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dead man 06-03-2018 02:24 PM

bleed
 
latte whiskey & water. watch
me limp to the slaughterhouse, cynical diatribe
for the principled pauper. i live in decisions
indecisive as autumn, follow my lead. drink my cyanide. cures for
coexisting too often. simple and plain as
jim and jane. duality my daily condition. as in
it kills me when you speak but i am happy to listen
make a wish. penny glisten fountain cupid in marble
the toxicity molecule, best viewed from afar. loved from
a distance, play Icarus, immolate in an instant
our living space often imitated a prison. what to be said
when i recount it often sounds like we ended
in a blaze of glory, more like clouds of regret
powder precious, our obsessions, hours spent in ecstasy
mouthy magic, sour patches, sweet sensation, sexually
cold beverage, 30 proof refreshment. slip into buzz
here to separate innate behaviors / symptoms of us
via journaling verses i've never written enough
our litmus, what post-relationship we didn't adjust
call me on the phone. let a message reply
it's never fucking speak again but never goodbye
there's pressure to reinvent what we severed in time
pleasure in bleeding you dry. promise the pleasure is mine





dm

big baby 06-03-2018 02:54 PM

how many times can you say things differently but kinda the same? you need to talk about pythagorean theorems and then tell people you're belching a murder. that's what you're lacking. everything great, but we get it. you're sad. nobody cares about your expressionism and the creative ways you divert the complexity of human emotion you weirdo lol. next time how about you write cool things like combustion engines or how you're happy... or hoe a combustion engine can make ou happy... u can will itself out of depression, sadness, nostalgia, and angst if you were just not such a creative writer giving us a million angles of depth from your creation... ugh but tremendous either way. love you and hate u fag

ACTIVATE SELF 06-03-2018 03:14 PM

Fragile. As expected. Mission accomplished.

Thanks for the read deadman. Both I and your stem cell enjoyed it.

dead man 06-04-2018 08:21 PM

:)

Pharaohs Army 06-08-2018 07:18 PM

the last 10 lines of this flowed better than the beginning, I think. the rhyme schemes are easier to see.

you've got alcoholic beverages and women again, but hey, it was a nice read.

dead man 06-09-2018 05:20 AM

Pretty much sums it up

veritas 06-09-2018 02:06 PM

Big baby nailed it. Expand your horizons my guy. Experience the influence of other muses. All love.

dead man 06-09-2018 02:43 PM

@veritas clear your pm's

Lenox 06-09-2018 03:37 PM

Wow nice man

veritas 06-09-2018 04:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man (Post 672542)
@veritas clear your pm's

Done. Look forward to it.

Eŋg 06-09-2018 05:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army (Post 672181)
you've got alcoholic beverages and women again

lol

Quote:

Originally Posted by veritas (Post 672516)
Big baby nailed it.

he was ridiculing someone else.

Pharaohs Army 06-09-2018 05:49 PM

well those are 2 big topics in life, so it's understandable i suppose.

veritas 06-09-2018 06:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eŋg (Post 672578)
lol



he was ridiculing someone else.

Chill out

dead man 06-09-2018 07:18 PM

@Eŋg may be some truth to that but it's whatever. it's a song i've heard many times.

big baby 06-09-2018 07:30 PM

oh yeah @veritas i like dm i was making fun of someone else, but i also respect your opinion; but i have 2 say nobody cares if a painter makes a living off of only self portraits. repetitive, but always different nonetheless. gl in life ily

veritas 06-09-2018 07:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by big baby (Post 672618)
oh yeah @veritas i like dm i was making fun of someone else, but i also respect your opinion; but i have 2 say nobody cares if a painter makes a living off of only self portraits. repetitive, but always different nonetheless. gl in life ily

I am enjoying this new gimmick you are working BB. We should collab

Also call me 601 917 3913

big baby 06-09-2018 07:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by veritas (Post 672620)
I am enjoying this new gimmick you are working BB. We should collab

Also call me 601 917 3913

i don talk 2 stranger lol

Eŋg 06-09-2018 08:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man (Post 672614)
@Eŋg may be some truth to that but it's whatever. it's a song i've heard many times.

tropes are tropes for a reason.

dead man 06-09-2018 08:53 PM

most definitely. i was just thinking about that actually, listening to michael pollen on JRE. he starts talking about that about an hour in i think but the whole thing is mad interesting

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tz4CrWE_P0g

veritas 06-09-2018 08:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by big baby (Post 672624)
i don talk 2 stranger lol

It saddens me that you call me stranger old friend.


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