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Exis 06-15-2018 06:43 AM

Check...
 
Ayo,

You ain't allowed yet to rhyme
Only speak when done spoken too
they'll be no sound from your side
Mostly peeps are just broken fools
sayin' they so down on their life...

I say these nigga's are so full of shit I can see the brown in their eyes
Bitches can't fully commit & wonder why they only get an ounce of my time
This ain't some tackle release thing,
I just straight up catch & delete kids
When I've pounced down on their style
Comparin' these mashed up ass weaklings
To whom they competin' with
Is amusin' at least,
Almost had my mouth crack a smile on some tongue tied mucous in cheek shit
It's humorous isn't it?
Lickin' my lips like you be all brutal with lyrics
This isn't no LL makin' a come back tour, trick
So move outta position,
Queue pivot your ass from outta this line kid
Until you manoeuvre on backwards & caught Lucifer's image
Sellin' tickets,
She's blue eyed, Angelic like, but there's no beauty within her
Perfection ain't present, her presence is hellish...
An elegant, delicate Queen
Carrin' devilish wings...
I can feel every emotion she's goin' thru as she is buryin' me.

Pharaohs Army 06-15-2018 02:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Exis (Post 673894)
I say these nigga's are so full of shit I can see the brown in their eyes
Bitches can't fully commit & wonder why they only get an ounce of my time

Fire.

Nice drop

Exis 06-17-2018 10:55 PM

Appreciate the looks...gracias.

Vapeo 06-18-2018 04:07 PM

The ending is tough.

so relatable man

Pent uP 06-18-2018 09:30 PM

man that last line is so multi-faceted. Firstly it can mean that she feels nothing, because you feel nothing because you're dead in the scenario. Thats fucking cold on so many levels alone wtf. wild. Secondly it could mean she is mourning for you, which is like a projected way of saying what you hope/expect out of the world on your way out - which is some lowkey breaking the fourth wall slick shit to say. Lastly it could mean that her emotions reflect exactly how cold she is inside by not even paying attention to burying you and exploiting her vanity through that line. And that scenario (if true) exploits how dope the previous 3 or so lines are for setting it up like that. That ending was cold as fuck dude. The main stanza started out with a dope couplet too. I dont get why you do this ABCB rhymescheme thing but thats you. Interesting phrases and raw attitude my dude. Keep elevating

Twodrop 06-19-2018 10:29 PM

One of my favorite from u so far. Good shit fam


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