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~RustyGunZ~ 06-01-2020 01:08 AM

Orc vs. Plot {Orc wins}
 
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Round One

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FIGHT!

DUE: Friday, the 5th of June @ 11:59 PM PST aka 3 am on the beast coast

12-16 lines, NO MORE AND NO LESS
The rest you already know, I won't accept tom foolery and fuckery


@Orc
@Plot

Orc 06-01-2020 04:23 AM

Yep

Plot 06-01-2020 04:58 AM

Sure

Orc 06-01-2020 01:36 PM

A barman fired for drinking? Good grief


I don’t condone drinking all day but shit happens
Here’s a Sobering thought: you’ve been here for 7 years & won 6 battles
Your life is a joke. Fired from allll the best spots
An Australian walks into a bar. The barman says “Plot, I’m calling the cops”
Don’t act like you spent time on the street dude
Okay, you grew up with Fosters. Your Dad drank that as he beat you
Plus Plots concerned bout this wild drought
Keep mentioning that Australian Bush Fire. I’ll take ya girl Outback to find out
These riots show people get violent if need be
If Plots screaming “I can’t breathe” it’s because he’s so excited to meet me
U won’t see a vote. Never mind get a mention
Think Deus Ex Machina. This failure of a Plot would need Divine Intervention

Plot 06-05-2020 11:21 AM

Ext sorry just got some people im dealing with

Plot 06-06-2020 10:52 AM

Always thought you and Blue were an item, honest
Kung tried to make it a triangle & neighbor was like lets do a rhombus.
Your fans need fucking help man, I swear they must be blind
Coz anyone thinkin Auxiliary fuckin outta their mind!
thinking your some greek or roman legend?
More like Narcissus that faggot that fell in love with his own reflection.
But we all know this Irish piece of shit sucks..
If he was ever winning in the votes it was a micks-up
hate to burst your bubble Ork, but your bars are fuckin nonsense
Yur a zombie-trader, keep flipping those dead concepts.
known biter! your a recycler, nothing you spits fire man,
And I thought St.Patrick chased all the snakes out of Ireland.

Ajax 06-06-2020 11:51 AM

Orc won this pretty handily. Australian Bush Fire made me chuckle. The George Floyd flip is the best I’ve read in the last couple weeks. Solid, straight forward verse.

Plot’s verse was ok... Rhombus was a decent idea, although I didn’t really get why Neighbor, Kung and Blue were mentioned. Maybe there’s a backstory I don’t know about. I’m still trying to figure out what the Auxiliary punch was.

Anyway, Orc had a more polished, witty verse. He wins. Cheers.

Fracture 06-06-2020 12:14 PM

Pretty fun battle

Orc didnt miss much.. Sobering thought and bush fire were bangers. Only line I didnt feel was the barmen copa line. Closer was good. Nice ideas with even nicer wordiing

Plot came with it... Rhombus was a dope start. Dead concepts had some heat and thr closer was money. The rest of the verse missed to me tho.

Orc wins. Hits were bigger and misses were fewer

evaD 06-06-2020 12:29 PM

I don’t condone drinking all day but shit happens
Here’s a Sobering thought: you’ve been here for 7 years & won 6 battles
Decent personal
Your life is a joke. Fired from allll the best spots
An Australian walks into a bar. The barman says “Plot, I’m calling the cops”
Nice
Don’t act like you spent time on the street dude
Okay, you grew up with Fosters. Your Dad drank that as he beat you
Lmao this is fire
Plus Plots concerned bout this wild drought
Keep mentioning that Australian Bush Fire. I’ll take ya girl Outback to find out
Dope
These riots show people get violent if need be
If Plots screaming “I can’t breathe” it’s because he’s so excited to meet me
I think this is the only flip on this concept I’ve seen that isn’t awful, well done
U won’t see a vote. Never mind get a mention
Think Deus Ex Machina. This failure of a Plot would need Divine Intervention
This was ok not up to rest of the verse to me


Always thought you and Blue were an item, honest
Kung tried to make it a triangle & neighbor was like lets do a rhombus.
feel like this could’ve hit harder with a different finish?
Your fans need fucking help man, I swear they must be blind
Coz anyone thinkin Auxiliary fuckin outta their mind!
Auxiliary / orcs-ill-are-really?? It actually almost kinda works phonetically but people are gonna hate this haha
thinking your some greek or roman legend?
More like Narcissus that faggot that fell in love with his own reflection.
This is ok
But we all know this Irish piece of shit sucks..
If he was ever winning in the votes it was a micks-up
Getting better
hate to burst your bubble Ork, but your bars are fuckin nonsense
Yur a zombie-trader, keep flipping those dead concepts.
Is a zombie trader a thing?
known biter! your a recycler, nothing you spits fire man,
And I thought St.Patrick chased all the snakes out of Ireland.
This was ok


Vote - Orc

Quite comfortable really. Orc had some heaters (fosters bar especially but the whole middle section was good. Plot Had some personals and some different angles but they just weren’t executed well enough to be more than jabs.

UPN Zuch 06-06-2020 02:24 PM

Good battle boys. Orc had a more wittier, well worded verse. Plot came better thsn I expected but it just wasn’t enough here. Floyd line was real nice. Along with fosters and outback. Plot had the micks up bar


Vote orc

Wanderer 06-06-2020 02:43 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Orc (Post 774507)
A barman fired for drinking? Good grief


I don’t condone drinking all day but shit happens
Here’s a Sobering thought: you’ve been here for 7 years & won 6 battles
Crisp but this just ain’t hard enough
Your life is a joke. Fired from allll the best spots
An Australian walks into a bar. The barman says “Plot, I’m calling the cops”
Wording helps you a lot but again this is light. Think it’s due to you seemingly going down the comedic route but if it’s not that funny which I didn’t think this was (subjective I know & no hate bro) then it misses impact
Don’t act like you spent time on the street dude
Okay, you grew up with Fosters. Your Dad drank that as he beat you
This is cool
Plus Plots concerned bout this wild drought
Keep mentioning that Australian Bush Fire. I’ll take ya girl Outback to find out
Lol.. Fire right here
These riots show people get violent if need be
If Plots screaming “I can’t breathe” it’s because he’s so excited to meet me
Nothing crazy here, it’s ok
U won’t see a vote. Never mind get a mention
Think Deus Ex Machina. This failure of a Plot would need Divine Intervention
Decent closer

Vs

Quote:

Originally Posted by Plot (Post 775367)
Always thought you and Blue were an item, honest
Kung tried to make it a triangle & neighbor was like lets do a rhombus.
Nah dude. This is kinda funny but it reads like you’re attacking neigh rather than Orc?? Just my opinion and apologies if I’m missing something
Your fans need fucking help man, I swear they must be blind
Coz anyone thinkin Auxiliary fuckin outta their mind!
One of the more forced wordplays I’ve seen - Aux-il-ary(3 syllables how I say it) correct me if I’m wrong but guessing this is supposed to be Orcs.ill.are.really ?? (5 syllables) just doesn’t work bro
thinking your some greek or roman legend?
More like Narcissus that faggot that fell in love with his own reflection.
not bad..
But we all know this Irish piece of shit sucks..
If he was ever winning in the votes it was a micks-up
Not really feeling the punch man
hate to burst your bubble Ork, but your bars are fuckin nonsense
Yur a zombie-trader, keep flipping those dead concepts.
Miss. the fuck is a zombie trader? I can see how some dudes might like this for creativity but it’s a bit far fetched for me
known biter! your a recycler, nothing you spits fire man,
And I thought St.Patrick chased all the snakes out of Ireland.
closer Just a bit too simple here

So I clearly felt Orc was more consistent throughout. Enjoyed how natural it came off. Australian bush fire / outback was fire and LOTB. My next favourite bars were Fosters and Machina. Plot ur best line was probably that Greek punch but other than that ur misses were worse and that Auxiliary play was just awful

Orc wins

Saint 06-06-2020 08:30 PM

Plot had some ideas like rhombus & micks up

Orc had the better delivered bars here
Fosters, Outback were hits. Closer was decent. Executed & worded better than Plots too.. which felt a little rushed imo

V- ORC

Resin M-I-C 06-06-2020 08:43 PM

plot seemed rushed, i think i’ve seen him drop 10x better.. micks up, rhombus, narcissus i felt like it coulda been bangers.. but just werent quite there.. coulda got real interesting bc this wasnt vintage orc by a longshot.. but he was def cleaner.. some concepts u already saw where it was headed but bush and fosters was still cool.. yeah so

v orc

Plot 06-06-2020 10:09 PM

This is clearly a mix up

Coop 06-07-2020 11:43 AM

Orc


I don’t condone drinking all day but shit happens
Here’s a Sobering thought: you’ve been here for 7 years & won 6 battles
Filler
Your life is a joke. Fired from allll the best spots
An Australian walks into a bar. The barman says “Plot, I’m calling the cops”
Huh?
Don’t act like you spent time on the street dude
Okay, you grew up with Fosters. Your Dad drank that as he beat you
Ok
Plus Plots concerned bout this wild drought
Keep mentioning that Australian Bush Fire. I’ll take ya girl Outback to find out
Set up lazy af but this is good
These riots show people get violent if need be
If Plots screaming “I can’t breathe” it’s because he’s so excited to meet me
Basic
U won’t see a vote. Never mind get a mention
Think Deus Ex Machina. This failure of a Plot would need Divine Intervention
Not feelin

Wording/flow is good, but a lot of lines were way too basic for my liking.

5/10


VS


Plot


Always thought you and Blue were an item, honest
Kung tried to make it a triangle & neighbor was like lets do a rhombus.
No
Your fans need fucking help man, I swear they must be blind
Coz anyone thinkin Auxiliary fuckin outta their mind!
The WP isn't immediately obvious, so it's a stretch
thinking your some greek or roman legend?
More like Narcissus that faggot that fell in love with his own reflection.
Filler
But we all know this Irish piece of shit sucks..
If he was ever winning in the votes it was a micks-up
Basic
hate to burst your bubble Ork, but your bars are fuckin nonsense
Yur a zombie-trader, keep flipping those dead concepts.
Also basic
known biter! your a recycler, nothing you spits fire man,
And I thought St.Patrick chased all the snakes out of Ireland.
Statementish

You clearly wrote this verse in 10 minutes.

2/10

Orc had the one bar that stood out, OUTBACK.


Vote: ORC

Flow 06-07-2020 02:51 PM

Orc had one miss, the closer. Rest were all dope with the George Floyd punch being probably the best flip I've seen thus far and the fosters line being lotb. The opener was stupidly simple but was a personal and was funny cus it's true.
Plot starts ok, the auxiliary works, just, but didn't really have anything to make it good, could of done alot more with it. Last three bars totally fell off for me tbh. Didnt find anything in them I liked, maybe it was the wording but meh just wernt up to scratch for me

Vote orc


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