I aint know what to say...
 

Yo i aint changed none im still the same cat
Most people be rapping and shit but they know they all trash
I try being creative come up with some hood shit er whatever
But i aint even putting no effort in dont really care much guess im just a pillow filled with no pleasure
Nah man there aint shit to this text shit it aint no fun or theres very little enjoyment
I aint even trying to convey shit not going try and get one over you cause i aint shit to toy with
Aint nobody really care so i stepped outside for some air
I aint got no meaning anyways im a fucking joke to be fair
Just sit around all day long
Writing the same song and aint even got no place i belong
Id rather end it i aint even attack this little verse correctly
Im like a punk in the back of the classroom straight up acting like a g
I aint trying to get no point across guess i should talk about sumn other than my self
But what the fuck no one feeling me im just a stupid fuck who aint afraid of death
Dont care dont give a fuck this shit just be a waste
I aint got a line i aint got a life nobody give a fuck so i guess i gotta a fire to tame
No one want me to win im hiding everthing
They get a kick out of me though just a stupid fuck since day one blame it on my upbringing
Fuck this shit and fuck you too fuck everyone
Sure im a thug but i still get no love
Aint nobody going read this shit anyways
Im not going figure it out or be okay with it dont really give a fuck cause yall still hate
Fuck it fuck this shit for real
Im a scar that aint never going to heal....

Whatever that sucked fuck yall....

So, I wrote this entire thing out on here and it erased so I will do it again. Let me first publicly apologize for the feedback I left you. I did it in response to a similar feedback I received on my drop and responded prematurely. You were not the person who did it. For that, I will read your drop and give you the feedback that was deserved. Though you did not like my piece, which is fine, I still owe you this respect.

The first thing I notice is that you have a tendency to be too wordy. Ironically, saying less can be saying more with the right word usage. Combining words with depth mixed with emotion could be a good recipe for you as I can see you have the emotion part down. You come off angry, disappointed, maybe a combination of both. Harnessing that in these types of drops draws the reader in and keeps their attention. You have a lot of technical flaws in this realm but little bits of promise as well. Multi-syllable rhymes on some of your external rhymes which shows you have the ability to do them. I just think you need to put a little more thought into your pieces. This will help rhythm, flow, cadence, delivery and overall your rhyme schemes.

Yeah im trying to keep it structured only want to get it right bit keep getting it to a point im unsure if its any good or not like it was just a waste of time.... i'll try to use your concept though of adding filler er whatever but it still feels incomplete and i did enjoy your piece and im sorry if you thought i didnt like it... but thanks for the feed...just want this tp feel right is all like i did enough...

I would advise against adding filler.

Really i like filler in topicals er open mocs er whatever some of that shit is priceless it be cheap as fuck and easy to access....i love stupid shot like that shit that dont matter to nothing ypu know what i mean....

..no. I dont know whatnyou mean. Honestly. I dont

But i think you have a lot of real life issues just from reading your shit. Hope you figure it out

Thanks man would love to hear more abput what you think of my life issues im deal8ng with a lot man like do i make it or do i go to prison cause i want to be able to write thats all i want to do sorry man if i did it incorrectly again... what do i know about rhymes right???

Maybe say nothin' is my advice to you...

Yeah i wanted to respond but didnt er sumn cool man like you thought you was hot