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UPN Zuch 11-15-2020 05:35 PM

WEEK 7: Fracture 1-1 VS Aero 2-2 FRACTURE WINS
 
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Good luck, gentlemen

Aero 11-16-2020 11:58 AM

Check

Aero 11-17-2020 02:45 PM

@Fracture I need a check in. You work at a hotel you know how this goes bro.

16.

Fracture 11-17-2020 02:57 PM

Im showing my guy

Aero 11-19-2020 05:46 AM

Good. It's my birthday so taking the ext.

Fracture 11-20-2020 12:57 AM

Happy birthday homie.


*SCENE* ... You're soft. Imma get rid of you
You the type of black guy white kids comfortably dap and say nigga to
most women wont give puss to this creep
When he go to see a girl the only thing he puts in her bush is the screen
While im the king yo. The text scenes own Beatles
For every me tho theres more aeros than what bodied jet li in hero
Wisconsin? Yea.. Like Gein u make every lady dash quick
If only you could sniff the top 10 punches like you do Jamies mag pics
Im truly sorry, i like dood. But the shootings starting
You hear my gun go 'borraaattt'.. Now ur belly up like guiliani
Ya girl does her hair so I have something for grabbin
Next time u see her head, itll be pig tails.. ill havta lose em in traffic
He no killer. Any trigger squeeze is rumored
U went to an all white school.. Even then u were least likely to be the shooter
Already signed out... Aero a disgrace now
I'll hide his body in a landfill, he finally black from the waste down

Aero 11-21-2020 11:49 AM

*Scene*

After a long flight and a cab ride Aero is ready to check in to his hotel. He walks up to the front desk.

Receptionist: "Hello sir, can I get your registration information?"

*Aero casually hands over his phone. The receptionist takes the phone and starts to put in the numbers but then his eyes get big*

Receptionist: "Dude what the FUCK?!!!"

*Startled, Aero looks up.. its Fracture*

Aero: "Oh shit give me my phone bro that picture is NOT your wife I promise you!!"



Grabbed my ruger just to whip him, dont need a homi victim
I'm fighting over the screen with the long nose I'm '96 Scottie Pippen
He yelled "this thotty trippin'.. I took this pic!!" Frac went into a massive rage:
"I should've known, I said let's get your side profile & she's like he dont have a page"
Somehow Frac got my gun, then said disappear or beg for your life
All you heard was poof, the sound my anus made after getting pegged by his wife
Got her pregnant & felt the baby move, Grabbed guns & said it's not worth it right now
All you saw was slides under the kicker.. I'm tryna commit a personal foul
How'd it feel pretending to be black? It was Not a good look
Must've felt as empty as the rooms were telling Black people sorry we're booked
Listen, I hope I dont offend - it's my bday I'm out w my friends
True story, first 3 bars I called my girl to type.. I'm literally dialing it in
Bullets drench your bellhop outfit, put to sleep in a war zone
No fabric softeners, throw in white sheets from applied heat to your wardrobe

Fracture 11-21-2020 12:11 PM

Im gone lmao

sral 11-21-2020 02:51 PM

lmao side profile was nice

FGR 11-21-2020 04:49 PM

Frac

Opener didn't hit to hard but was funny as fuck
Bush was tough..I'm feeling it
Jetli and zuchs bitches mag pic didn't hit for me
Belly up line was nice
Pig tails didn't bring a ton of sting but I thought it was creative af

Then I kinda died off from there... Tough verse tho.. some good shit..I look forward to reading another

Aero

Opener hit...
Side profile was cool..nothing crazy but I ain't seen that flip b4
Pegged line was gay af and didn't hit him to hard.. flipped to diss him would have been a little harder
Empty rooms was nice
Another wife joke..meh
Closer didn't connect for me

Vote facture

This was a good read tho... His bars made me lol a little harder.. aero was nice to but he shinned lil harder

Scout 11-21-2020 05:27 PM

Frac

*SCENE* ... You're soft. Imma get rid of you
You the type of black guy white kids comfortably dap and say nigga to
most women wont give puss to this creep
When he go to see a girl the only thing he puts in her bush is the screen
While im the king yo. The text scenes own Beatles
For every me tho theres more aeros than what bodied jet li in hero
Wisconsin? Yea.. Like Gein u make every lady dash quick
If only you could sniff the top 10 punches like you do Jamies mag pics
Im truly sorry, i like dood. But the shootings starting
You hear my gun go 'borraaattt'.. Now ur belly up like guiliani
Ya girl does her hair so I have something for grabbin
Next time u see her head, itll be pig tails.. ill havta lose em in traffic

Last couple felt like filler
Pig tails was my favorite. Good verse


Aero

He yelled "this thotty trippin'.. I took this pic!!" Frac went into a massive rage:
"I should've known, I said let's get your side profile & she's like he dont have a page"
Got her pregnant & felt the baby move, Grabbed guns & said it's not worth it right now
All you saw was slides under the kicker.. I'm tryna commit a personal foul

Your anus bar was quite bad. Wtf
The rest didn't hit for me

Voting Fracture

Ajax 11-21-2020 11:59 PM

LOL. It feels like Aero is dropping a joke verse every time. Sometimes, apparently it works... sometimes, he’d be better off dropping a real verse. This time, it didn’t work. Pegging line. Wtf. There were several LOL moments in that verse, but all the wrong kind.

Frac won. The opener and shooter lines were on point. Jet Li was solid. Rest was enough to win.

Wanderer 11-22-2020 05:44 AM

Frac

Opener cool
Bush cool
Jet li also cool - great first three bars
Sniff the punches fire
Pigtails was dope

Aero

Side profile and personal foul were cool for what was a jokey verse but in all seriousness, your whole verse had me dying . Funny shit but yeh.. still, you never gonna win if you’re talking about anus sounds and saying shit like ‘ya girl pegging my anus’

I think you know that already though

Don’t change though Aero <3

Vote Frac

fraze 11-22-2020 07:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Fracture (Post 793192)
*SCENE* ... You're soft. Imma get rid of you
You the type of black guy white kids comfortably dap and say nigga to
harsh. just a statement tho, no flip.
most women wont give puss to this creep
When he go to see a girl the only thing he puts in her bush is the screen
ok. cool wording. could have set this up better
While im the king yo. The text scenes own Beatles
For every me tho theres more aeros than what bodied jet li in hero
this is cool
Wisconsin? Yea.. Like Gein u make every lady dash quick
If only you could sniff the top 10 punches like you do Jamies mag pics
ok
Im truly sorry, i like dood. But the shootings starting
You hear my gun go 'borraaattt'.. Now ur belly up like guiliani
ok. would have liked more setup for the movie thing
Ya girl does her hair so I have something for grabbin
Next time u see her head, itll be pig tails.. ill havta lose em in traffic
light diss
He no killer. Any trigger squeeze is rumored
U went to an all white school.. Even then u were least likely to be the shooter
cool concept. could have worded this to hit harder
Already signed out... Aero a disgrace now
I'll hide his body in a landfill, he finally black from the waste down
not feeling this

Quotes: Hero, top 10 punches, Borat.
Honorable Mention: all white school

Might just be a difference in style but I wish you used your setup line more effectively. You have a lot of concepts that hit light to me because they aren't set up.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Aero (Post 793326)
Grabbed my ruger just to whip him, dont need a homi victim
I'm fighting over the screen with the long nose I'm '96 Scottie Pippen
this is ok.
He yelled "this thotty trippin'.. I took this pic!!" Frac went into a massive rage:
"I should've known, I said let's get your side profile & she's like he dont have a page"
funny
Somehow Frac got my gun, then said disappear or beg for your life
All you heard was poof, the sound my anus made after getting pegged by his wife
please don't do this again
Got her pregnant & felt the baby move, Grabbed guns & said it's not worth it right now
All you saw was slides under the kicker.. I'm tryna commit a personal foul
this is cool
How'd it feel pretending to be black? It was Not a good look
Must've felt as empty as the rooms were telling Black people sorry we're booked
nice concept. needs a little tighter wording to keep the flow. also this diss is more against either black people or American racism than Fracture
Listen, I hope I dont offend - it's my bday I'm out w my friends
True story, first 3 bars I called my girl to type.. I'm literally dialing it in
funny but light
Bullets drench your bellhop outfit, put to sleep in a war zone
No fabric softeners, throw in white sheets from applied heat to your wardrobe
not feeling this

Quotes: Scotty Pippen, side profile, personal foul.

I like seeing something other than a standard battle verse. You're playing into your strengths of imagery and humor. It definitely backfires when you take it overboard, but if you get it figured out I can easily see you beating people with this style.


Vote: Fracture enjoyable reads on both sides. I think Aero came with enough punches to make his story verse competitive, if he had skipped out on the pegging bar and had a few more solid hits. Fracture has a more straightforward style but his consistency with punchlines did enough to give him the win.

UserName 11-22-2020 08:10 AM

Frac -

*SCENE* ... You're soft. Imma get rid of you
You the type of black guy white kids comfortably dap and say nigga to
most women wont give puss to this creep
When he go to see a girl the only thing he puts in her bush is the screen
Wisconsin? Yea.. Like Gein u make every lady dash quick
If only you could sniff the top 10 punches like you do Jamies mag pics
Im truly sorry, i like dood. But the shootings starting
You hear my gun go 'borraaattt'.. Now ur belly up like guiliani
Ya girl does her hair so I have something for grabbin
Next time u see her head, itll be pig tails.. ill havta lose em in traffic

Aero -

Grabbed my ruger just to whip him, dont need a homi victim
I'm fighting over the screen with the long nose I'm '96 Scottie Pippen
He yelled "this thotty trippin'.. I took this pic!!" Frac went into a massive rage:
"I should've known, I said let's get your side profile & she's like he dont have a page"
Got her pregnant & felt the baby move, Grabbed guns & said it's not worth it right now
All you saw was slides under the kicker.. I'm tryna commit a personal foul

lmao @ the anus line WOW. Frac got this, I'm being a little generous with Aero's quotes, but it was his birthday week - I'm sure he was busy. Cool battle tho guys, frac gets the w tho.

V - Frac

Adverse 11-22-2020 11:54 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by UserName (Post 793405)
Frac -

*SCENE* ... You're soft. Imma get rid of you
You the type of black guy white kids comfortably dap and say nigga to
most women wont give puss to this creep
When he go to see a girl the only thing he puts in her bush is the screen
Wisconsin? Yea.. Like Gein u make every lady dash quick
If only you could sniff the top 10 punches like you do Jamies mag pics
Im truly sorry, i like dood. But the shootings starting
You hear my gun go 'borraaattt'.. Now ur belly up like guiliani
Ya girl does her hair so I have something for grabbin
Next time u see her head, itll be pig tails.. ill havta lose em in traffic

Aero -

Grabbed my ruger just to whip him, dont need a homi victim
I'm fighting over the screen with the long nose I'm '96 Scottie Pippen
He yelled "this thotty trippin'.. I took this pic!!" Frac went into a massive rage:
"I should've known, I said let's get your side profile & she's like he dont have a page"
Got her pregnant & felt the baby move, Grabbed guns & said it's not worth it right now
All you saw was slides under the kicker.. I'm tryna commit a personal foul

I agree with these exact quotables. I LOVE Frac’s style you can feel the old school type of flow it’s kind of reminiscent of like grind time battles. I also love Aero’s ability to juggle between comedy and bars, although yeah the anus bar was admittedly a shot in the foot a little too far there lol

Frac got this with just harder bars all around. Pig tails was insane and boratttt was cool had a similar bar this week. The rest were solid he didn’t waste many opportunities dope battle though

V/Frac


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