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Blue Bayou 04-19-2020 04:29 PM

Week 3: Slect (0-2) vs. Wanderer (0-0) - WAND WINS
 
NBL Season XIV


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@Slect
@Wanderer

Wanderer 04-19-2020 04:47 PM

@slecht you still in this ?
I’ll drop 10-12

slecht 04-19-2020 06:19 PM

sure

Blue Bayou 04-20-2020 08:48 AM

@Slect

Wanderer PMd me his 10

slecht 04-24-2020 12:00 AM

I need an ext @Wanderer please

Wanderer 04-24-2020 04:46 PM

Ok

slecht 04-25-2020 12:25 AM

Wander for too long & get checked for bread.
God! Son. You've battled life but this week? Dead like Fred.
It might get harry when none of your bars get mentioned.
school you, I'm taking wand out like a Hogwarts Suspension.
I'm disfiguring you & your fat bae with an ax blade
Ice hatchets to y'all face, catching these picks like it's Draft Day.
Slecht gets busy. I'll release the piece in a jiffy if need be.
got keys that'll cover wander, without impersonating Stevie.
Try to alter my state of being and I might go off quick,
giving Wander an out of body experience, no Pyschonautics

Blue Bayou 04-25-2020 10:13 AM

Wanderers Verse


Man lockdown got me noticing everything u pen’s fuckin lame
Bars so rushed & unfinished they put quarantine hair cuts to shame
Archaeological concepts! That mean they’re dated and light
Get skinned by the blade at night... That brush with the metal uncover ur bones like excavation sites
U can’t please a crowd so I’ll help, for this reason I keep the stowed nina
The slide moves & everyone watch that shit pour out ur mouth, keynote speaker
Tryna’ camp out like he can defend.. the blade mean ur meeting ur end
Roll up on ur base with that sharp edge like I was sharing pizza with friends
Probs get harassed by teens on ur block, just die. The silenced tools’ll do
When it ring cops don’t pay attention but this time ain’t kids prank calling u






Vote Up

Defiant 04-25-2020 12:59 PM

I'm disfiguring you & your fat bae with an ax blade
Ice hatchets to y'all face, catching these picks like it's Draft Day.

Vs
Man lockdown got me noticing everything u pen’s fuckin lame
Bars so rushed & unfinished they put quarantine hair cuts to shame
Archaeological concepts! That mean they’re dated and light
Get skinned by the blade at night... That brush with the metal uncover ur bones like excavation sites



Slecht seemed kinda rushed, wanderer has improved I coulda probably quoted more he took this fairly comfortably


Vote wanderer

Answer 04-25-2020 02:30 PM

Wander for too long & get checked for bread.
God! Son. You've battled life but this week? Dead like Fred.

dudes body's still warm but hey who am I to judge. Bar is alright, thought this could've been better in execution

It might get harry when none of your bars get mentioned.
school you, I'm taking wand out like a Hogwarts Suspension.

this is okay, I know wand bars have been done before and I didn't think this was a particularly creative flip

I'm disfiguring you & your fat bae with an ax blade
Ice hatchets to y'all face, catching these picks like it's Draft Day.

this is cool, maybe could've been worded with a bit more aggression

Slecht gets busy. I'll release the piece in a jiffy if need be.
got keys that'll cover wander, without impersonating Stevie.

eh wonder/wander is a little bit of a stretch but i'll let it slide, this is okay

Try to alter my state of being and I might go off quick,
giving Wander an out of body experience, no Pyschonautics

ok closer



Man lockdown got me noticing everything u pen’s fuckin lame
Bars so rushed & unfinished they put quarantine hair cuts to shame

lol this is an okay opener, it's funny so i dig it

Archaeological concepts! That mean they’re dated and light
Get skinned by the blade at night... That brush with the metal uncover ur bones like excavation sites

this was fire tbh, arguably my favorite bar I've read so far this week

U can’t please a crowd so I’ll help, for this reason I keep the stowed nina
The slide moves & everyone watch that shit pour out ur mouth, keynote speaker

eh im not sold on the wording on this, but I like the idea.

Tryna’ camp out like he can defend.. the blade mean ur meeting ur end
Roll up on ur base with that sharp edge like I was sharing pizza with friends

nah im not really feeling this, the connection between the concepts just feels too weak and im not sure if this is supposed to read comedically but the wording is in that line between aggressive and funny where it just doesnt stand out

Probs get harassed by teens on ur block, just die. The silenced tools’ll do
When it ring cops don’t pay attention but this time ain’t kids prank calling u

the rhyming here is kinda sloppy, and the concept here just doesn't really have much foundation



So wanderer I think started out pretty well and kinda fell off toward the end. He had higher highs and lower lows while slecht kinda stayed at the same level throughout the battle. It's a bit tough to vote on imo, I think if this was a longer battle slecht could've possibly edged this with consistency, but the excavation bar was definitely lotb imo with my second favorite being a tie between ice picks and quarantine haircuts and the keynote speaker bar at #3. Then there's probably a run of slecht's bars, followed by wanderer's last 2.

but overall I gotta give this to wanderer for a stronger showing

Aura 04-25-2020 03:03 PM

liked Slects connected punches more but Wanderer had the better overall verse


V-Wanderer

Ender 04-25-2020 10:01 PM

slecht
The 'Draft Day' line was alright. Nothing else really connected for me.

Wanderer
The 'Keynote speaker' line was pretty good. Everything else was fairly light. Might just be because I'm not into similie bars.

I thought this was pretty close. I'd edge this to Wanderer because of the bars I didn't mention, I though Wanderer's were better.

Vote - Wanderer

Saint 04-26-2020 04:29 AM

Wand:

Excavation site, liked the slide idea too...would've liked to see different wording tho. Opener was ok to me, kinda random ref.

Slecht:
Closer & Picks we're your best IMO.. I think some bars lacked due to being to simple or too obvious a flip

I liked slechts execution more but preferred Wands ideas & concepts better....having the top 2 punches as well so my vote goes to Wand.

Vote Wanderer

Sharp 04-26-2020 03:12 PM

Wander for too long & get checked for bread.
God! Son. You've battled life but this week? Dead like Fred.
God son is cool, but the rest of the punchline is a little lacking. Good concept
It might get harry when none of your bars get mentioned.
school you, I'm taking wand out like a Hogwarts Suspension.
While he's gotten a lot of magic wand nameplays, I haven't seen this exact one. It's alright, but a little basic and the wording isn't that harsh
I'm disfiguring you & your fat bae with an ax blade
Ice hatchets to y'all face, catching these picks like it's Draft Day.
lmao cool
Slecht gets busy. I'll release the piece in a jiffy if need be.
got keys that'll cover wander, without impersonating Stevie.
Haven't seen a keys play in a while. Wander/Wonder is a bit of a stretch for me but its alright
Try to alter my state of being and I might go off quick,
giving Wander an out of body experience, no Pyschonautics
Psychonautics/out of body experience is a cool idea, but the execution here is basic



Man lockdown got me noticing everything u pen’s fuckin lame
Bars so rushed & unfinished they put quarantine hair cuts to shame
considering he wound up keying this is cool
Archaeological concepts! That mean they’re dated and light
Get skinned by the blade at night... That brush with the metal uncover ur bones like excavation sites
cool
U can’t please a crowd so I’ll help, for this reason I keep the stowed nina
The slide moves & everyone watch that shit pour out ur mouth, keynote speaker
again, cool
Tryna’ camp out like he can defend.. the blade mean ur meeting ur end
Roll up on ur base with that sharp edge like I was sharing pizza with friends
like... a pizza cutter? something about this is a little off for me
Probs get harassed by teens on ur block, just die. The silenced tools’ll do
When it ring cops don’t pay attention but this time ain’t kids prank calling u
execution feels a little scattered



I got wanderer with a few harder hits.
v/wanderer

Blue Bayou 04-26-2020 03:39 PM

Wanderer wins


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