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Geno 05-27-2016 10:37 PM

Emptyness
 
So many steps, to many thoughts that roll through my head
This hole in my chest, feels bigger than ever, im sober again
shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death
older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth
ive got a beautiful girlfriend, that doesnt know who i am
That doesnt know i pretend, im not nuts -when i totally am
i got scars in my heart, its been broke, it never totally mends
it takes its toll in the end, tense, a roller coaster of rage
if this ride doesnt stop soon, ill jump towards my only escape
living life like im only insane, lonely, ill just throw it away
in a room full of people, like theres no one that stayed
Like nobody here really knows im controlling the pain
all this shit in my head hurts, worse when i hold it at bey
iono what to say, or how to convey words in emotional ways
im an ocean of hate, that keeps splashing over with waves
that my fiance thinks laughing overs ok, not knowing its fake
not knowing this face, only smiles when i know its on stage
when i know that explaining, is what ill do when its ok to say it
when i know its the safest, knowing, i dont know when that day is

Quarter O 05-27-2016 11:46 PM

Dope

Vulgar 05-30-2016 09:55 PM

Thanks for sharing this Geno. Your writer's voice shines through well because of the elements of honesty and tenets of your personal life being brought to light. My favorite bar was this one:

shit that needs to be wrote with a pen, open, closer to death
older, ghost in the flesh, demons dont age, growing in depth
^The rhyme scheme was notable here, nice acceleration.

I've felt emptiness and solitude recently too so I could identify with this. It was a good venting piece. Keep writing.

big baby 06-01-2016 10:22 PM

Will edit with feed

Exis 06-04-2016 06:59 AM

The beautiful girlfriend that doesn't know who I am resonated with me, Idk why been single for a minute lol...the emotion is nice...had some real good multies in this which I always appreciate when they isn't forced...should collab again sometime.

Tight spit,

Stay upwards my friend.

Geno 09-27-2021 07:47 PM

Forgot i wrote this. So many pieces on here i just dont remember and never saved

White LGI 09-27-2021 08:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by White Earl (Post 814504)
Forgot i wrote this. So many pieces on here i just dont remember and never saved


It is forgettable

Geno 09-28-2021 06:34 AM

Lol, probably is

veritas 09-28-2021 08:51 AM

This was dope tbh. Liked the girlfriend line.


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