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i'm

painfully distant.
same old tricks. aging magician
nothing sacred, see: pagan tradition
pray me alive, televangelist grind
faithful apprentice, narrative symbolism. self-
fulfill a prophecy and make it a mission
delayed repetition. that's the danger of
symmetry. obsess on duplication
lose yourself in the differences
selective sentences, pages apart
waste of an art form. televisual altar,
VHS tapes labeled in marker
masking tape like faces covered total facade
the prophet nobody voted for and nobody wanted
threw a stone in the pond. if it splashes i'm fine
don't ask me why.
just another new compulsion arising

dm

ridiculous

the sublety

televisual altar..phew

this submission was a chiseled one.. refined man i fw it

Quote:

"i'm

painfully distant.
same old tricks. aging magician
nothing sacred, see: pagan tradition
pray me alive, televangelist grind"

"waste of an art form. televisual altar,
VHS tapes labeled in marker"

That was dope.

The whole thing really.

Great snippet.

Peace.

I loved the opener. The television as an alter and VHS labelled in marker is def an image i can relate to for real.

This is way better than some of the other verses at the top of page one.

BUMP!

This was a decent read, Dead man.

I always enjoy your works, they're quite entertaining and fulfilling to me. You have quite a good way of crafting your craft to fulfillment - which I enjoy. You don't seem to stray from your topic; - as the topic is about you; - and you write about yourself quite well. I don't seem anything wrong with this piece. Seemed quite good. The 'self fulfilling prophecy' line was very good, so was the duplication. I enjoyed more of these lines, as-well as the imagery. I enjoyed this piece, as it was quite good. Some lines I felt should be thought of a second time perhaps? The 'voting for prophet' comes to mind - people don't usually vote for prophets. Prophets are sacred people; - chosen by the gods to complete tasks for the prosperity of people. You don't vote for prophets..lol..that's for something else..but this was quite good. I enjoyed this piece, and it's creativity; imagery; and symbolism to other things and to yourself. Good work, Dead Man. I'll read more of your work in the later time, good write..keep writing!