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UPN Zuch 10-09-2020 01:51 PM

WEEK 2: Wanderer 0-1 VS Universe 0-1 WANDERER WINS
 
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Universe 10-09-2020 03:15 PM

Hey, Wand.

16.

Wanderer 10-09-2020 03:51 PM

Sure why not

Universe 10-10-2020 11:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Universe
Like a mime in a box, you really don't know what you're up against

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wanderer
Making so many barriers for urself. U only dope creatively as a mime artist

I don't believe in coincidences...

The sky is his limit, I'll polish Wand off quick with a high end finish
His punches backfire or hit nothing but air, 9/11 jumpers final decisions
You going nowhere fast like treadmills, how does Bomb Bard's dirt taste?
Ain't hard to see Wander in Shambles, that's how Spree caught up in the first place
A failure of Titanic proportions mate, least your crew cut fits now
I guess everything had to be ship shape before he went down...
How's white bread the toast of the town with a Harry Potter wand?
You that awkward slob at Comic-con no one really wants to comment on
So keep wandering around, Davey Crockett - This vagrant's begging for wallets
Seems like you preaching to a choir... any loose change in our pockets
Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam
You a pre-pubescent non-lethal weapon, I bet that heater's bustin'
Least it’s somethin', cuz this jerk off never creates anything of substance
He must be a jack of all trades but a Master of none
Don't gotta padaWan verse once begun... That shit was nerfed from the jump.

Done.

Wanderer 10-11-2020 05:09 PM

No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
Checked ur open mics. That shit’s only impressing gay boys
Entitled that thread ‘Still Birth’ cos what u Deliver never makes noise
Yeh I’m calling u out & if u talk back to me I’ll stomp that
Then ur only Cagey response’ll be boken ribs reacting to the contact
All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
Stick to open mic. Faggot writing shit & calls it art
Ur a bitch so imm’a pull the hairpins til ur entire wig falls apart
Shouldn’t be allowed to vote. U got nothing don’t pretend u best
How can u Pick Holes in my lines when u’ve never even made a dent in text
Just laughable bars so keep up the fun. I’ll win.. u’ll forgive me that son
water under the bridge come natural cos u likely a troll & prob sleep under one
Cross me i give the green light.. believe my soldiers are mean
I pay real money for a players head u can call it Fifa ultimate team

TOP iLL DRAGSTER TWO 10-11-2020 09:38 PM

9/11
Elisa Lam was dopeeeee

Vs

Drop jaw
Stillborn
Planets bar was fucking lotb

Both you guys getting better

Wanderer your first half was some good shit. Planet bar is witty as fuck and worded real well. Fell off after that, but it was enough.


Vote - wanderer

iSpaz 10-12-2020 12:31 AM

No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
Checked ur open mics. That shit’s only impressing gay boys
Entitled that thread ‘Still Birth’ cos what u Deliver never makes noise
All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
Shouldn’t be allowed to vote. U got nothing don’t pretend u best
How can u Pick Holes in my lines when u’ve never even made a dent in text please

Vs

The sky is his limit, I'll polish Wand off quick with a high end finish
His punches backfire or hit nothing but air, 9/11 jumpers final decisions
Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam
You a pre-pubescent non-lethal weapon, I bet that heater's bustin'
Least it’s somethin', cuz this jerk off never creates anything of substance

this battle was cool, wand just went a little harder imo v/wand

Blue Bayou 10-12-2020 01:49 AM

University won for sure

Barcotic 10-12-2020 08:39 PM

Uni
Backfires was good, could've ben great
Acquire loose change was well done, old wp tho
Tank top off was dope, possibly lotb
Padawan had potential but nah, nerfed angle was weak

Wand
Firsthand was decent
Still birth was good
Studying universe was dope, tied for lotb

Close, had to come back to it...

Came down to acquire vs. Firsthand
Creative edge to Wand
Mvgt Wanderer

Ajax 10-14-2020 04:51 PM

This was another entertaining battle. Not quite as good as the Blue/Dave battle, but very close and each came with some entertaining and witty concepts. Conceptually, I think Universe had slightly more complex/witty ideas (9/11 jumpers, ship shape, and a choir were highpoints), and Wanderer had more direct/easier to follow punches (planets and under the bridge were the ones I thought did the most damage)..

This is hard to vote on, but..

I think Universe edged it out barely. Good read, guys. Cheers.

Destroyer 10-14-2020 11:10 PM

Elisa lam was mean as fuck god damn
Sadly, I wasn’t feeling much else from universe

Wand had still birth,
Studying universe (lmao) and pick holes

V/wAnd

evaD 10-15-2020 02:45 AM

The sky is his limit, I'll polish Wand off quick with a high end finish
His punches backfire or hit nothing but air, 9/11 jumpers final decisions
Cool
You going nowhere fast like treadmills, how does Bomb Bard's dirt taste?
Ain't hard to see Wander in Shambles, that's how Spree caught up in the first place
Not sure on this one
A failure of Titanic proportions mate, least your crew cut fits now
I guess everything had to be ship shape before he went down...
Feel like there was more to this concept maybe. It’s ok
How's white bread the toast of the town with a Harry Potter wand?
You that awkward slob at Comic-con no one really wants to comment on
Nice flow here
So keep wandering around, Davey Crockett - This vagrant's begging for wallets
Seems like you preaching to a choir... any loose change in our pockets
Cool
Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam
damn
You a pre-pubescent non-lethal weapon, I bet that heater's bustin'
Least it’s somethin', cuz this jerk off never creates anything of substance
Cool
He must be a jack of all trades but a Master of none
Don't gotta padaWan verse once begun... That shit was nerfed from the jump.
padawan verse doesn’t really work both ways but I see what you did


No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
You bastard I was gonna use this concept this week til I peeped this battle early. Nice
Checked ur open mics. That shit’s only impressing gay boys
Entitled that thread ‘Still Birth’ cos what u Deliver never makes noise
Cold af
Yeh I’m calling u out & if u talk back to me I’ll stomp that
Then ur only Cagey response’ll be boken ribs reacting to the contact
Cool, I think cagey response coulda been brought in better like “if he gives a cagey response it’s because..”
All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
Fire
Stick to open mic. Faggot writing shit & calls it art
Ur a bitch so imm’a pull the hairpins til ur entire wig falls apart
Nice
Shouldn’t be allowed to vote. U got nothing don’t pretend u best
How can u Pick Holes in my lines when u’ve never even made a dent in text
Bit light
Just laughable bars so keep up the fun. I’ll win.. u’ll forgive me that son
water under the bridge come natural cos u likely a troll & prob sleep under one
Troll kinda played and wording a bit janky
Cross me i give the green light.. believe my soldiers are mean
I pay real money for a players head u can call it Fifa ultimate team
Cool braggish bar


Universe has some cool ideas and writes well but I think he needs to rejig his style so each couplet is focussed on ending with the joke of that makes sense. Maybe I’m being narrow minded as that’s what everyone does but it just hits harder for me. Wand had a bunch of cool stuff and did enough for the W. Good battle though.

Vote - wand

UserName 10-15-2020 03:05 PM

Uni -

A failure of Titanic proportions mate, least your crew cut fits now
I guess everything had to be ship shape before he went down...
So keep wandering around, Davey Crockett - This vagrant's begging for wallets
Seems like you preaching to a choir... any loose change in our pockets
Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam

Cool verse, big switch up from last week, was expecting more of the same and was pleasantly surprised. I dug the setup/punch link to the titanic line, loose change was dope, Elisa Lam was fire.

Wand -

No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
Just laughable bars so keep up the fun. I’ll win.. u’ll forgive me that son
water under the bridge come natural cos u likely a troll & prob sleep under one

Dope verse Wand, even the stuff I didnt quote wasn't bad, just a bit light. Studying Universe was dooooope.

I think Wand edged it, tied on quotables, but I'm giving the nod to the Universe nameplay over the Elisa Lam bar. Solid battle, fellas.

V - Wand

Mac 10-15-2020 03:30 PM

The sky is his limit, I'll polish Wand off quick with a high end finish
His punches backfire or hit nothing but air, 9/11 jumpers final decisions
okk

You going nowhere fast like treadmills, how does Bomb Bard's dirt taste?
Ain't hard to see Wander in Shambles, that's how Spree caught up in the first place
ehh

A failure of Titanic proportions mate, least your crew cut fits now
I guess everything had to be ship shape before he went down...
titanic played

How's white bread the toast of the town with a Harry Potter wand?
You that awkward slob at Comic-con no one really wants to comment on
not hard hitting

So keep wandering around, Davey Crockett - This vagrant's begging for wallets
Seems like you preaching to a choir... any loose change in our pockets
cool

Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam
fire

You a pre-pubescent non-lethal weapon, I bet that heater's bustin'
Least it’s somethin', cuz this jerk off never creates anything of substance
nop

He must be a jack of all trades but a Master of none
Don't gotta padaWan verse once begun... That shit was nerfed from the jump.
dont get this

vs.

No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
cool

Checked ur open mics. That shit’s only impressing gay boys
Entitled that thread ‘Still Birth’ cos what u Deliver never makes noise
ehh

Yeh I’m calling u out & if u talk back to me I’ll stomp that
Then ur only Cagey response’ll be boken ribs reacting to the contact
not getting this

All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
lolll

Stick to open mic. Faggot writing shit & calls it art
Ur a bitch so imm’a pull the hairpins til ur entire wig falls apart
ehh

Shouldn’t be allowed to vote. U got nothing don’t pretend u best
How can u Pick Holes in my lines when u’ve never even made a dent in text
cool

Just laughable bars so keep up the fun. I’ll win.. u’ll forgive me that son
water under the bridge come natural cos u likely a troll & prob sleep under one
nope

Cross me i give the green light.. believe my soldiers are mean
I pay real money for a players head u can call it Fifa ultimate team
cool

close battle.. too long tbh if both came 10 this could have been more toughh. universe came dope and wanderer too but wanderer has the experience factor, which gave him the edge here for a more consistent verse. good stuff but my v/ goes for wanderer

Hush 10-15-2020 06:43 PM

Universe that opener was really good


You have a ton of potential


Wanderer just had the edge of a veteran here


Good battle


That fifa bar was insane tbh

Blue Bayou 10-15-2020 09:02 PM

The sky is his limit, I'll polish Wand off quick with a high end finish
His punches backfire or hit nothing but air, 9/11 jumpers final decisions
okay cool concept, solid open
You going nowhere fast like treadmills, how does Bomb Bard's dirt taste?
Ain't hard to see Wander in Shambles, that's how Spree caught up in the first place
sorry bro im missing it
A failure of Titanic proportions mate, least your crew cut fits now
I guess everything had to be ship shape before he went down...
yeah this is cool to me... original concept delivered with swag
How's white bread the toast of the town with a Harry Potter wand?
You that awkward slob at Comic-con no one really wants to comment on
haha this bar was very different stylistically from the nbl norm.. i dig it tho flow was impeccible and it was funny to me
So keep wandering around, Davey Crockett - This vagrant's begging for wallets
Seems like you preaching to a choir... any loose change in our pockets
old wordplay but the flip is coolish, like the misdirection
Looking like Mark Ruffalo's hangry cousin, you rip off shirts to be a man
But I can see the bitch in you when you take the tank top off, Elisa Lam
jesus christ.. this is fire. at first i didnt like the pause right to the name drop at the end but nah it works great
You a pre-pubescent non-lethal weapon, I bet that heater's bustin'
Least it’s somethin', cuz this jerk off never creates anything of substance
cool wording , this was ight
He must be a jack of all trades but a Master of none
Don't gotta padaWan verse once begun... That shit was nerfed from the jump.
this one is too rough around the edges for me


No idea who u are but that verse last week was a bore
& coz u didn’t wow Firsthand my initial punch will drop ur jaw
ill give the multi a pass due to accent.. cool concept
Checked ur open mics. That shit’s only impressing gay boys
Entitled that thread ‘Still Birth’ cos what u Deliver never makes noise
nice, this is cool
Yeh I’m calling u out & if u talk back to me I’ll stomp that
Then ur only Cagey response’ll be boken ribs reacting to the contact
maybe couldve been tweeked a bit but cool original concept here
All eyes on my physique. Ain’t a girl I can’t get a glint from
Chicks only studying universe cos u got em considering other planets to live on
i dont get all the hype for this bar personally... seems pretty basic and obvious to me tbh...okay nameplay
Stick to open mic. Faggot writing shit & calls it art
Ur a bitch so imm’a pull the hairpins til ur entire wig falls apart
niice, cool gun bar
Shouldn’t be allowed to vote. U got nothing don’t pretend u best
How can u Pick Holes in my lines when u’ve never even made a dent in text
ehhh
Just laughable bars so keep up the fun. I’ll win.. u’ll forgive me that son
water under the bridge come natural cos u likely a troll & prob sleep under one
water under the bridge / troll concepts are played as an idiom and the wording feels off... this is a miss for me
Cross me i give the green light.. believe my soldiers are mean
I pay real money for a players head u can call it Fifa ultimate team
nice pretty cool concept and "i got shooters" gun bar


Cool battle guys. Elisa Lam was very dope....I want to vote Uni cause i dug his unique approach and thought he had some really cool concepts....but so did Wand, and i do think he was a bit more consistent.. both had a couple whiffs tho... close call but yeah im going Wand....props fellas


Vote Wanderer


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