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Rnd1 - Username vs Adverse { Username wins }

10 lines
Due tonight

@UserName @Adverse

You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them?
I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer
"Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years"
AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot
Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot
You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years
I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier
This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot?
Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot

You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b
Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40
Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back
It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that
How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny
No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!"
I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind
Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife
Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop
Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops

verse was ok
sharp is a lil light
interstellar was jeebus, wow
lightwork worked heavy.. solid
filler close

vs

40s cool
physique is a goodie
user panel was a bit long.. actually had a similar concept while writing, this coulda been worded way better
feelin the concept again.. needed rewording tho
feelin the chamber jawn but cuz ive seen variations

after the first two lines of adverse shit i was like here wee goo.. unfortunate it trailed at the end.. user has superb wording that can take a ehh line into something thats decent or above avg .. which is tough to beat if ur not consistent.. this is still close tho but that interstellar line leaned me sideways, fuckin nasty

v user

User

Felt everything except 7 years

Ad

Opener was fire
Travolta cool
Closer cool

Ad you actually came pretty correct here but user put a bomb together here

Vote user

Nice battle fellas this was a good read

User - opener (worded great) , interstellar is so damn dope, and chandelier

Ad - Overshadow, User Panel was creative and cool, Preston

I have quotables even but Users superior wording and delivery of his conepts + Interstellar botb puts him over the edge imo .. interstellar was such a dope concept ... Props to both

Vote User

You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them?
cool opener, nice execution/wording
I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer
"Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years"
played concept
AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot
Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot
i wanna know what made you think into Stella was a dope wp, but aside from that this was a nice bar
You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years
I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier
ok
This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot?
Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot
nah

Vs

You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b
Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40
wasnt feelin this
Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back
It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that
lol ok
How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny
No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!"
i got lost after the 49th word in this stretched bar man, idk what this means
I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind
Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife
cool
Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop
Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops
decent closer

Pretty close battle here but I have username edging it for harder hitting lions

Vote UserName

You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them?
clever
I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer
"Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years"
could take or leave it
AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot
Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot
good fucking god
You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years
I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier
seen stuff like this before tbh
This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot?
Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot
feels like it's missing something. little statementish for my taste

You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b
Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40
dope
Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back
It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that
cool
How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny
No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!"
weirdly worded but I love the concept
I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind
Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife
rip. okay
Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop
Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops
the 'want to' is a little awkward. I get that it's a key but this could've been done better

Interstellar is absolutely the line of the battle if not the round/tourney but Adverse almost had this. I think with slightly better wording on one or two more of the bars he would've taken it

v/User

Quote:

Originally Posted by UserName (Post 781569)

You write like the most sedated human, sat medicated droolin'
How's it feel to be the worst 'Verse on a site that's dedicated to them?
thats pretty dope. I typically hate. like half nameplays, or giving ppl nicknames to nameplay them, but this just fits. I almost called him Verse in the mag a few times. It dont feel forced so Im wit it
I asked Sharp what to write about him in the mag, he wrecked this queer
"Sharp: Just tell him he's improving; we've been doing that for seven years"
lol didnt notice how long adverse been here... this hit lol
AND you’re fat, Jesus, I wish that I could get this fella shot
Cuz you’re more about stealing seconds from your fam than Interstellars plot
this is tight. i get it, and never saw the movie. i imagine its some sort of time hiest .i know it involves stealing time. this hits.
You look like a dyke electrician who hasn't had a man in years
I told Hush to handle my lightwork, he sent Ad to install my chandelier
this seems too statemental. I dont like it bro
This topical queen, you think you'll get the upset maggot?
Here's a better plan, go back to writing 80 bars about a Sunset, faggot
lol well that was straight foward

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse (Post 781585)

You got a million ways to die, diabetes, heart disease, the list isn't short, b
Or I can do him execution style with the gat, only thing certain, you won't live to see .40
thats fire. wish u would of referenced a blindfold in the setup , it would of helped the visual. still hit. good line
Oh look another UPN head, Zuch is a beast but bruh you need to go back
It speaks to how weak your craft is that you can even be overshadowed with a physique like that
eh. its ok. not clever enough almost. ur basically just saying ur fat and have a big shadow. I mean its ok, but u used alot of syllables here to not say much. i feel like this line missed an element that could of took it over the top
How the fuck can you be that big of a dude and be so damn scrawny
No computer, when I'm "hacking User panels" it's with murderous intent screaming out "herrrreeee's Johnny!"
I like the concept, I feel the wording weighed it down here. try to be more concise in the future.
I'm stomping the head of this swollen swine, teach you how to put your frontal lobe behind
Recap: Acting bitch will get your shit Preston, then you dying like Travolta's wife
was her name preston travolta? thats kinda cool
Can you believe this guy posting a gun bar? This guy ain't gon' pop
Only 'chambers we wanna see u grip" is your heart's when it finally stops
nice. u hit the wording better here. this was smooth. this is what we need to see more of

user kinda threw his last 4 away. Verse could of took it if he had ONE big banger in there. but Use had his first 6 lines which were the strongest portion of this battle

v user.