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Adonis 08-07-2015 06:53 PM

Fraze 0-0 vs. Amgin Shaheen 0-0 [NIGMA WINS VIA NS]
 
AOWL Season V, Week 2


SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due
Monday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Tuesday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK

There are NO extensions.

Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words).

Votes are due Thursday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Friday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK. Failure to vote will result in automatic sign out for the next week.

All competitors must vote on THREE battles and post links/ references in the voting thread.

Full rules Here

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=119848

TOPIC:
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Perfume

Movie Quote:He possessed a power stronger than the power of money, or terror, or death - the invincible power to command the love of man kind.

G/Luck @fraze @Amgin Shaheen

Nigma 08-08-2015 10:58 PM

The Tale of Satan Spawn in a Game of Chess



"He possessed a power stronger
than the power of money, or terror,
or death - the invincible power to
command the love of man kind."


i sit atop the highest peaks. its scenic, you know.
lived the times when Egypt was still gleaming in gold
i seen the rise of hell and all the demons it holds
and i've seen Orions Belt utop the Giza Plateau

Who am I?

i'm the...
face of David when gazing into Goliath's eyes
survived and scribed into the tale that tells the rise of Christ
crumbled morale's. died that night. rule the world. despise my life
i'm a cloudless genie, proud to be me. to these people, i'm like a giant
a higher life devout of meaning; wisdom. i am life and science
a business minded pirate whose clients both aroused and screaming
my interests combine to chose a spokesman, it's my valued teacher
and i'm proud to lead such a sound regime, leave you tied to trees
confined to leashes like brides allegiance when vows are reading
the founding king of a thousand leagues leaving mountains leaning
too indecisive to pick a side so i bounce between them
dipped my mind in Egyptian science and light unleashes
feeling grim.. and with my scythe beside me i ride to Eden
slits for eyes, i'm cheeched, my horizons bleak with its cloudy features
glimpse, it hits my eyes through the hidden vines of a browning region
i see a sky of leaves from a dying tree that is out of seasons
its a crying plea for the deity in the skies existence
its a rivalry between day and night, between shade and light
it's the pain, the price, its the graves of Mayans whose minds predicted the fabled rise of reich's and their crimes committed
the sign addictions alive within them, the wisest whisper their valued secrets
its the mixing of life elixirs, a knifes incision to scalp its features
as if you take a schitzo's brain, misdirect confession thoughts of his
suppress his talking lips and dissecting his second consciousness
deflecting his lobbing fists and injecting his neck with a calming bliss
and when the end results are in, we're directing it at the populace

fraze 08-09-2015 11:05 AM

check for the record.

fraze 08-11-2015 04:19 AM

If the extension is good I'll try to finish my verse tonight. Either way I'll still vote, just haven't have time to get to the verse yet.

Razah 08-12-2015 04:48 PM

Dope verse. Flow was butter.

vNigma

UnbornBuddha 08-12-2015 05:07 PM

A very distinct style you have. Almost seems weaponized, in a way. You have a lot of schemes, and for the most part it carries out well. Although, I can't say I particularly enjoyed the story or was engrossed by it. But it did have some very distinct lines, like the dissection of a schizo second consciousness, that can be a real cool verse right there. But, like I said I think the writing comes off as very skillful, but the skill was applied, in areas that do not contribute to a more engrossing story.

Thanks for the read, and hope you keep participating. It would be nice to see what else you can concoct. I feel like you are capable of much more, and I would like to witness it.


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