Brain Thief - Bars
 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fg4MPWBpgy4

I spit from 38 seconds in

Drop feedback on some pieces. I'll check back in a few hours

Edit-

You're good

^what he said

Bumping for some actual feedback

beat is nice

you need to do more than just talk. and more than just rhyme. right? your recitation is listless, at least dude with the beads was trying to get hyped.

conversely, ya boi need to sit back. no need to be up in the camera's grill and all.

nerdy af but some ability is there. imo.

hmb

I get what you're saying about the delivery,I am pretty much talking, that's my main point of improvement

You have a rhyming ability, which is good. If you want me to give you feedback on everything? I don't know.

I don't really give feedback on an audio piece, but I guess I was listening to the lyrics and try to convey and translate in a lyrical, text-read form. You have a bit of everything, but not much of it. I feel you were trying to rhyme more than actually convey a certain meaning. Well you conveyed a meaning, definitely, you had a lot of psychy, deep, space babble blah blah. Was cool. Liked it! But I felt it was more rappy, than actual just trying to tell a story.

The beat was ok, I don't really listen to rap/spoken-word stuff often.

Cheers for the analysis man, The first half is kind of random and then it starts to turn into a trip rap, It does feel like two verses smashed together at times. I think I'll eventually split them and elevate on both

this beat is butter.

you need more mic presense

your delivery and content are on point....
more animation to your voice...your boy had it but not the content or delivery lol..

liked this fellas. you and ur buddy have a likable style for sure. as others have said ur kinda just talking so u didn't give us much there but it was chill.. obviously u both can rhyme. maybe take more time on ur next one but overall i enjoyed it and will check out any more if u got em or make new ones

Cheers man, it was pretty rushed. We're definitely going to take more time with future releases. This was the first drop we've done together, so we were both pretty enthusiastic about just getting it out

Sick shit, yall looked gay right away no no im playin.

But yall are sick I liked it, your voice man like everyone said u got it though. Maybe try to be less nerdy ya know like put some gangster into your voice to counter the big words. idk lol

In all honesty when I first looked at that still shot before hittin' play I thought this was gonna suck some major ass (dude in the hat looks like he's 11) but to my surprise I liked it lol.Sure it may not get 20 million views yet it shows you have alot of potential, your lyrics are a stand out even if not delivered in the most dynamic way,I'm not an audio head so my feed isn't the best when it comes to cats on a mic but yeah...thought this was pretty cool man.

...Stay uppity.

hahahahahahaha cheers man, Don't worry. If I was you I wouldn't have even watched it. My lyrics were a bit too verbose on that track for me to emphasize them enough. The next drop I put up will be a little easier to deliver. But still lyrically insane. I am lacking in "gangsterness"

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA It's all good man, I know exactly what you mean. I often judge rappers as a full package. In other words you need to at least look the part somewhat, as well as spit sick. I'm working on it though, I've been meaning to get a haircut for ages. Wow, that still shot is pretty fucking bad

Just saying, too many big words with no oooommmfff is like a quantum physics poem.

Dope shit. Nice syllables n all but delivery is lacking. Spit with some conviction like you mean every word. Your feedback will skyrocket


Props on this though

1:50-2:05 was my favorite part. You look like Kurt Cobain.

Pretty dope beat also.

I see nothing wrong with this track.

Props on the feedback, I actually hear the KC thing a lot. I don't really see it though

CAUSE U DIRTY AND GRIMY AS FUCK LOOKING lol and the hair...

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA cheers. I'm going to take that as a compliment