Made a four song EP hope you like it
 

https://soundcloud.com/lil-vam/sets/lil-vam

all feedback would be dope

40seconds into tsunami i quit

Horrible

Flows dogshit. Content trash. Rhyme scheme's rudimentary.

Beat was cool. U shouldn't be on it tho.

>tsunami
>not a single song on my soundcloud called that

try harder pls

Sup man

Tbh this was a hell of a lot more on the beat than you were a month ago. I can never speak to content cause it's not something I know about or even listen for (tbh I can barely understand the words, sounds like you're overblowing the mic cause there's definitely some sort of distortion) but you've definitely shown some improvement. I'd say on 3/4 of the songs (the outlier being succubus' client) you were consistent with your basic flow, but any time you end up faster it starts to feel like you're just cramming words in before the next beat. Keep at that though.

Sorry for just stopping with that track too, I just needed a break from music after a few shitty gigs and shitty recording session. It's on the list of stuff I'd get back to after doing some shit for me and for some games I'm working on.

As far as developing your writing, you may wanna try @Innovator's NWL. He could describe the league better but it's a good way to get practice with technical writing and next week is writing swag and flow (pretty much writing a verse of a rap track)

Stay at it man, thanks for sharing this and keep us (or at least me) posted

sorry im not a soundcloud PRO user

I guess your name is vammy tsunami////that was the confusion

the song I attempted to listen to was walk with the living

wack af....sorry for the confusion on the title