Week 4: Pinot Grij vs Ouch - OUCH WINS, PINOT NOSHOWS
 

You all know the rules, but if you need reminding go look at the rule thread. Records updated in rankings.

DUE MONDAY,

@Ouch @Pinot Grij

in, will post for sure.. just waiting

and it is bullshit that I have a 0-1 record, read the sign up thread I never said to sign me in, oh well, but bullshit.

ouch is a known felon, scary and he knows hes violent....
and he's known to lay the Chopper down quicker than Kobe's pilot...

@Pinot Grij

V/Pinot

@Ouch since this battle was a disqualification and Pinot knew he didn't need to show as he already had the W.... I figured you should at least get some feedback on your work as a writer;

So.....it's a decent enough bar for a Kobe concept, my main issues are it's pretty flat wording wise and not overly creative....the bigger issue is it basically reads as a pure swag and flow bar, there's no threat to your opponent at all ... You need to bring his name up or something in the setup to illustrate he's the target and accurately word an attack line.... As it stands now you're more likely to be opening fire on a Birch Tree then on wine man


Lastly, you're at an extreme disadvantage this week because unfortunately someone else dropped a WAY more fire Kobe bar... No fault of yours, but in hindsight it just puts a huge black cloud over your bar knowing it was clearly one-upped in spectacular fashion


"May the wind always be at your back and the sun upon your face. And may the wings of destiny carry you aloft to dance with the stars."

Vote - Pinot

Also, blue should be deducted more points for swaying against Machete Jo. Smh. The audacity.

Ouch wins, Pinot no check in.