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Darker Ego 02-21-2018 06:57 PM

Featuring Darcy
 
Swiming out into the Sunset
Performing like a known vet
Struggling out of the known wreck
With my partner on my side
Brother let us not divide
Seeing the open sky
All clear not wondering why
Purposely high now let us try
Gliding on the glistening slide
A listen and smiled
Look what he has done
Who he has become
King in a throne
Now in a Spiritual form
To Witches sworm
Possessed inside the invisible dorm
Bowling was the way to get close to kids
Ressurected when The Angel touched his ribs
Devil is my uncle
Pays by the bundle
Paving the ways that I mumble
There is A New Me You`ll see
Am the one who Will be free
Merry glee merry glee let us be
Today and forever more
Come here infernal whore
Let us reighn the hellish core
Do what is said the Truth is dead
Only alive in the palms of gloomish head
So follow or be doomed instead
March with armies conquering
The last encountering
When fully healed
All ruin the shield
Bound to forever win
The Eternal sin
Walking talking thinking
Chanting singing wanting living
Survive the feeling
Tonight am sealing
The Wizzard is here
Give me a stare
Llllllllllllllllllllllllll
Keep still be real
Accept this deal
A fusion of worlds
Without the use of swords
An brutal hoards
Aligh on the path
Cosigned to the Wrath
Understandable thought
The God was brought
What is the future
When the assault is nuclear
All you want is there
No one is here Don`t wonder where
All is clear now prepare
To reap the untold treasures in chest
So repent it is best
Nothing and nobody is
The growing Abyss
Crowned hear the hiss
Judgement day for few
The tear is new
Something unexplained tearing through
So escape to the Blue when they state a cue

ACTIVATE SELF 02-22-2018 10:45 AM

Interesting.

Although, to be completely honest, I can't say that I followed your story from A to Z. I understand it's about the Armageddon, but I'm not entirely sure what to make of the sequence of events that happen throughout the the narration. There just doesn't seem to be a clear or linear direction. Most of your ideas read cluttered. With the only thing holding them together being the underlying Judgement Day like theme you explored. In any case, you definitely have a knack for dark and gloomy poetry. This piece in my opinion read like lyrics to a heavy metal song. Which is interesting to the least.

i eat shit 2018 02-23-2018 06:46 PM

Let’s start a squad @DarkEgo ?

Darker Ego 03-01-2018 05:52 PM

This is a special post featuring a real writer and friend
I expected to see a couple more feed back on the trend
She is on her 40s and aging slowly
In every way Holy
She keeps it between the few
This time Am not talking about a wicked crew
When you need Ma checks on your post just ask
If you all keep hating then we won`t last
This is what we are made off its part of the soul
Captivating the open mind when the bars unfold
Stay close and speak your thoughts on the piece
Brothers now peace
All repay each comment with a complete verse and vent


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