A Topical Request to... One of Our More Seasoned Writerz. Enter
 

@sraL...

I have a request. Ive never been a huge fan of your work.
"NOT BECAUSE YOU ARENT A DOPE WRITER"...

Its mainly because your writing lives in a world of make believe that ive never really entered and enjoyed being in... basically. What im asking of you is either one of two things...


I want to see you drop a really dark, tormented piece about a person (preferably yourself) whos soul is torn either on some raw demonic shit.. or just on some insane depression overdosing suicidal my life sucks type shit. You respo ded to a piece i wrote once and said that is was so fucki g dope and ill and that you felt like i was talki g about you the whole time. Well.. honestly. Thats the goal i strive to reach everytime i wrote. Thats what make meant o write is the hope that when someone reads it they keep reading it and feel lime i just cracked there head open and wrote about everything i found in their memories.

Well... i want a piece from you like that.
Options are... either id like to see you drop a solo piece thats i sanely sick or that we for the first time ever.... collab on one.

Are you down? Im not on much anymore.. but im down for this if you want the collab. Otherwise write the solo and lemme know when your done. I just need this from you man. I dont know.

For anyone interested in the piece of mine that lars really loved. WHICH HE NEVER FINISHED READING ACCORDING TO HIS RESPONSE. -(So Finish Now!!!)...

HERE IT IS

Synopses..
unfortunately, there's more to me than what i express
if i could put it in words, you would think im summoning death
if i sum it up in a breath, i'd suffocate fore im through
imagine the hatred in me, while i contain it for you !!!!!
can't hang with the truth, but i can blend with the lies
if your word is your bond, why is it bending it with mine
instead of defying, try to comprehend while i'm here
i found my dream girl, and i wish she never appeared
the devil is near, these problems run deeper than love
just scratching the surface, everything beneath it is mud
so i'm lethal with drugs, heartbreak -depression n rage
my true love was alcohol, especially when were engaged
i'm never afraid, to talk about the thoughts in my head
but then again, if i talked you'd prolly all get upset
cause and effect, so if realities a step i cant take drunk
then alcoholics are fucced, why the hell cant they run ..?

pride and paranoia, the pair that has imprisoned my soul
praying for sanity, prepared to find a different approach
i live in this globe, apparently designed by my demons
so this air that i breath, is just another sign of my weakness
I'm trying to beat this, repetitious pattern i weave
my original sins, the self inflicted habits of greed
i subsequently have to proceed, past the point of return
I'm to clean, to relapse against my poisonous germs
the voice of concern, is all the hell i hear when you speak
call me possessed when ..the only evil in this mirror is me
but appearance deceives, intervenes when the truth is defined
and the lies, are what produces lines between you and I
I used to try, and always wanted what i hated to be
my love is my life, why did you have to take it from me...?

the lonely life, searchin but I can't find companionship
or maybe just, i don't understand what a companion is
so answer this, why don't you even care my hearts hurt?
not perfect yourself, but i never share those harsh words
another sharp swerve and wrong turn, my vision is tunnel
sure.. your a sexy beast mah, but i don't live in the jungle
more innocent -humble, u take advantage of all the above
layed myself on the line, just for you to walk on like a rug
until lightning struck, i was to blind to see your true side
in-between trust n love, is apparently where the truth lies
two confused minds, ones older -and I'm tired of pain
but if i go to sleep now, i just might die where I'm laying
privately praying, but god's probably enjoying the show
i did the devils work once, didn't think he would torture me tho
i look at less fortunate folks, and i still feel no compassion
even though i have a heart, it bleeds through open gashes

been working hard to reach goals, won't buckle from stress
but I was sent here for the struggle, and I'll suffer to death
my concepts stay focused, waiting for something to change
my progression remains hopeless, afraid I'm stuck in my ways
I need a new trade ..just an idea that my company raised
problem with that, addiction is my only companies traits
I must be insane, the voice within my heads getting louder
tellin me do drugs n be a failure, but I'm failing without'em
counting the days going by, I'm twenty eight years deep
if you live and you learn, guess you graduate when deceased
i just aggravated the beast, annoying the women i love
my gene pools liquor n drugs, but cant swim when I'm drunk
and if that isn't enough, im drowning and hardly afloat
know what its like to die, the lord pardoned me though
a god awful approach, thats why i asked him for help
but walk around like christ, no sense in asking myself

I'm still bumping my head, and all i wanna do is react
but can't climb the wall, i built when my ruins collapsed
I produce an unusual laugh, everytime i notice a new brick
maybe i miss the misery, and can't cope with improvement
supposed to be human, but I won't accept imperfections
never settle for less, yet my rep is less than impressive
sexual preference, searching for an earth to hold hands with
though the sex is intense, when she isn't worth my romantic
romance is.. well -I'm just flirting with death and disease
almost definitely, aroused by percocets like a sexual tease
can't regret being clean, but doubt the demon's absenteeism
humor the dead me n laugh, sort of found a happy medium
hate the path its leading in, its almost like I'm ready to use
but don't ever judge me, unless you've walked in 70 shoes
when i get in the mood, maybe I'll change these concepts
for now.. hip hop has saved me, i can't explain the logik..

i know your looking for change, but the pains what i have to feel
if my world turns around, then somebody else grabbed the wheel
brake pads that squeal, make it harder for me to stop movement
love u hate u -fuck u trade u, I mite be lots of things -but not stupid
this is hip hop music, I write the real and I'll never stray from that
whats my life like?... nigga, if u had a clue you'd be afraid to ask
can't explain my past, then again -who the hell ever said lifes fair?
guess I'm just living my dreams out, to bad they were nightmares


....i don't know how much longer i can pretend like this.

lmao wow

give me an hour to read this

I thought you were calling me out to start with.

This is not what I was hoping for

Nah... ive already called you out hahaha. You wouldnt accept. But those days are dead and gone. Id much rather collab or just see you drop a retarded piece thats dark and disturbing. Not like your storytelling shit.. but more lime introspect type shit like what i have here. Ive just never seen you write anything like this. I mean. Your a great writer. But like i said... i usually dont enjoy your content. Asside from that. Your shit is airtight. AnywY. Im outtie for a while man..

Lemme know. Hit y inbox if you have any ideas for a collab or just drop a ill solo joi t. Would prfer you go first and i drop he second verse if its a collab so i can vibe off your energy. But either way. Holla

Ill check back in a whie. 1
Im jive on a xana hangover today so feeling good lol.

synopses isn't a word.

@Genocide that concept is over done tho

I don't fuck w/ topicals that often but when I do, majority of writers go off that angle

dark/o'd depressed type shit

I tend to over look them now because every topicalist has gone that route

Yes, it is. It's the plural of "synopsis."

Certain with a machete vs. Diode

Pedantic Certain is pedantic.

You know exactly what context in which I made this statement.

++++++++++ NO IRONY +++++++++++

lmao did diode just admit he was wrong?

@Amen
I dont care if its overdone lmao. Idgaf tbh
Its what i like to write ane its what i like to read. If you payed more attention its kind of what the whole thread is about.

How many bars you doing?

U know what I want to see Lars write ?

A suicide note ,right before he offs himself


Dudes overrated as fuck. Not a top ten topicalist on this site


Gets by on name recognition alone. Dude has zero flow

lmao did you come back here from your little hiatus just to say that?

Now this I like

lol this thread is basically yall bashing on sral for being an amateur writer... well if its any consolation because i barely know the dude or read enough stuff on this site really to be considered a top ten member or whatever......but i think sral does well for what he attempts to consider within this site......and for real i would rather read more of dudes stuff so that i can get a clear picture of what he is trying to enstate.... as for genocide i think a lot of writers go in that direction like people have been commenting about in this thread... still i find originality and knowledge to be the foundation for most of the pieces that i really enjoy instead of things like beauty or ugliness found in many authors pieces because its kind of like the easy way out...... for me i feel like you should challenge yourself and others on that braniac level by using some tools that you encounter in life like experience and knowledge per se.... just my opinion though others go different directions like using multis and inners and rhymes to. but for me that's just too basic overall

so what you are saying is you enjoy reading the same genre of topics over and over and over.... and over again?

and it never gets redundant for you?

that's crazy...

that's like reading a horror book, 10 times - same title but different author.

lol that's what seems to be popular these days though.... people mimicking each other or building ideas off a similar trend

@Mike Wrecka

I'll bite this once: Name five topical heads on this website who've beat me and haven't had an L handed back at some point.

Matter of fact, name five topical heads for that matter from any time in my 15+ year career that have done that.

Put your best names forward and see how I stack up against them. I've caught L's, sure, but very few over the past 5-6 years at least.

That isn't because of my "name" at all, hell, Lars isn't even my "name" if we getting picky. Ive won a lot here as Brian Bryan, Diablo, Clutbuck etc

Nothing you've said has anything based in fact. My flow one of my better attributes.

Half the time you don't even multi LOL

It's 2015 bro, not 1998 at Da Undergound. Things have evolved. You just mad I'm the evolution of text who adapted and survived while you faded away to fossilised obscurity.