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Adverse 10-29-2020 01:35 PM

Election Day
 
Shhh...speak in whispers, surrender your talk
Thought police patrolling, throw em off the scent n get lost
They’ve taken our guns, freedom, they’ve defunded the cops
In 2023 people don’t exist, we’re all grey, gender less blobs
We’ve been hidin, anxiety’s at an all time high
Tentatively picking at my lips till all I taste is iron
Biden’s people at our door, Weapons loaded for Civil War
We’re all just jesters dancing for the president, fools inside his court
This is it, it’s hell, truly dystopia
Can anything else go wrong? The Wonder Years just broke up?!?
FUCK well then screw it, nothing else to live for, I throw up the cals
I slid out the back, poppin caps towards the crowd…
Damn liberals don’t believe in guns so they ain’t cappin back
I escape into the fog, the mist being dyed red by impending MAGA hats
Trump leads the charge dressed like Rambo, bandolier and the headband
Flicking fields of golden weed off his forehead, his stare is a deadpan
The two armies charge each other, I’m in the middle, is this the end of ‘Verse?
Blood and limbs fly, the screams of dismemberment…..well who won?!

Find out November 3rd

Concrete 10-30-2020 12:58 PM

It's a pretty cool and timely written here. Can't say I disagree with the message here, it's quite the spectacle. Liked the verse overall, the blobs and maga lines the highlights.

ACTIVATE SELF 11-26-2020 12:23 PM

You’re always going to encounter some resistance, flack or lack of general interest when it comes to political write ups. The obvious reason being, people are sensitive about their stances, but also, more common than not, is because we’ve all read and written them before, in some capacity or another. Still, a good piece, is still a good piece, and this, is a good piece.

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Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 790644)
Shhh...speak in whispers, surrender your talk
Thought police patrolling, throw em off the scent n get lost
They’ve taken our guns, freedom, they’ve defunded the cops
In 2023 people don’t exist, we’re all grey, gender less blobs

Uh more like 2021, but glad to see you’re noticing the signs.

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We’ve been hidin, anxiety’s at an all time high
Tentatively picking at my lips till all I taste is iron
Biden’s people at our door, Weapons loaded for Civil War
We’re all just jesters dancing for the president, fools inside his court
Yep. And wait until they start with the “social visits” to ensure your C.ertificate O.f V.accination I.dentification D.ocuments are in order. Fun times. I can’t wait!

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This is it, it’s hell, truly dystopia
Can anything else go wrong? The Wonder Years just broke up?!?
FUCK well then screw it, nothing else to live for, I throw up the cals
I slid out the back, poppin caps towards the crowd…
Damn liberals don’t believe in guns so they ain’t cappin back
I escape into the fog, the mist being dyed red by impending MAGA hats
Witty and humorous. Enjoyed.

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Trump leads the charge dressed like Rambo, bandolier and the headband
Flicking fields of golden weed off his forehead, his stare is a deadpan
Dope classic Americana and heartland imagery, caricature and parody.

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The two armies charge each other, I’m in the middle, is this the end of ‘Verse?
Blood and limbs fly, the screams of dismemberment…..well who won?!

Find out November 3rd
In conclusion: a person is smart, but people, well people are stupid!

Good shit, Verse. You have a real knack for creative visuals and satire. Your mechanics are also above par. Thanks for the read.


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