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dead man 10-02-2018 01:25 AM

dust
 
green forest melancholia. i led you to faith
separate entirely, together remained
molecular tangles our cozy nest DNA
its conceptual, lately i've felt a definite change
synchronic relative wavelength. half-arrested restraint
anorexic, poor girl who never finished a plate
broccoli and steak. 10-kilometer days. glitch in your matrices
fictional make-believe my promises made
art and independence there's a common engagement
growing colder the moment i cast it out into space
hours to waste in solitude like so many gravestones
so far removed i've just about forgotten how to embrace it
power pose, powder facelift mascara clouding her gaze
opal eyes, diamond bracelet, open wide, let her taste it
winebags in our pancreas and blood in our teeth
functional creep masquerading as the sum of his pieces
rather than something opaque, shadowy, see-thru
film projection after all the credits are raised
neural system nervous sympathetic by nature
existing most organic in the mind of stranger





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ACTIVATE SELF 10-02-2018 07:22 PM

Reserved for feed.

Wise Wiggles 10-21-2018 08:59 AM

Dude yeah. Will read again. Really refreshing to jump into.

2tripple0 12-12-2018 04:46 PM

This was cool man...

Geno 12-13-2018 03:24 AM

Nice.

Hows that nook coming

Exis 12-13-2018 06:28 AM

This was very short, yet sweet from you...first 4 lines were dope.

Sorry for bein' a dickhead for like a decade...readin' your shit is always therapeutic Black.

Stay doin' you.

Pharaohs Army 01-26-2019 01:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man (Post 704534)
glitch in your matrices
fictional make-believe

cool rhyme

Sinacog 01-26-2019 02:19 AM

This was a pretty good piece, Dead Man. It had all the essentials for a good topical piece. Nice poetics, and rhyme schemes you got here. Good form of rhyme scheme and narrative as-well. I enjoy these kind of drops, there fun to read in a way. The imagery was pretty well done, and you had nice prose. Your narrative was pretty good - nice subtle spot in this. Overall - a good read. Keep dropping here.


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