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Geno 01-05-2018 05:37 PM

Geno -Swagstika
 
Nice with a blade, a laser couldnt slice you as straight
Wesley snipes in the daylight, theres a price to be paid
Got you sighted, behave, my hair trigger to excited to shave
Im huntin wabbit, fagit, aiming cause you strike me as fake
I aint likely to bend, tempered, templar knight wit the pen
Dragon scale armor edge, sledge, we can fight til the death
Im to bright with the wand, blooded, with a license to gawd
My swagger solid, im an oak, movin' like im embalmed
Cast lightnin' to frauds, hit your guts, rib it, life as a frog
Tell the truth, newb, you aint seen nothin like it before
Used to pop vikidin, shit, now i live where the vikings are born
And place phone calls through the horn M.Bison adorned
Rediculous huh? Fuck it, drunk in twenty below zero degrees
If you can streak through this weather, your a hero to me
Funny, aint it? Serated knuckles i can punch thru ur faces
Simmer down, the heat is on, crooks are justice impatient

ACTIVATE SELF 01-16-2018 08:09 AM

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Nice with a blade, a laser couldnt slice you as straight
Wesley snipes in the daylight, theres a price to be paid
The syntax is dope -- straight confidence and bravado. The flow is liquid and the "Blade" flip was a nice little entandre. Plus, "Wesley Snipes in the daylight" just sounds like it's going somewhere lol.

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Got you sighted, behave, my hair trigger to excited to shave
That's dope. The punch itself could still be fleshed out some. It's nearly perfect, but could be ... idk ... but I know that you know what I mean. The concept in and of itself however is slick as fuck.

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Im huntin wabbit, fagit, aiming cause you strike me as fake
I aint likely to bend, tempered, templar knight wit the pen
Dragon scale armor edge, sledge, we can fight til the death
Nice burst of lyrical imagery. You and I have the same style. It's not just punches. It's wordplay, imagery, slick talk, rhyme scheme, running schemes and self hype with pop and ancient references thrown in for good measure.

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Im to bright with the wand, blooded, with a license to gawd
"A license to gawd". Hell, nawl, talk that shit, bruh.

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My swagger solid, im an oak, movin' like im embalmed
Cast lightnin' to frauds, hit your guts, rib it, life as a frog
Tell the truth, newb, you aint seen nothin like it before
Used to pop vikidin, shit, now i live where the vikings are born
Scandinavia? I don't envy you. I like to stay close to the beach, where the sun is hot, the water's cool, the trees give shade and women are tanned, but I hear you. Lol. Slick shit.

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And place phone calls through the horn M.Bison adorned
Okay, so M.Bison seems like maybe a sneek diss? If not it seems like a double meaning. Uhmm M. Bison is from Thailand, but obviously resembles a German/Russian dictator, which kind of plays into the whole Vikings theme, which adds relevance to the horn being used as an actual horn, which can be used as a colloquial term for phone, while at the same time serve as an allusion to bisons/buffalo having horns. I'm probably reading way too much into it though. lol.

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Rediculous huh? Fuck it, drunk in twenty below zero degrees
If you can streak through this weather, your a hero to me
Funny, aint it? Serated knuckles i can punch thru ur faces
Simmer down, the heat is on, crooks are justice impatient
I dig the Beast Coast lingo and brutal imagery.

It's always a pleasure, Gawd. Keep dropping these mini nukes. Peace.

sral 01-16-2018 05:19 PM

People sleeping.

This flows like crazy, liked the alliteration in "tempered, temple knight..." to carry it in that line. People don't realise how important it is choosing the right sounding words like that until you record and find why those words fit so well. I see you though.

Licence to gawd made me LOL

Moving like I'm embalmed was dope, reminded me of something Deadman would say actually haha!

I can't lie, Rib it, life of a frog was a little corny to me as I read it but I see why you did it

If you can streak through this weather was nice

Keep that pen moving!

Sammy 01-16-2018 09:47 PM

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Originally Posted by Genocide (Post 632770)
Got you sighted, behave, my hair trigger to excited to shave

Unnggghh *jaz face*

Geno da gawd

Elemental P 01-25-2018 09:48 PM

nice rhyme scheme. Some good imagery an shit. Flow was pretty solid too and a couple of puns speckled thru out. The knights Templar shit was cool.

Suthaveli 01-25-2018 10:36 PM

Wow. i nvr knew this section on the site existed. i felt like i just discovered a secrete treasure chest or something.

The flow in ya verse was amazing. reminds me of a late 90's heading into the 2k type flow steez. It actually triggered nostalgia for me. it was very well uniformed & you can see this easily transfer into an audio track.
coo stuff


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