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big baby 08-13-2016 10:04 AM

if you read this, it isn't too late, I'm just terribly sorry
 
i’m here again, dabbling with spear tips. i’ve had it to here, with calloused frontiers. this is an embarrassing feeling. i’m proud to say i ain’t a coward derailing. just kidding. the power i flail gets devoured on daily. challenges showered, descaling. howitzer spinning towards the phalanx i’m fighting. towering titan. there’s a clever excitement, aint nothing better than being slightly- no, completely consumed. marooned on skull island, subdued in dull silence. bite off more than what i could chew, and the hand i bit is that best i could do. it’s a vicious cycle visited by demons daily. frolicking illegal alien. demonic seduction is a seasons phase. hypnotic, im in love. its appealing embrace. jackson pollock thesis space. alcoholic green beret. word placement is strategic in nature. it could besiege a nether beach you fell in love with from over there, or beseech an attempt to run in and overbear. doppelganger, wearing camouflage and pretending. to pass him off as attentive. pour a shot til i absolve and my head spins. i dont recognize the guys sabotaging my friendships. heres a molotov. don’t extinguish. the fire fogs up my memory. my dreams are like deathwishes, where extra terrestrial beings visit uninvited, their means of connecting sorta blighted. my unsightly cause & effect might get solved cus all guys in top hats are detectives. dial 9-1-1 my brains sizzled in fumes my friends think i’ve gone of the deep end. but i never got into the pool. my minds all vexed, spun the rorschash, mightve saw death. inkblots caught into the matrix. tylenol glitch. i crawl in the nightingfall ditch. have you read the book, where the sidewalk ends? a rampant monster breeding hate, men in armor flee my way. helicopters feel the wave of my massive chakra. beast unchained. king kong on the empire, but more apocalyptic, kudzu vine wrap around colossal bridges, and there i am, distraught but filled with, blots of anger, but calm submissive. even god delays his judgment when i’m deranged. assalamualaikum. padmasana sage. capsule cosmic features, magnum comet seething, savor. magnum opus, see my pain? damaged people bleed; behaviors like you’ve never seen. layed my castle on the weakest layer, and now my palace sinks between the vapors

Nobody 08-18-2016 01:35 AM

This was Honorable. Thumbs approved

big baby 09-07-2016 05:31 PM

thx

Exis 09-08-2016 06:47 AM

Not bad.

big baby 09-08-2016 02:35 PM

thx

Gina 09-14-2016 04:59 AM

"I'm happy I'm not a coward derailing. Just kidding. The power I flail gets devoured on daily." Beautiful.

big baby 09-14-2016 04:55 PM

Quote:

thx

PancakeBrah 09-14-2016 10:22 PM

cool

big baby 09-15-2016 10:06 PM

thx

Eŋg 09-15-2016 11:20 PM

word placement is strategic in nature.

meta. ain't it just.

liked the fluidity of this with the concepts swimming about. some of the vessels crashed, mostly they flowed like water.

big baby 09-16-2016 04:07 PM

thx

dull boy 09-23-2016 11:15 AM

Don't remember writing this.

CopyPat 10-20-2016 02:12 AM

I liked it. Wasn't as tight and smooth as what I've seen from you in the past but you probly wrote this in 20 mins so I appreciate what you put down. Was a little scattered to me. Anyways, it's always fun to read what kinda schemes and concepts you'll come up with. Original content and vocab as usual. Cool shit, but I've seen you at way higher levels than this.

dead man 11-21-2016 08:29 PM

jackson pollock seems an apt comparison. you throw whatever you can find at a wall and hope the best reflection of yourself sticks. this made me pine for the days of paragraphical verse-form even though at times i find it hard to feel. only you can let it bleed like this.

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assalamualaikum. padmasana sage. capsule cosmic features, magnum comet seething, savor. magnum opus, see my pain? damaged people bleed; behaviors like you’ve never seen.
i guess recently its easy to think that nobody's reading. but we are.

can't wait for the next installment, friend


thanks


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