Cyrax 0-0 vs BodySnatcher 0-0 - CYRAX WINS
 

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Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday MARCH 29th and will be open until Sunday.
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• Extensions are 24 hours

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• Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

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@CBA @Cyrax @BodySnatcher

Fuck it... it's the end of the season lets go out with 20. You good or is that too much?

here, 16 would be better.

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We all know about your style... “Let my gun talk to your offspring”
But the only ‘iron you touch’ is ‘pressin pants’ for the ‘golf scene’
He like...
“I swear to God why would Allah I got more clips than an editor”
You look like Boba Fett raped your mom & birthed a child Predator
Bruh you're a knock-off of both characters, watch as this kid bleeds
I’ll remove his intestines until organs dangle down by this kidneys
Get it? Kid knees? But ya’ll saw that coming without usin foresight
Like we know the only bush Cyrax ever been in was playin Fortnite
Still, I got your ‘back’ homie… & then I ‘hung him’ with his spinal cord
So if you beat me, it’s more of an upset than Loyola in the Final Four
I want the title more. I’ll punch your birdcage & make your oriole stray
& he’ll be quick to ‘raise the flag… like it was sunrise on Memorial day
I’ll put you in a casket... sealed up like an envelope but I’ll mail ya
He lives is 6 ft. ‘down under’... like he’s buried in Australia
Cyrax is famous for self-destructing… so I flipped his robotic switch
& I bet after this he’ll be callin 1-800-273-8255 faster than Logic’s bitch

your slut loves to suck me off.. then im fucking her hole
this ain't 'Dumb & Dumber' but shes always got her tongue stuck to my pole
after this loss your gonna cry about nbl d/r.. ima end this savage
shit you can colleagues wack but it's only cause your a friendless faggit
ur trash and i ain't fronting slob, im cutting jaws
you'll never see Snatch up, he just grab's losses like its his fucking job
try to make a name for urself.. but my gat rippin you in levels
once Body Build up a rep, im crushing it with a deadlift of the metal
i'll play out the woman of yur dreams, now your all alone homo
i'll take your Princess Leia on the floor fuck her an dip home Solo
i'll disfigure u w/ hands & make this pussy nigga look sicker
eye gouge yu & see a thumbnail change yur profile like a facebook picture
the ICU cant help fix yur face from fists.. your slow an it shows
it doesn't matter Witch Doctor they send.. jabs still break the bone in your nose
your a pussy that snitches... while ima king bout to slaughter yah'll
i can tell Wakanda faggit you are n yu deserve to be thrown head first off a waterfall

Cyrax was better IMO. I was turned off by the quotes in first dudes verse. U don’t need that if it’s clear ugh

yep, cyrax got this. bs had some aight stuff, wording was aite. cy just had the overall better verse IMO.

V -- Cyrax

I'll accept these one votes but could other people elaborate more than one sentence. Like what you like/don't like, etc. for both of our verses. Much appreciated.

Cyrax got this with a better-crafted verse though neither verse was good
Since this is the general consensus, and other dude wants feedback, I will focus on that
Ok so your concepts are kind of there but you write too much for the rhyme
For example, the spinal cord bar like that’s two punches in one bar but they’re not related t all so neither really hit
Like the spinal cord is one, “I got your back” that’s a decent concept and could hit with a setup that was related to having his back
Then the Loyola making it to the final 4 being a reach, like him beating you also is, that is a decent concept I mean it needs something clever to really hit cause it’s pretty basic, but with a related setup, it could be ok.
You have both of these in one bar because spinal cord rhymes with final four and there’s really no reason.
I hope this helps

V/cyrax

Bruh you're a knock-off of both characters, watch as this kid bleeds
I’ll remove his intestines until organs dangle down by this kidneys

vs

after this loss your gonna cry about nbl d/r.. ima end this savage
shit you can colleagues wack but it's only cause your a friendless faggit
try to make a name for urself.. but my gat rippin you in levels
once Body Build up a rep, im crushing it with a deadlift of the metal
the ICU cant help fix yur face from fists.. your slow an it shows
it doesn't matter Witch Doctor they send.. jabs still break the bone in your nose

bodysnatcher you gotta stop with the quotes, it does take away from the punch if you need to explain it. You're trying too hard to make it complex and it just becomes convoluted instead.

cyrax you had some nice stuff here thought the witch hunt / nose bone was dope.

v/cyrax

what’s going on where i agree with Des

potential is there for Snatcher kinda seems like you’ve done this before, some okay concepts but when you say ‘get it’ in the next it loses impact
I got Cyrax take this with a more polished verse, less misses