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Quarter O 05-19-2018 03:06 AM

battle barz reloaded
 
Nigga ill break ya jaw, bring the tech in(tekkin).. kick back will break the Law
Pick a side… steppin 360, your brainwaves get crossed
My degree of fighting’s supreme and all I did was taught myself
I fought em all from martial artists to my pops.. caught all black belts
Only person that could beat me is if I fought myself, Fight Club
I’d cuss the bar out and then I flight clubs
The ultimate, heres the ultimatum, you want a altercation?
I’ll break your glass jaw, the image shows your inner with alterations
You know? Like breaking mirrors, different angles you could’ve shown em
You should’ve owned it, got him reflecting on the moment
You talking greasy? I’ll leave your mouth washed Scopes
Now rinse your mouth with blood and watch every vowel talked Scopes
They say the tongue is mightier than the sword
How is that when this blade can leave your tongue flapping’ on the floor
The concrete got him speaking in tongues
I guess the streets is talking’ when u bite the curb - got that cement taste, bud
Im morbid no doubt cold Pitchfork to your rib, bozo
you porky the pig, roast you like slaughterhouse logo
Slice you up into individual bologna slabs
Skate on with your ice, when I stick you in a goalie mask
The Crome is scratched around the rubber, spin have you in the dust
Im Pac RIDE ON MY ENEMIES like suge knight in a pick up truck

2tripple0 05-19-2018 10:01 PM

Dont know man i aint wanna be like lemme show you how to write er nothing i mean good for you doing your own thing i guess.... lots of nice little concepts in here just in my opinion you went in a bit too hard just lighten up a bit a bit too hardcore at times but yes some of this was good... sorry i aint really wanna be like oh this is how you should write i mean you wanna go with that hardcore style i guess thats all you bro goodluck with it i guess... just not really my cup of tea ya dig...

Mediocrity 05-20-2018 12:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Quarter O (Post 665241)
Nigga ill break ya jaw, bring the tech in(tekkin).. kick back will break the Law
Pick a side… steppin 360, your brainwaves get crossed

My degree of fighting’s supreme and all I did was taught myself
I fought em all from martial artists to my pops.. caught all black belts
Only person that could beat me is if I fought myself, Fight Club
I’d cuss the bar out and then I flight clubs
The ultimate, heres the ultimatum, you want a altercation?
I’ll break your glass jaw, the image shows your inner with alterations
You know? Like breaking mirrors, different angles you could’ve shown em
You should’ve owned it, got him reflecting on the moment
You talking greasy? I’ll leave your mouth washed Scopes
Now rinse your mouth with blood and watch every vowel talked Scopes
They say the tongue is mightier than the sword
How is that when this blade can leave your tongue flapping’ on the floor
The concrete got him speaking in tongues
I guess the streets is talking’ when u bite the curb - got that cement taste, bud
Im morbid no doubt cold Pitchfork to your rib, bozo
you porky the pig, roast you like slaughterhouse logo

Slice you up into individual bologna slabs
Skate on with your ice, when I stick you in a goalie mask
The Crome is scratched around the rubber, spin have you in the dust
Im Pac RIDE ON MY ENEMIES like suge knight in a pick up truck

Highlighted my favorite parts, very decent all around. Didn’t quite follow the Scope line it was just a weird read

Closer was flames lotv


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