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Exis 04-08-2020 12:56 AM

Thrown...
 
Ayo...

Wicked shit, inflicted in conflicts to settle the cost
I kick sickness, this collection of bars will be settin' it off
Ima get to feedin', my blood thirsts set to exalt
But fuck beef, I roll whole cows in pepper & salt
You can act like Norton will protect you from the blows I'm strikin'
But spyware filters didn't stop the Ebola & this current Corona virus
Nah fa real though, ain't got no enemies
Just talkin' some shit
But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips
When you're barkin' your spits,
Fuck feedin' you dog a fist is my only handout
& gettin' hard ons from one's self are your only stand outs
Basehead wordplay, these apes think it's flawless
If you wanna force it more I suggest you go rape a thesaurus
My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder
Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon
You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin
You can't pass go bro, you've played your position
I'm only statin' my mission, it's only decay I envision
My sense of decency is straight up wayward & missin'
& I've been demonized by three major religions
Sway with the force & bang, spinnin' this enforcer slang
Such a skilled Orator, I could talk Yin into divorcin' Yang.

Exis 04-25-2020 12:14 AM

Cheers for the love...

corleone 04-25-2020 01:01 AM

cool rhyme..

"My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder
Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon"

dope..

Exis 04-25-2020 01:08 AM

Thankyou...we're friends again lol.

Appreciate the feed man.

corleone 04-25-2020 02:56 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Exis (Post 766292)
Thankyou...we're friends again lol.

Appreciate the feed man.

lol.. your welcome bro.. friends for sure.

Exis 04-25-2020 04:40 AM

How's about we swash this beef, it's ANZAC day here, let veterans be remembered...is all I ask.

BraGGin Rights 04-25-2020 02:14 PM

Nice piece

Liked:

Just talkin' some shit
But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips

Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon

Exis 05-01-2020 02:22 AM

Thanks...I'll return when I've a minute.

emurgencee 05-02-2020 12:41 AM

This was good. Had some funny lines, and MAYBE a line or 2 I felt were a bit too long. God knows I liked this though, it was entertaining & clever

Johnny 6 feet 05-03-2020 12:26 PM

Nice strong braggodocious verse man. Standard topic, but I liked the compounds and the imagery you put into this. The 'crip walk' punch was a standout line for sure. Made me crack a smile. Good sense of rhythm and vocab choice. I'll be checking out for more of your stuff.

-6

Geno 05-03-2020 11:35 PM

Good shit Exis..

My only real complaint with your posts is that they feel extra wordy a lot of times... I mean you smash a few to many syllables into each line for my liking. Thats just me though so dont take it as something serious. Just one mans opinion.

This shit was dope to me..

You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin

Stay active!

Exis 05-04-2020 04:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Johnny 6 feet (Post 768082)
Nice strong braggodocious verse man. Standard topic, but I liked the compounds and the imagery you put into this. The 'crip walk' punch was a standout line for sure. Made me crack a smile. Good sense of rhythm and vocab choice. I'll be checking out for more of your stuff.

-6

I'll get @ you're stuff, thanks...

Exis 05-04-2020 04:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Genocide (Post 768223)
Good shit Exis..

My only real complaint with your posts is that they feel extra wordy a lot of times... I mean you smash a few to many syllables into each line for my liking. Thats just me though so dont take it as something serious. Just one mans opinion.

This shit was dope to me..

You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin

Stay active!

Gracias, & you're right...I have this bullshit habit of extendin' lines when I literally know they should be half the size yet don't correct it :/ Thanks for the feed @Genocide & good lookin' out @emurgencee, I'll rtf fam.


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