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Sharp 08-11-2015 07:16 PM

Reserve Battle: Greed vs Mr. J - GREED WINS
 
Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:
  • Verses are due Monday , August 17th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
  • Battles that lack votes may close later.
  • One sided battles may get closed early.
  • Extensions are 24 hours


Line Limit:
  • Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
  • If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
@Greed @Mr. J

Greed 08-17-2015 05:43 PM

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@Mr. J

Mr. J 08-17-2015 07:39 PM

I'll post later tonight....10?

Mr. J 08-18-2015 01:18 AM

Fuck this puppet, this faggot ain't speakin' on shit let him clench his lips harder
"It's over" before it started, if he could order a rimjob. he'd want the 2000 Vince Carter
all I'm thinkin' is how many times he gon' flip that avatar I sense the simplicity in you
one punch you'll get 8, puttin' you on your back quicker than an infinity symbol..
'Greed" tryna make it sound like you makin' money off text, that fame is rare..
but I understand why you stand by that logic, you really don't have change to spare
you couldn't spend a quarter on a gumball machine without it weighing your conscience
that makes me question how you chopping up rocks with the razors you found while staying at your moms crib
either way I forget this battle happening so like your girl on my lap I'm bout to ounce
you winning here is classic, but it's always going to be reasonable without the doubt
@Greed

Greed 08-18-2015 02:09 AM

I call the shots, if u dont think its fair, draw
Everyone already knows u Mistah J.. AIR BALL
Lol. Whining about dead man but ima split yo neck sideways
U such a baby joker u gon be considered knocked the fuck out by next friday
Sipping cosmos outta two straws, ur lifestyle fuckin wrong
Bf slips u that date rape the only time ur man poem something strong
As far as writing prestige this faggots is fucking low
Calling yourself the clown prince wont ever raise your status as a juggalo
U are the joke. It seems you dont understand the issue
Theres a big difference between the world laughing at you and with you


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fraze 08-19-2015 06:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mr. J (Post 521721)
Fuck this puppet, this faggot ain't speakin' on shit let him clench his lips harder
"It's over" before it started, if he could order a rimjob. he'd want the 2000 Vince Carter
i think i get what you're going for but not sure. this doesn't seem like a very forceful punch either way
all I'm thinkin' is how many times he gon' flip that avatar I sense the simplicity in you
one punch you'll get 8, puttin' you on your back quicker than an infinity symbol..
super light.
'Greed" tryna make it sound like you makin' money off text, that fame is rare..
but I understand why you stand by that logic, you really don't have change to spare
better, but this isn't worded effectively. stand by that logic could have been set up better and you dont connect it to the punch very well. could have went with something like a homeless angle to connect standing and change
you couldn't spend a quarter on a gumball machine without it weighing your conscience
that makes me question how you chopping up rocks with the razors you found while staying at your moms crib
rhyme here is a stretch. setup and punch are too wordy. take out words that aren't wordplay or connecting to the punch
either way I forget this battle happening so like your girl on my lap I'm bout to ounce
you winning here is classic, but it's always going to be reasonable without the doubt
have no clue what this was

Quote:

Originally Posted by Greed (Post 521751)
I call the shots, if u dont think its fair, draw
Everyone already knows u Mistah J.. AIR BALL
cool concept. could have be setup to hit harder
Lol. Whining about dead man but ima split yo neck sideways
U such a baby joker u gon be considered knocked the fuck out by next friday
overworded punch ok bar.
Sipping cosmos outta two straws, ur lifestyle fuckin wrong
Bf slips u that date rape the only time ur man poem something strong
doesn't work both ways. wp is alright but this is light to me
As far as writing prestige this faggots is fucking low
Calling yourself the clown prince wont ever raise your status as a juggalo
i feel like you missed the wording here ok concept.
U are the joke. It seems you dont understand the issue
Theres a big difference between the world laughing at you and with you
nice flow on the closer. straightforward but harsh.

This was a cool battle. J was doing some interesting things. Whatup. I liked the range of different concepts, but still need to work on wording them effectively. skip the low hanging fruit is probably played. stand by logic and conscience had potential to me, but i didn't really have anything quoted. the verse could have been stronger, but it was still a interesting read because you have a diff style from a lot of dudes here.

Greed also had a decent verse, i liked the opener and closer in particular, but ive probably seen better verses from you, cause those were still a lil light. the rest of the bars werent bad, just nothing that stood out as special.

Leaning towards greed with the stronger bars and fewer misses.

Vote: Greed

Allen Knight 08-20-2015 09:43 PM

all I'm thinkin' is how many times he gon' flip that avatar I sense the simplicity in you
one punch you'll get 8, puttin' you on your back quicker than an infinity symbol..
'Greed" tryna make it sound like you makin' money off text, that fame is rare..
but I understand why you stand by that logic, you really don't have change to spare

Vs


Lol. Whining about dead man but ima split yo neck sideways
U such a baby joker u gon be considered knocked the fuck out by next friday
Sipping cosmos outta two straws, ur lifestyle fuckin wrong
Bf slips u that date rape the only time ur man poem something strong
U are the joke. It seems you dont understand the issue
Theres a big difference between the world laughing at you and with you


V/Greed, pretty cool battle here. J had acouple of good lines that hit nice,
but i felt he had misses that were off & it hurt him here.
Greed's opener coulda been fire worded diff
but i thought the baby joker bar was good, overall he was a lil more consistent
then j w/ one more quote. Props to both.

Junto 08-21-2015 03:38 AM

Fuck this puppet, this faggot ain't speakin' on shit let him clench his lips harder
"It's over" before it started, if he could order a rimjob. he'd want the 2000 Vince Carter

damn next level shit... wording was off man but the concept is crazy, I fuck wit it
all I'm thinkin' is how many times he gon' flip that avatar I sense the simplicity in you
one punch you'll get 8, puttin' you on your back quicker than an infinity symbol..
this somethin I seen before... real predictable
'Greed" tryna make it sound like you makin' money off text, that fame is rare..
but I understand why you stand by that logic, you really don't have change to spare
cool idea, not bad. the executions not there to me though
you couldn't spend a quarter on a gumball machine without it weighing your conscience
that makes me question how you chopping up rocks with the razors you found while staying at your moms crib
ha ... long, but not bad
either way I forget this battle happening so like your girl on my lap I'm bout to ounce
you winning here is classic, but it's always going to be reasonable without the doubt
saw what u tryna go for but didn't tie it together right... wording hurt u a lot homie

vs.

I call the shots, if u dont think its fair, draw
Everyone already knows u Mistah J.. AIR BALL

this was fresh... unorthodox wording but hit nice
Lol. Whining about dead man but ima split yo neck sideways
U such a baby joker u gon be considered knocked the fuck out by next friday

haha yo I like this too
Sipping cosmos outta two straws, ur lifestyle fuckin wrong
Bf slips u that date rape the only time ur man poem something strong
creative shit... nothin wild but solid
As far as writing prestige this faggots is fucking low
Calling yourself the clown prince wont ever raise your status as a juggalo
okay... coulda been executed better
U are the joke. It seems you dont understand the issue
Theres a big difference between the world laughing at you and with you
tired concept to me, but works a little better for the personal aspect

first off props to both for puttin on in Reserves cuz this was quality shit
I don't think no one got Mr J first reference but the rimjob / Carter dunk idea dope as hell
Aside from that he had a couple others I liked but wording was KILLIN em throughout
Even on the opener I think that's why people missin it..... but the concepts were solid
8 infinity didn't work for me though, just seen the play before. & closer too sloppy
Opener nameplay from Greed was smooth... one a them 'so simple but works perfect' to me
Baby joker heat, good reference. Poem was a creative play... fell of a little bit after...
But overall a nice verse from Greed & a little more consistent throughout, so got this one.

good shit

V/ Greed

Unfukwitable 08-22-2015 01:56 AM

Fuck this puppet, this faggot ain't speakin' on shit let him clench his lips harder
"It's over" before it started, if he could order a rimjob. he'd want the 2000 Vince Carter

vs

Lol. Whining about dead man but ima split yo neck sideways
U such a baby joker u gon be considered knocked the fuck out by next friday
Sipping cosmos outta two straws, ur lifestyle fuckin wrong
Bf slips u that date rape the only time ur man poem something strong


Decent read here alot of lines that feel flat in comparison of where u couldve both took them but the winner got this 2 Quotes to 1.. v/Greed

ill nik-A 08-22-2015 05:32 AM

I got Mr J's opener vs greeds first two which I thought were solid

I got greed here


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