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UPN Zuch 10-26-2020 03:42 PM

WEEK 4: Orc 2-0 VS John Hensley 0-0 ORC WINS
 
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Orc 10-26-2020 03:58 PM

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john hensley 10-26-2020 04:51 PM

Lol.

Let's go 16.

john hensley 10-27-2020 03:27 PM

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UPN Zuch 10-29-2020 02:47 PM

John Hensley verse:


I wrote 2 verses for you, and the most amazing fact..
Is that u woulda got the L L off the top like I snatched your Kangol Hat.
You're already mad, thinkin you got the balls Henny has.
Mr. Freckles, I'll put more Red Dots on your chest than you already have.
Thinkin you're dope, but you're just lying instead.
Buggin, like the insect in the photo you're just Fly In Your Head.
Wrestle with the idea but I already won in the scripture.
Think I'm on the ropes til I hit you with a more beautiful backdrop than the 1 in your picture.
You're not Godly, just fodder, I dunno why I honestly bothered.
My verse made you cry so many tears it created those 2 bodies of water.
Trust me it ain't rude when I say you ain't fuckin w/ me dude.
It won't be that Camelback, when you're in the hospital Suckin on a Tube.
You used to be good, but now you can just tell that's a myth.
But it's like you stumbled backwards, because your style Fell off a Cliff.

UPN Zuch 10-29-2020 02:48 PM

Orc verse:


In high-school you was the man. The fuck happened to you?!

.


We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
You get no TV time & do the dishes so quick
Dog, pls ...U been ‘under the thumb’ wayyyy before this pic was posted
Yikes. What a stupiddd body type
With a physique so Fluffy it’d make Gabriel Iglesias sue for copyright
THE GOAT. U couldn’t box ina round with me
The talk is in doubt swiftly; looking like Silent Bob’s cousin Obnoxiously Loud Ricky
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”
Good job, buddy. You win that shit in a bet!?
This kid is inept — looking like uh-oh just got that Stimulus check.
Growth game soft & u always been a lame benevolent
Beard got soo many Patches it could help revolutionise Game Development

evaD 10-30-2020 11:17 AM

Kangol was cool but the LL part to it cane off a touch awkward
Freckles Was good
Fly in your head nice although technically it’s on his head
Camelback, fell off a cliff bodies of water all solid to round it out.

Nice observational verse, used the pic well to make disses but maybe focussed on that too hard for me

Addicted to drugs cool personal
Under the thumb took me a second but is nice
Fluffy and Ricky were ok
Stimulus was nice and flow perfect
Campaigning for change was fire maybe lotb for me
Patches was a dope closer


This was real close. I thought midway through orcs verse that Hensley had done enough but orc had three b2b bangers to close out which just edged it for me. Good stuff from both

Vote - orc

iSpaz 10-30-2020 02:20 PM

My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”


vs

Trust me it ain't rude when I say you ain't fuckin w/ me dude.
It won't be that Camelback, when you're in the hospital Suckin on a Tube.



both came with fire. had more hits than i put up, but they all sort of cancelled eachother out. it came down to these two lines for me. i'll have to v/orc by a hair.

UserName 10-30-2020 03:42 PM

Hens -

You're already mad, thinkin you got the balls Henny has.
Mr. Freckles, I'll put more Red Dots on your chest than you already have.
Wrestle with the idea but I already won in the scripture.
Think I'm on the ropes til I hit you with a more beautiful backdrop than the 1 in your picture.

Two strongest lines, imo. Camelback was cool, fell off a cliff was cool, just hit a little light to me. Nothing technically wrong with your verse at all, you've definitely still got the skill - wording needs a litle touch up in places, maybe dig a little deeper on the concepts - but a cool verse bro.

Orc -

We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”
Good job, buddy. You win that shit in a bet!?
This kid is inept — looking like uh-oh just got that Stimulus check.

solid little verse as well, not the best I've seen you come but the Dohpe line and campaigning for change lines were both well executed. The stimulus check line was straight jokes, i enjoyed that as well.

Tough call, I think John kinda rode the median here, everything in his verse was pretty much "decent", where Orc did the same, but his verse had higher highs, if that makes sense.

V - Orc

TOP iLL DRAGSTER TWO 10-30-2020 03:50 PM

Hens was solid. First 6 stood out a little more than the others


Orc had more standouts personally.

We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”

Really liked those

Good battle guys.

Vote Orc

Wanderer 10-30-2020 04:00 PM

This needs a bar by bar


I wrote 2 verses for you, and the most amazing fact..
Is that u woulda got the L L off the top like I snatched your Kangol Hat.
This is cool
You're already mad, thinkin you got the balls Henny has.
Mr. Freckles, I'll put more Red Dots on your chest than you already have.
This is def too simple
Thinkin you're dope, but you're just lying instead.
Buggin, like the insect in the photo you're just Fly In Your Head.
Cool idea but it’s kind of a stretch to say the fly is IN his head
Wrestle with the idea but I already won in the scripture.
Think I'm on the ropes til I hit you with a more beautiful backdrop than the 1 in your picture.
Ehh not overly keen on this one
You're not Godly, just fodder, I dunno why I honestly bothered.
My verse made you cry so many tears it created those 2 bodies of water.
Not feeling man but the wording helps this
Trust me it ain't rude when I say you ain't fuckin w/ me dude.
It won't be that Camelback, when you're in the hospital Suckin on a Tube.
Dope
You used to be good, but now you can just tell that's a myth.
But it's like you stumbled backwards, because your style Fell off a Cliff
Nah man

Vs

In high-school you was the man. The fuck happened to you?!

.


We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
This pic doesn’t scream drug addict to me which detracts impact unless I’m missing something
You get no TV time & do the dishes so quick
Dog, pls ...U been ‘under the thumb’ wayyyy before this pic was posted
Dope
Yikes. What a stupiddd body type
With a physique so Fluffy it’d make Gabriel Iglesias sue for copyright
Lol cool
THE GOAT. U couldn’t box ina round with me
The talk is in doubt swiftly; looking like Silent Bob’s cousin Obnoxiously Loud Ricky
Humorous again it’s ok
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”
Dope
Good job, buddy. You win that shit in a bet!?
This kid is inept — looking like uh-oh just got that Stimulus check.
[B]Don’t know enough about uh-oh for this to resonate my friend
Growth game soft & u always been a lame benevolent
Beard got soo many Patches it could help revolutionise Game Development
Lol good flip on a patchy beard concept
[/QUOTE]


I enjoyed this battle a lot but in the end there’s gotta be a winner and that has to be Vote - Orc

Fracture 10-30-2020 08:08 PM

Hens.... Fly in your head was good. Rest of the verse was witty but didnt really hit.

Orc... Opener, campaigning and patches were fuego

Vote orc

Saint 10-30-2020 09:41 PM

Hens had a decent pic verse, nothing fire but consistent in a sense
Tube, Fly was decent, opener ok
some were obvious to me or was rust showing I guess
like the water/tears bar was out of 2005 or something but still a cool verse & wording was great

Orc, opener swag, campaign then stimulus stood out. closer was ok but looked more creative after reading hens verse.. idk

I've got Orc here

V ORC

Technically good battle on both sides w/ wording and pic disses. Orc had a bit more creativity & bars had swag and attitude in the delivery.

Kuality 10-31-2020 02:49 AM

Definitely not the best hens verse ive read. Concepts are legit strong but execution was super plain. Guess he keyed that verse.

Orc had some dope shit. Better execution.

V- orc

Victor. 10-31-2020 12:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Zuch (Post 790649)
John Hensley verse:


I wrote 2 verses for you, and the most amazing fact..
Is that u woulda got the L L off the top like I snatched your Kangol Hat.
I can dig this, two concepts going. relevant . good opener
You're already mad, thinkin you got the balls Henny has.
Mr. Freckles, I'll put more Red Dots on your chest than you already have.
this is way too simple bro. would have had to add another angle to this at the least.
Thinkin you're dope, but you're just lying instead.
Buggin, like the insect in the photo you're just Fly In Your Head.
yeah this is dope. everything worked perfect here
Wrestle with the idea but I already won in the scripture.
Think I'm on the ropes til I hit you with a more beautiful backdrop than the 1 in your picture.
this is fire to me
You're not Godly, just fodder, I dunno why I honestly bothered.
My verse made you cry so many tears it created those 2 bodies of water.
nah man, this is simple. so simple its kinda cringe worthy. this should have never made it into the verse
Trust me it ain't rude when I say you ain't fuckin w/ me dude.
It won't be that Camelback, when you're in the hospital Suckin on a Tube.
this is one of those lines where I get it, but it just isnt good to me
You used to be good, but now you can just tell that's a myth.
But it's like you stumbled backwards, because your style Fell off a Cliff.
huh? this isnt it bro

Quote:

Originally Posted by Zuch (Post 790651)
Orc verse:


In high-school you was the man. The fuck happened to you?!

.


We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
nice. good opener
You get no TV time & do the dishes so quick
Dog, pls ...U been ‘under the thumb’ wayyyy before this pic was posted
this is dope. nice ammo use
Yikes. What a stupiddd body type
With a physique so Fluffy it’d make Gabriel Iglesias sue for copyright
eh, this is like ok but its just there
THE GOAT. U couldn’t box ina round with me
The talk is in doubt swiftly; looking like Silent Bob’s cousin Obnoxiously Loud Ricky
lol not nah
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”
this is a cool flip. works wit the pic
Good job, buddy. You win that shit in a bet!?
This kid is inept — looking like uh-oh just got that Stimulus check.
Hate these kinda lines
Growth game soft & u always been a lame benevolent
Beard got soo many Patches it could help revolutionise Game Development
this is aight. feels lazy.


this was way closer than I thought it was going to be. Hens suprised me an had some fire. really hit hard when it landed. the misses tho. verse editing was an issue here. Orc matched the fire equally and just missed less. or missed closer to the target. I loved this battle for how close it was, but I wanted to see some meaner stuff said. Still I enjoyed the competition level here


props to both. kudos to Hens for hanging in there


vote Orc

Blue Bayou 11-01-2020 01:37 PM

I wrote 2 verses for you, and the most amazing fact..
Is that u woulda got the L L off the top like I snatched your Kangol Hat.
The L L angle is cool here with the personal tie ins... nice opener
You're already mad, thinkin you got the balls Henny has.
Mr. Freckles, I'll put more Red Dots on your chest than you already have.
this shouldve been further developed.. too obv as is
Thinkin you're dope, but you're just lying instead.
Buggin, like the insect in the photo you're just Fly In Your Head.
cool pic concept but IN your head throws me off here... fly off the dome or somethign wouldve made this cleaner
Wrestle with the idea but I already won in the scripture.
Think I'm on the ropes til I hit you with a more beautiful backdrop than the 1 in your picture.
cool attack bar and use of the pic
You're not Godly, just fodder, I dunno why I honestly bothered.
My verse made you cry so many tears it created those 2 bodies of water.
wordings great but this is pretty mehh
Trust me it ain't rude when I say you ain't fuckin w/ me dude.
It won't be that Camelback, when you're in the hospital Suckin on a Tube.
Pretty cool
You used to be good, but now you can just tell that's a myth.
But it's like you stumbled backwards, because your style Fell off a Cliff
okay closer

Vs

In high-school you was the man. The fuck happened to you?!

.


We r not comparable. Lemme explain the differences bud:
I beat every last member of DOHpe. & U ended up addicted to drugs
not really pic specific but good double personal to open
You get no TV time & do the dishes so quick
Dog, pls ...U been ‘under the thumb’ wayyyy before this pic was posted
pretty nice
Yikes. What a stupiddd body type
With a physique so Fluffy it’d make Gabriel Iglesias sue for copyright
lol funny
THE GOAT. U couldn’t box ina round with me
The talk is in doubt swiftly; looking like Silent Bob’s cousin Obnoxiously Loud Ricky
cool swag this was funny
My style is Progressive. I’m the type to do bits
Your idea of Campaigning for Change is “please, bro. I got a wife & two kids”
seen this idea during the obama years, loosely pic relevant but yeah it works.. cool
Good job, buddy. You win that shit in a bet!?
This kid is inept — looking like uh-oh just got that Stimulus check.
like the wording and swag here... not a haymaker but its cool
Growth game soft & u always been a lame benevolent
Beard got soo many Patches it could help revolutionise Game Development
i dunno i wouldnt say hisbeard is overly patchy tbh, but this concept is fire


Nice battle guys great to see Hens back dropping again
Hens you had 3 or 4 pretty dope bars but some misses that were just too basic for me which made it a bit hit or miss consistency wise, but thats to be expected barely battling for a decade
Orc pretty consistent verse with a good blend of comedy and hard personals

I think Orc was a little more consistent in this one... top 3 for each was pretty close but hens just had a few more misses... props to both

Vote Orc


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