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UPN Zuch 11-15-2020 05:30 PM

WEEK 7: Hotdogvendorman 2-0 VS Scout 2-0 SCOUT WINS
 
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Scout 11-15-2020 05:47 PM

This should be fun
12?

hotdogvendorman 11-15-2020 09:22 PM

Yoo

Scout 11-16-2020 12:15 AM

Heard you fat as fuckkk @hotdogvendorman
Aka Deon
Sup
I just saw the bronze bomber tuned up by some gypsy ..
Deontay's tests have been huge...3 buffets, 2 food trucks in 1 sitting
Only guilty of not showing, fans'd say this man had a clean run...
It's hard to shoot yourself in the foot when you can't even see one
Bet the thought of my shank inside your skull is pretty stressful..
Blade swarming. Mormon skateboarding..I'll shove-It in ya temple
They call me barc like they know me. It's totally strange
If I'm selling wolf tickets, your whole act is a coyote with mange
I copped a big chain for 13g. To mimic, you need green first
If U rock a big chain, burger king has been giving you free t shirts
Can't hide 400 lbs. so this is a body that I'm NOT covering up
If ya untraceable, it's because a whole pack of chalk wasn't enough
Never at large. Just large... Claim to be hard but you off the $
Your last mugshot was a mix of ketchup, barbeque sauce and honey
Type to say nothing when your father was molesting your sister
You only took sides if someone was not paying attention at dinner
Got thumbnails of ya wife going down, it's how I treat my phone
Ur thumbnails include batter & bits of brownie downed a week ago
I'm exposing bowels when bullets collide with that ass, kid
Irony'll be shitting out shards before you're put in a fiberglass casket

20
GL

hotdogvendorman 11-17-2020 05:10 PM

Quick work..
.
.
.
Kids another alias tryna spar w/ a great..
Thought you were cro/bar so I'm using 1 to pry ur jaw off ya face..
I don't just walk into battles w/o scoping around..
I Use the choppa to 'Scout the landscape' by leaving you in pieces all over the ground..
Funny U asked for this match... I'll leave ya faculty bothered..
..Zuch set you up for failure worse than a drunk mom & absentee father..
& Even ur chick is telling you man up..
Said I'm better by 'leaps & bounds' then jumped in my bed w the handcuffs..
See I was tryna hit w minimal time spent..
My dick had maaad interest & her camel toe sealed the deal w that 'fine print'..
My niggas Rollin 60 Crip & imbeded in the streets..
If you rollin 60 its like Zuch vs Blue except no1s EVER gonna read..
So how you figure you maneuvering enough to test me G?..
One uppercut'll 'send Scout South' like he's recruiting for the SEC..
U & ur boys ain't nowhere near a thugs route..
Ur a goofy & them niggas rats like the Mickey Mouse Clubhouse..
Ya prose so trash w no flow and swag..
How tf you up the ante Scout just to fold so fast ?..
Get checked for disrespect when the heats on aim..
Shots'll make you stay in ur lane w holes in ya top like a skeeball game..


Pz

Coop 11-18-2020 10:05 PM

SCOUT


I just saw the bronze bomber tuned up by some gypsy ..
Deontay's tests have been huge...3 buffets, 2 food trucks in 1 sitting
Just saw? Lil late but kinda funny. Shitty rhyme though
Only guilty of not showing, fans'd say this man had a clean run...
It's hard to shoot yourself in the foot when you can't even see one
I lol'd
Bet the thought of my shank inside your skull is pretty stressful..
Blade swarming. Mormon skateboarding..I'll shove-It in ya temple
Wasn't feelin this one
They call me barc like they know me. It's totally strange
If I'm selling wolf tickets, your whole act is a coyote with mange
Decent, points for the creativity
I copped a big chain for 13g. To mimic, you need green first
If U rock a big chain, burger king has been giving you free t shirts
Its.... ok...
Can't hide 400 lbs. so this is a body that I'm NOT covering up
If ya untraceable, it's because a whole pack of chalk wasn't enough
Better than the last bar
Never at large. Just large... Claim to be hard but you off the $
Your last mugshot was a mix of ketchup, barbeque sauce and honey
I lol'd again
Type to say nothing when your father was molesting your sister
You only took sides if someone was not paying attention at dinner
Probably my fav bar so far but it's starting to feel like everything a fat joke
Got thumbnails of ya wife going down, it's how I treat my phone
Ur thumbnails include batter & bits of brownie downed a week ago
Too similar to the mugshot bar. You prolly wrote them at the same time huh
I'm exposing bowels when bullets collide with that ass, kid
Irony'll be shitting out shards before you're put in a fiberglass casket
So-so closer


You shoulda went 12. Shoot the foot, wolf tickets, mugshot, pay attention were good. The fat jokes eventually got repetitive, and I wasn't really feeling the others. Solid showing though, I don't lol a lot.

7/10



VS


HDVM

Kids another alias tryna spar w/ a great..
Thought you were cro/bar so I'm using 1 to pry ur jaw off ya face..
Not my preferred type of bar. Almost a throwaway
I don't just walk into battles w/o scoping around..
I Use the choppa to 'Scout the landscape' by leaving you in pieces all over the ground..
High quality gun bar. Shoulda been the opener
Funny U asked for this match... I'll leave ya faculty bothered..
..Zuch set you up for failure worse than a drunk mom & absentee father..
'your drunk ___' instead of 'a drunk ___' woulda made it harsher. More braggadocio than a diss without it
& Even ur chick is telling you man up..
Said I'm better by 'leaps & bounds' then jumped in my bed w the handcuffs..
Avg 'fucked your girl' bar
See I was tryna hit w minimal time spent..
My dick had maaad interest & her camel toe sealed the deal w that 'fine print'..
Swaggy but not a harsh diss
My niggas Rollin 60 Crip & imbeded in the streets..
If you rollin 60 its like Zuch vs Blue except no1s EVER gonna read..
Ok
So how you figure you maneuvering enough to test me G?..
One uppercut'll 'send Scout South' like he's recruiting for the SEC..
Basic but ok
U & ur boys ain't nowhere near a thugs route..
Ur a goofy & them niggas rats like the Mickey Mouse Clubhouse..
Its like you're keyin at this point
Ya prose so trash w no flow and swag..
How tf you up the ante Scout just to fold so fast ?..
Definitely keyin
Get checked for disrespect when the heats on aim..
Shots'll make you stay in ur lane w holes in ya top like a skeeball game..
Creative, but not as good of a gun bar as your other one


I feel it's clear you put some effort in the first half of your verse- it's leaps and bounds better than the second half in terms of quality. Spittin your shit out loud its fire, sounds dope to a beat n shit. But when i analyzed it bar for bar, it's well written, but it didn't truly attack dude like what I'm looking for, conceptually. Specifically the opener, leaps & bounds, fine print, and the last couple bars.

6/10





Only guilty of not showing, fans'd say this man had a clean run...
It's hard to shoot yourself in the foot when you can't even see one
Type to say nothing when your father was molesting your sister
You only took sides if someone was not paying attention at dinner


VS

I don't just walk into battles w/o scoping around..
I Use the choppa to 'Scout the landscape' by leaving you in pieces all over the ground..



Vote: Scout

FGR 11-19-2020 09:23 AM

Shoot urself in foot
Took sides was lol
Untraceable

(Those two bars were cool.. the rest didn't hit for me... The fat jokes got played out to... Change it up)

Vs

Landscape
Zuch vs blue (mild tho..barely quoted)
Skeeball game was okish


..this battle is a tough call... All the first dude had was fat jokes with a few that hit okay and the second dude had alot of attempts but they weren't delivered right to supply sting... Alot of it fell flat.. seemed like a quick key...

Imma give the win to scout for the sides line

Vote scout ... hotdog just lacked the sting in most bars... Seemed like a quick written

Wanderer 11-19-2020 11:56 AM

HDVM

Scout the landscape was cool
Leaps and bounds, nice
Set you up for failure was decent

Scout

Shoot yourself in the foot ok
Wolf tickets dope
Took sides dope
Untraceable cool
Mugshot funny
Thumbnails funny
(although the last two weren’t the hardest imo)

I liked hdvm’s verse in parts and dug the wording. Had a fair few I wasn’t feeling though.. Scout was good too but similar in that the whole verse was fat joke based which bugs me.. fairly close.. ehh I gotta go for Scout overall was just feeling the read more

Vote scout

Eviction 11-19-2020 12:24 PM

@Scout
Shoot your self in the foot was dope, but I seen concepts like that before, I also feel like you’re spamming the fat bars too much. Wolf tickets was slick I like the way that bar was set up.


@Hotdog
Pry your jaw of your face was cool.

Other than that, I think scout is guilty of spamming fat bars, and hotdog had more old concepts than scout, I think the wolf tickets bar from scout was creative enough to win this one.

Aero 11-19-2020 12:53 PM

Scout - Coyote with mange was clever but I dont quite get what you're implying... big chain was cool... chalk wasnt enough was good... took sides was funny lol and clever but the fat jokes are a lot at this point....

Hotdog - leaps and bounds was good... fine print lol kinda dumb though...rollin 60s was really good... scout south was alright... Mickey mouse good rats I like... skeeball was pretty coool... started slow but got hot


Hotdog wins here. The fat jokes got old. About the same level of enjoyment but hotdog has the better verse.

iSpaz 11-19-2020 06:45 PM

I just saw the bronze bomber tuned up by some gypsy ..
Deontay's tests have been huge...3 buffets, 2 food trucks in 1 sitting
Only guilty of not showing, fans'd say this man had a clean run...
It's hard to shoot yourself in the foot when you can't even see one
Can't hide 400 lbs. so this is a body that I'm NOT covering up
If ya untraceable, it's because a whole pack of chalk wasn't enough
Never at large. Just large... Claim to be hard but you off the $
Your last mugshot was a mix of ketchup, barbeque sauce and honey
Type to say nothing when your father was molesting your sister
You only took sides if someone was not paying attention at dinner
Got thumbnails of ya wife going down, it's how I treat my phone
Ur thumbnails include batter & bits of brownie downed a week ago

vs

Kids another alias tryna spar w/ a great..
Thought you were cro/bar so I'm using 1 to pry ur jaw off ya face..
My niggas Rollin 60 Crip & imbeded in the streets..
If you rollin 60 its like Zuch vs Blue except no1s EVER gonna read..
So how you figure you maneuvering enough to test me G?..
One uppercut'll 'send Scout South' like he's recruiting for the SEC..
U & ur boys ain't nowhere near a thugs route..
Ur a goofy & them niggas rats like the Mickey Mouse Clubhouse..
Get checked for disrespect when the heats on aim..
Shots'll make you stay in ur lane w holes in ya top like a skeeball game..

cool battle. v/scout barely. idk if i dig fat jokes over nd over, but they were still legit bars. hotdog had some dope bars but not enough this time.

fraze 11-20-2020 12:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Scout (Post 792686)
I just saw the bronze bomber tuned up by some gypsy ..
Deontay's tests have been huge...3 buffets, 2 food trucks in 1 sitting
meh
Only guilty of not showing, fans'd say this man had a clean run...
It's hard to shoot yourself in the foot when you can't even see one
funny.
Bet the thought of my shank inside your skull is pretty stressful..
Blade swarming. Mormon skateboarding..I'll shove-It in ya temple
i get it but meh
They call me barc like they know me. It's totally strange
If I'm selling wolf tickets, your whole act is a coyote with mange
not feeling this
I copped a big chain for 13g. To mimic, you need green first
If U rock a big chain, burger king has been giving you free t shirts
funny
Can't hide 400 lbs. so this is a body that I'm NOT covering up
If ya untraceable, it's because a whole pack of chalk wasn't enough
cool
Never at large. Just large... Claim to be hard but you off the $
Your last mugshot was a mix of ketchup, barbeque sauce and honey
not feeling this
Type to say nothing when your father was molesting your sister
You only took sides if someone was not paying attention at dinner
ok. wording is a little off
Got thumbnails of ya wife going down, it's how I treat my phone
Ur thumbnails include batter & bits of brownie downed a week ago
nice concept.
I'm exposing bowels when bullets collide with that ass, kid
Irony'll be shitting out shards before you're put in a fiberglass casket
don't like this

Quote:

Originally Posted by hotdogvendorman (Post 792859)
Kids another alias tryna spar w/ a great..
Thought you were cro/bar so I'm using 1 to pry ur jaw off ya face..
ok. simple wp
I don't just walk into battles w/o scoping around..
I Use the choppa to 'Scout the landscape' by leaving you in pieces all over the ground..
lots of you all over place bars lately. might need a break for a while
Funny U asked for this match... I'll leave ya faculty bothered..
..Zuch set you up for failure worse than a drunk mom & absentee father..
this is cool
& Even ur chick is telling you man up..
Said I'm better by 'leaps & bounds' then jumped in my bed w the handcuffs..
nah
See I was tryna hit w minimal time spent..
My dick had maaad interest & her camel toe sealed the deal w that 'fine print'..
nope
My niggas Rollin 60 Crip & imbeded in the streets..
If you rollin 60 its like Zuch vs Blue except no1s EVER gonna read..
this doesn't hit to me
So how you figure you maneuvering enough to test me G?..
One uppercut'll 'send Scout South' like he's recruiting for the SEC..
too simple
U & ur boys ain't nowhere near a thugs route..
Ur a goofy & them niggas rats like the Mickey Mouse Clubhouse..
kinda light but ok
Ya prose so trash w no flow and swag..
How tf you up the ante Scout just to fold so fast ?..
statementish w/o more setup. light punch
Get checked for disrespect when the heats on aim..
Shots'll make you stay in ur lane w holes in ya top like a skeeball game..
this is ok

Scout - shoot yourself in the foot, burger king, untraceable. Took sides and brownie bits honorable mention. Solid verse you know what you're doing.

Hotdogvendorman - set up for failure was good. Opener, mickey mouse clubhouse and closer are ok. Have seen better from you, this is probably just an off week.

Vote: Scout - Deon had some lines but Scout had the better verse overall.

Ajax 11-20-2020 03:12 PM

This was really close. I liked hotdog’s wording and swagger a fair amount more than Scout’s. Hotdog also had less stretched concepts that fell flat. But, Hotdog also closed soft.. his last 6 weren’t nearly as good as his verse before that.

Scouts shoot yourself in the foot, coyote with mange, and a couple others were solid concepts... but there was also forced stuff and I’m not a fan of wordplay unless it’s really well done and worded perfectly.

In a close one, I think Hotdog won. Cool read.

dull boy 11-21-2020 11:04 AM

Vote - HVM

UPN Zuch 11-22-2020 01:02 PM

HVM normally coming with some heat but this one seems a bit rushed. Definitely some bars toward the end that were worded nice but were jut filler.

Scout came pretty nice. Couple bangers and the rest was decent. Enough to win.


Good battle.


Vote Scout

Fracture 11-22-2020 01:40 PM

Vote goes to scout

Hotdog had the openener, landscape and leaps and bounds were gas

Scout

Cant see foot, rock a chain, not traceable

Not traceable is lotb and his misses werent as missy

Good job to both


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