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Mr. J 03-20-2016 03:03 AM

Love is War (Scrapped AOWL verse)
 
i used to fight wars with the most honorable
now their lost from view or wounded in a hospital
i spent years in another country...so far from you
wearing my heart on my sleeve was so hard to do
each night they shot at you as they shot at me
another shot of whiskey is all that I probably need
another shot from the medic would calm the beast
each night I can hear the dead as they called for me
you were my light but for some reason Id always leave
now a part of me is riddled with trips of paranoia
the other is claustrophobic, Im even scared of foyers
as the bullets rat a tat tatted high above the skies
the planes crashed into the only place it was safe...
to run & hide...thousands of innocent ones have died
I thought I was doing good but this is where corruption lies
where the flames engulf everything eventually erupting in cries...
each fond memory turns into another charred body
& now a simple BANG would have my heart stopping
its hard watching a celebration based on Independence
because I fought for it, you wanted it...a twisted friendship
when I first left you told me you would always love me
seeing you again after all these years...you wont even hug me...

JESODIST 03-20-2016 04:22 AM

If he told you he loved you then that Means he has True Emotion,
Hiding under all that Rude Commotion likely conquer running Through Obstructions,
He has visited many places now awaiting a New Excursion,
wouldn't feel this way if he Knew the Potion,
And would still own somethings if it wasn't for the Crude Extortion,
By pirates while Fishing in the scenes Over seeing the Blue Ocean,
That slowly corodes the coastline due to Pure Erosion,
Metaphorically Speaking the Abominable Heathen is Astronomically Breaching,
New boundries Supersonically Speeding Reaching these opponents are Chronologically Beaten,
Now lets Talk about the Purposely Honorable who post Verses that are Supposedly Memorable,
They eat what I serve cause its Obviously Delectable, Lost in a path where they are Totally Susceptible,
to any lie they Heard while revelling on the Monstrous Spectacle caz they be Morally Infectable
Things haven't change we still Love you Brother, Feeling slightly Strange like there was No Other,
Our friendship is a Straight One, seldomlly inspired by the Same Psalms,
Only we can suspend it which is highly unlikely So Remain Calm...

asylum 03-20-2016 06:17 AM

dropped jesodist feed first because i thought i was reading who started the topic.. @JESODIST
hah you really warmed up about halfway through g. you got skills man rhymes for days no doubt about it. this piece was very peaceful for your work man. i enjoyed the change of tone, you should do some storytelling with this kind of tone. keep em comin.
@Mr. J, this was really dope bro. i truly enjoyed it. great piece, lots of hard hitting subject matter. the rhymes weren't hashed out because it wasn't one you stuck to, but I appreciate the angle and encourage you to polish it up a bit. this could be a real gem.

Mr. J 03-21-2016 02:44 PM

lol @JESODIST....thanks for your input I will add it later & call it a collab....or not.....probably not


thanks @asylum it was going to be my original piece but I felt there were too many people using it already
I had to talk an alternative route in the end which worked out to say the least...
let me know if you drop anything and I will hit it up

FLOOR LINED 03-22-2016 07:37 PM

this is dope


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