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Cimmerian 12-05-2015 08:46 AM

the new year's Eve
 
Pea coated December, scarves and the sweaters
A kaleidoscope colored crowd packed all together
I’m fettered within—cuffed to a beer and a grin
Paul Revering the revelry here with my friends
Records spin, women turn leaves on the wind—
Weaving with my limbs, never to see them again
Holiday season I guess, while stealing a breath—
There’s a sweat booze cigarette feel to the scent
Ignored the odor, ordered a vodka and soda—
For a long blonde begonia from Minnesota
Sort of laughed and gabbed, talked Malbecs and Cabs
Would you like to dance? She used to . . . tap and jazz
As we slide on the floor smooth ivory chords—
Beg me to dip her, our dance steps paint a picture
Raphael'd for a spell until the moment in time—
Finds us all Auld Lang Syne bodies entwined
Lips twist licorice, her tongue cools as it enters
One hand through my hair, her spare pulls at my Windsor
Must she lust a last one night stand, Colonel Custer?
My palms play catch up, her body cuts the mustard
Cab lights glide through the black city grid
Like firefly nights—those Julys as a kid
But I’m a man with a plan, to Ma’am, the game’s over
Until we semi-sober roll over with our hangovers.

sral 12-05-2015 09:48 AM

Dope shit.

Good to see you back at it!

Keep that pen moving!

dead man 12-05-2015 11:12 AM

Awesome

Vulgar 12-08-2015 09:29 PM

Pretty dope - like a vintage jazz album with hip hop's sense of humor and dash of abandon.

Cimmerian 12-27-2015 09:36 AM

Thanks, all.

Tis' the season.

Cimm.

Quarter O 12-27-2015 05:23 PM

I feel like I read a sophisticated novel by :novel author here: ..You're diction is proper. Makes me ask if you're from London or something but that's my ignorance for thinking you have to be from London to write proper english.. A few lines were on the cheesy side but most of it was cool. Shit was nice honestly..Dont wanna make it seem like I wasnt feelin it..Would be nice to see how shit sounds in audio.. keep rockin tho ..

Pinot Grij 12-28-2015 09:44 AM

Quote:

Would you like to dance? She used to . . . tap and jazz
As we slide on the floor smooth ivory chords—
Your style smashes every note of predictability to pieces, which is what makes this so fun to read. I never know what's coming next - and that is a rare talent in a form we've all been around for many years. Vulgar summed up my thoughts exactly. This was a pleasure to read.

Bodey 01-02-2016 03:19 AM

Mm that last line though


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