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Wise Wiggles 02-26-2019 11:39 AM

Then what?
 
Use consciousness to generate real things
Recesatate feeling.
When the letters placed brilliant?
It may levitate buildings
Of course the memories'll last
Like stored energies of past
Sober awakening- yeah? better bring a flask
Yet most live Eyes Wide Shut and never see the masks
Gotta Wonka with it- penetrate the glass
Seperate the ACT, from truth.
Meditate and fast.
Have to get to the roots of why generation after generations trapped
Alchemy - adapt
Drop the demented mindstates
Ink stimulation, pens that vibrate
A think simulation - accension highway
I stare at shadows til they surround me like pterodactyls
Gallows, gavels, latch & chain
The Scarecrow grovels If I Only Had A Brain..!?

Then what?

It's confusing, the ego..
The beauty is peaceful,
The illusory eisle
Here. Paint it how you want
My dear angel bellutaunt
Encased in a spherical vase
Petal fonts
Where meadows yawn
That special On
One light for all candles
If it's done right.
Love's highs strung aside
Hung to dry, to drain
this drowning
The drops drip dangles down
I'm coming, throne-trippin
Humming own rythym
Bones clickin, holding hidden
Occult beats, their moulding ribbons
The Soul dreams, it fantasizes
Then Soul weeps on ashy horizion
Catching my thriving, upon this haunted
Accident-Island

Exis 03-14-2019 11:49 PM

Not sure why this got slept on, fun read Wise...Thought the second stanza had a more poetic feel with some really nice imagery.First part was slick, like your word usage...

Good to see you sorta back around man,

Stay upwards brethren.

Vulgar 03-23-2019 02:03 AM

I like the thought of an accident island. Can wonder what that'd be like, probably a hive for crooked insurance companies and even more crooked people filing claims lol.

This for me was the best part:

"Of course the memories'll last
Like stored energies of past
Sober awakening- yeah? better bring a flask
Yet most live Eyes Wide Shut and never see the masks"

Interesting idea.

UnbornBuddha 03-27-2019 03:38 AM

Wise, I always enjoy the ride. It's psychedelic and holistic. I like the fast-paced rhythm and it almost activates dopamine surges when consuming it. You bring multiple thought streams into one being, but also it appears a bit frantic upon bird's eyeview. That being stylistically it is done well, and it is not nonsensical. There was another frequent open mic writer who wrote in a similar fashion, but it was more scattered brain and while cool in the concepts he would bring together, it had little meaning so it was just a flurry of words. This while has some scattered elements to it, is cohesive in some form or another. Thanks.


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