supposed to believe you a convicted killer sprayin k’s...bro ain’t no way
Only time ‘Wand gettin charged’ is when he feelin frisky tryna get into some anal play
Know you get a lot of Harry Potter references...the 9 give him more of that
Once I put that cap on his head it’ll tell me he’s bitch how’s that for a Sorting Hat?!
Summer classic was tragic, squeezed past me in last NBL...this time I’m aimin for the fences
Third time’s the charm, cus the trey’ll leave you hangin like a pendent

Wand

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
Gun bar plots in ur verses but no evidence of ur plans
Still no finished article.. & newspaper’s the only time residue’s on ya hands
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors

About average verse for you, those^were cool
Shocking top head robbery was an idea reach imo.
Same with pinky promise

Adverse

For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish

That^was dope, but man. Most of your verse missed. Not too many good usable ideas
Sorting hat was a good try, but it's been done better

Voting Wanderer

run/exercise was simple, okayish
top head was a lil reach.. but i liked the originality and it was funny
pliers was light
residue aight
pinky promise.. it was original lol
saw where pillow talk was gonna lead to, nah
i liked the ad line
closer was a banger

vs

centerpiece was wordy but cool
reviews was ok
art was a lil light
dang size lol nah wasnt feelin
never watched blackish
anal play is questionable
sorting hat was fiiiire
charm is old

wand dropped damn good last week.. took a lil gas off this week but last two lines hit.. there were two concepts that were reaches, coulda been fire too with some adjustments.. this was Ad’s battle to take - the middle part of his verse I just wasnt feelin.. sorting hat prob lotb for me but just wasnt enough..

v wand

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer (Post 793574)

Hmm ur last 4...

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
....no run flip/angle of this sort is gonna work for me personally
& Zuch lost but voters were scared. I’m calling that unfair..
Ur shocking top head robbery was the one genetics pulled off on ya hair
...that’s cool
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
... his teeth ? Diamonds ? I’m confused
Gun bar plots in ur verses but no evidence of ur plans
Still no finished article.. & newspaper’s the only time residue’s on ya hands
...eh
BUT I’ll prove I let the bird fly if u don’t think I’m honest
Hand extended waiting for the finger motion to rock u, pinky promise
... I fuck wit this
As for Ad getting pussy.. I’ve seen ur pics so it’s doubtful bro
For u pillow talk is pleading while I hold one over ya mouth & nose
...ok this is cool
Inspiring the youngins.. I’m a force that’s filled with adrenaline
If Ad’s influencing these kids it’s just corporate subliminal messaging
...eh
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors
..:different not bad at all

16 bitch

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 793605)

Wand feeble so I draw eagles n shotties he gettin merked now indefinitely
Bring turkey day to the UK show ur fam
the spread then put the bird on his centerpiece
....lol fire
It’s been a tough couple battles, this time dude’s getting trashed by me
And way Zuch made you his bitch bet you’ll do reviews for the mag this week
...lol ok ok
My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
...u going
Ironic he got that bird physique and is an actual featherweight, right??
You’re literally Dave Lite, got a quarter of his skill n ur half his dang size
...eh
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish
....what
Supposed to believe you a convicted killer sprayin k’s...bro ain’t no way
Only time ‘Wand gettin charged’ is when he feelin frisky tryna get into some anal play
...lol nah wtf u talking bout
Know you get a lot of Harry Potter references...the 9 give him more of that
Once I put that cap on his head it’ll tell me he’s bitch how’s that for a Sorting Hat?!
...lol great idea wish u tweaked it
Summer classic was tragic, squeezed past me in last NBL...this time I’m aimin for the fences
Third time’s the charm, cus the trey’ll leave you hangin like a pendent
...ok cool

Ad got this

Good battle

Genetics line
Pinky promise
Pillow talk
Closer

You are really putting shit together lately.

As you’re getting better

Opener was LOTB
Sorting hat was cool
Liked the closer

Quality battle here, ad had LOTB but it goes to wanderer for consistency

Nice fellas

Vote wanderer

This battle was fire tbh

Wanderer had a really good verse. Quite a few concepts I could see myself fucking with

Uninspired run, pointer pliers, pillow talk, pinky promise, ad/corporate .... These were all top level concepts with some good wording.

Adverse... Nice contrast in style. Intro, zuchs bitch, blackish ... All hitters. Personally lost me with the harry potter references. Not ur fault i just never watched them. So the verse tapered.

This goes to wand. Solid job fellas

WANDERER

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
Ok
& Zuch lost but voters were scared. I’m calling that unfair..
Ur shocking top head robbery was the one genetics pulled off on ya hair
Never heard the phrase top head robbery so that makes this a stretch
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
Bit basic
Gun bar plots in ur verses but no evidence of ur plans
Still no finished article.. & newspaper’s the only time residue’s on ya hands
I'm lookin for the wp but i cant find it. If there's none this is meh
BUT I’ll prove I let the bird fly if u don’t think I’m honest
Hand extended waiting for the finger motion to rock u, pinky promise
Wasn't feelin this, pinky promise seemed out of place.
As for Ad getting pussy.. I’ve seen ur pics so it’s doubtful bro
For u pillow talk is pleading while I hold one over ya mouth & nose
Cool
Inspiring the youngins.. I’m a force that’s filled with adrenaline
If Ad’s influencing these kids it’s just corporate subliminal messaging
Ok
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors
Decent closer

I liked pillow talk. After the opener I didn't like the next three, but you finished better. 6/10

VS

ADVERSE

Wand feeble so I draw eagles n shotties he gettin merked now indefinitely
Bring turkey day to the UK show ur fam
the spread then put the bird on his centerpiece
Way too wordy and the rhyme wasn't solid. Punch was decent though
It’s been a tough couple battles, this time dude’s getting trashed by me
And way Zuch made you his bitch bet you’ll do reviews for the mag this week
Ok
My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
Lol
Ironic he got that bird physique and is an actual featherweight, right??
You’re literally Dave Lite, got a quarter of his skill n ur half his dang size
Another bad rhyme. Kinda funny
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish
Cool wp
Supposed to believe you a convicted killer sprayin k’s...bro ain’t no way
Only time ‘Wand gettin charged’ is when he feelin frisky tryna get into some anal play
I was wit it until the punchline. Thought the charged part would've been more relevant
Know you get a lot of Harry Potter references...the 9 give him more of that
Once I put that cap on his head it’ll tell me he’s bitch how’s that for a Sorting Hat?!
Need some punctuation or rewording or something. I like the concept more than the way you worded the punch
Summer classic was tragic, squeezed past me in last NBL...this time I’m aimin for the fences
Third time’s the charm, cus the trey’ll leave you hangin like a pendent
Wasn't feeling

Stick figures made me laugh and axe was cool wp. 6/10

As for Ad getting pussy.. I’ve seen ur pics so it’s doubtful bro
For u pillow talk is pleading while I hold one over ya mouth & nose
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors

VS

My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish

After first read, neither verse was clearly better than the other and I have the quotables tied. I got exercise > sorting hat > centerpiece=charged for the honorable mentions. SO

Vote: Adverse

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer (Post 793574)

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
this is ok to light. the you're fat so you don't like to run punches have been done a lot, so that takes a little away but this isn't bad
& Zuch lost but voters were scared. I’m calling that unfair..
Ur shocking top head robbery was the one genetics pulled off on ya hair
don't like the wording but i get what you're doing. concept is cool, execution is a slight miss to me
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
this is cool. could have don't more with setup but still nice
Gun bar plots in ur verses but no evidence of ur plans
Still no finished article.. & newspaper’s the only time residue’s on ya hands
stretched to me as worded. ok concept
BUT I’ll prove I let the bird fly if u don’t think I’m honest
Hand extended waiting for the finger motion to rock u, pinky promise
not really a fan of this
As for Ad getting pussy.. I’ve seen ur pics so it’s doubtful bro
For u pillow talk is pleading while I hold one over ya mouth & nose
this is ok
Inspiring the youngins.. I’m a force that’s filled with adrenaline
If Ad’s influencing these kids it’s just corporate subliminal messaging
ok concept. but the angle you took hits light to me
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors
this is cool

Quotes: take pointers, pillow talk, house of mirrors
Close: uninspiring run, head robbery, subliminal messaging

Solid verse, there were a couple misses but I enjoyed the verse overall. A couple bars hit light to me but I liked most of your concepts.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 793605)

Wand feeble so I draw eagles n shotties he gettin merked now indefinitely
Bring turkey day to the UK show ur fam
the spread then put the bird on his centerpiece
this is kinda wordy, bruh. i want to like it but i can't get around it. maybe if you took out "show ur fam the spread"
It’s been a tough couple battles, this time dude’s getting trashed by me
And way Zuch made you his bitch bet you’ll do reviews for the mag this week
this is ok
My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
so many stick figure bars this week. this is kinda funny, but don't like the setup
Ironic he got that bird physique and is an actual featherweight, right??
You’re literally Dave Lite, got a quarter of his skill n ur half his dang size
don't really like this
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish
this is ok
Supposed to believe you a convicted killer sprayin k’s...bro ain’t no way
Only time ‘Wand gettin charged’ is when he feelin frisky tryna get into some anal play
light to me. not a huge fan of homoerotic bars
Know you get a lot of Harry Potter references...the 9 give him more of that
Once I put that cap on his head it’ll tell me he’s bitch how’s that for a Sorting Hat?!
cool concept.
Summer classic was tragic, squeezed past me in last NBL...this time I’m aimin for the fences
Third time’s the charm, cus the trey’ll leave you hangin like a pendent
this is ok

Quotes: Zuch's bitch, sorting hat, third time's the charm
Close: centerpiece, Wanda, getting charged

Also came with a good verse this week, with some nice bars mixed in with misses. there wasn't anything that was really bad per se, but also nothing blew me away.

Vote: Wanderer I have this even on quotes so tie breaker for me is who had the more creative punches. Between "take pointers"/"house of mirrors" and "sorting hat" Wand's stood out to me a little more. Very close battle, one of the best ones this week so props to both of you.

2 NS wins & 2 losses.. bald fatty not hyped or energised
On such an uninspiring run it resembles that 1 time u tried to exercise
& ur respected? LOL I can’t bear the liars
If I ever take pointers from u it’ll be with a pair of pliers
Inspiring the youngins.. I’m a force that’s filled with adrenaline
If Ad’s influencing these kids it’s just corporate subliminal messaging
Take advice.. ur trash so don’t doubt ur peers
Start reflecting.. cos finding ur punch is like losing something in a house of mirrors

Vs

It’s been a tough couple battles, this time dude’s getting trashed by me
And way Zuch made you his bitch bet you’ll do reviews for the mag this week
My bars are masterpieces, should be framed and fetch an amazin price
Closest you are to art is cuz you look like one them stick figures came to life
For this queer got ratchets, or maybe I’ll make you fear the hatchet
And watch the ‘axe take Wanda part’ like it’s tryna appear on black-ish
Know you get a lot of Harry Potter references...the 9 give him more of that
Once I put that cap on his head it’ll tell me he’s bitch how’s that for a Sorting Hat?!

I got this battle pretty even tbh, I'll have to edge towards v/adverse

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