Week 2: Incredible VS Pharaohs Army INCRED WINS
 

Week Two

this Guy's shook..the only thing incredible is my right hook
punch to the face; i'm scared to think of how he might look

The shots you got compared to the clip lines I drop are no where close
Doc with a gloc ur left out n about, bet its not females ur attractin with those Pheromones

Army was too simple and generic, landed like a set up

Inc had a stretchy second line, ending syllables didn't match for me but the concept and directness was greater

v/ incredible

Inc’s was stretched as fuuuuuuuuck
But the concept was much stronger
This was better than your usual though, Pharoah
Just need to tweak the complexity a bit
Wording is solid, so props for that

v/inc

Well Pharaoh didnt do anything with his punch,
so anything with a concept is likely to beat it.
But Inc really didnt do much better, really no flip.
(and man, you really have to work on your wording,
read your line out loud, make it sound like normal not robotic)
V-Inc for being slightly better.

army just coming a bit too simple, try to work a bit more into your bars man you write a bit like it's a swag/flow battle but there has to be something more for it to work, cool flow tho

incred, valiant effort i see the concept

v/ incred better attempt

Nice rhythm and rhymes from PA but conceptually it's pretty nothingish. Gotta diss your opponent more creatively or with more complexity.

Inc was too wordy but the attempt at the nameplay was better. Need to have a clearer connection to 'moans' though. Something like "gloc leave you crying in pain, no females getting attracted w/ Pheromones"

V/ Inc

Incred -- polish up your wording. Use words when necessary & take out when not. Coo concept.

Army -- read almost a&f but nothing here really just basic 101.. lol - nice wording

V- Inc

pharaoh moans? lol. sucked. pharaoh sucked more.

v inc

u should both lose tho

Pharaoh really got the tools to be a problem if he keep at it. The wording made this punch enjoyable to read but didn’t have a strong enough flip or enough complexity to squeak one out here. The multi/in rhyme and the only thing Incredible is my right hook we’re all big pluses. But you’re going to have to have a flip, a metaphor, wordplay etc to win, especially in a 1-2 battle. I think wording and execution is what typically separates mid tier from top tier and you got the wording down so just work on your concepts.





Inc the feed for your bar is pretty much the opposite lol. I think the wording and execution was messy (I liked what you were going for though) but the wordplay carried the punch. Pheromones was a pretty good wordplay. Your set up got the job done but I really think you could have improved it a lot. I left this feed in someone else’s battle but you really want your set up and punch to be saying the same thing. Reading your first bar it’s like your saying your gun bars are better than his. You shoulda used that set up to kinda paint the picture of him getting shot and docs have him on the operating table or something more closely related to the punch. Anyways, you kinda took it by default cus you got solid wp where pharaoh didn’t really have a true punch.

I got Inc winning this one, but pharaoh your wording is promising, just gotta work on the actual punch. Inc you’re trending upward. I’d just focus on improving your setups and wording. I’ll give you this tip for free: write what your punch is saying in like plain terms, then write out what you need to say in the set up in plain terms, then after you do both, craft your set up to say that in as short a phrase possible.

Anyways, good work.

Mvgt Inc

pharoah was a lil too simple
wording issues with pharoah moans but still gets it

v Inc

Mvgt- inc

Read it, you'll see why.

Inc wins

incredible wins 10-0