''Different Hues''
 

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I wanted some proper feed on this when possible.


''Different Hues''

She was red. I was blue.
We were different hues.
Different views.
The friction grew,
The addiction too,
Which we didn't know our limits too.

She was a Dark Red, afraid of her surroundings.
I was a Carolina Blue.
Full energy and always kept pounding.
The fiery latina attitude matched her shade of Flame.
While I was true blue - Honesty and Loyalty was my main game.

Sometimes she was a Lust red, and we felt the passion together
Especially when I showed her steel blue.
I felt stronger than ever.
I wanted to reveal my Royal Blue. Show her my definition of love.
Embracing her Maroon while reminding her she will be loved.

I always made sure to communicate, even when I was teal.
But she remained oxblood, her pride kept her from keeping it real.
A dark cloud in my sky blue front.
Her feelings were Crimson - all tide up.

For what it is, yeah can't lie thought it was cool...emotion was straight, would of liked a few more multies...like they there but isntvso to speak, flow nice just idk blame the alcohol :P I'll edit when I'm straighter lol.

Liked it though, stay upwards with it.

your concept cornered you into contrivance.

the premise was cool, though, and you had a couple of good lines there.