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Victor. 08-06-2015 07:37 PM

RND2. Bust vs Lotto Smirk {Bust wins}
 
Battle Arena Tournament

@Bust @Lotto Smirk

Rules

Due Dates:
  • Verses are due SUNDAY,
    August 2nd 2015 11:59 PM PST.
  • Check Ins are due FRIDAY, August 7th 2015
  • Voting ends Friday July 16th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
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  • Extensions are 24 hours
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Line Limit:
  • Min. = 10 lines
  • Max. = 10 lines
  • NO EXCEPTIONS

General Rules:
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  • 2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
  • Feeding = DQ.
  • Recycling = DQ.
  • Biting = DQ.
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    means you will be disqualified.
  • A check in IS mandatory.
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  • If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
    must match the 1st person's line amount.

Bust 08-09-2015 07:18 AM

Dooooog,

I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u,
If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that
Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream
Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..
^thsts awful taste, so get back to tossin salads n talkin fake
Cuz Why worry bout lotto smirk, when baby wipes'll get that shit eating grin off ya face

Lotto Smirk 08-10-2015 10:05 AM

if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust
I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him
this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them
don't give a fuck what u done on RB cus on netcees u a joker
u NEED that work on rap battles cus here we still apply to u as mediocre
The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name

G/l

Ruck 08-11-2015 07:03 AM

I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u,
okay
If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that
cool idea
Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream
cool idea but indirect?
Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..
weak.
^thsts awful taste, so get back to tossin salads n talkin fake
Cuz Why worry bout lotto smirk, when baby wipes'll get that shit eating grin off ya face
second line was nice but the first ruined it a bit..

had some nice ideas - decent verse but can use work in all areas - better set ups will compliment your good ideas on the second line.

v

if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust
not really hard hitting?
I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him
cool
this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them
cool
don't give a fuck what u done on RB cus on netcees u a joker
u NEED that work on rap battles cus here we still apply to u as mediocre
decent
The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name
okay

solid verse - first bar was weak though but overall it was good.

overall - vote - Lotto Smirk - had the better verse overall imo - both had a good showing though - stay up.

Useless 08-11-2015 11:47 PM

I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u
----aite'ish
Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream
---not a fan of double wp's but this was aite. Shoulda left the coffee wp out tho IMO.


Vs.

I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him
this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them
----Imma try to help u out bro. These two bars are pretty much the exact same. Shoulda picked one and trashed the other
The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name
----I liked where this was going then it took a turn for the worse. Execution killed it.

V. Bust

Ghost1 08-12-2015 05:03 PM

Dooooog,
Doog?


I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u,

Meh

If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that

Played

Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream

Fire....kinda gay tho man lol

Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..

Eh

^thsts awful taste, so get back to tossin salads n talkin fake
Cuz Why worry bout lotto smirk, when baby wipes'll get that shit eating grin off ya face

This is ok I guess....weird tho



if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust

Ok

I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him

Eh

this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them

Seen too many Ispaz flips lately an this wasn't a good one NE ways

don't give a fuck what u done on RB cus on netcees u a joker
u NEED that work on rap battles cus here we still apply to u as mediocre

This was cool

The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name

Played

G/l
Pussy^





Didn't love this battle. Niether really blew me away.....lotto was a bit too simple an bust was trynna do some weird shit w his verse.......bust still had the lotb for me w his latte line tho so I'll edge it to him

V bust

Sharp 08-12-2015 07:59 PM

I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u,
predictable and done a lot but relevant
If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that
post flips are pretty done at this point. appreciate the connections you're trying to make but not hugely feeling it
Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream
la-te and lot-a don't quite work for me cause i'd say 'lot-uh'. but this makes sense and is cool imo
Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..
I think I'm misisng something with this? or you just did simple bar division?
^thsts awful taste, so get back to tossin salads n talkin fake
Cuz Why worry bout lotto smirk, when baby wipes'll get that shit eating grin off ya face
smirk lines are done a lot on him. this is ok


if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust
cool
I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him
did he beat odd? idk but if he did this is ok
this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them
kinda predictable, I spaz flips are frequent enough where I'd shy away from just using those wihtout any other ltayesr
don't give a fuck what u done on RB cus on netcees u a joker
u NEED that work on rap battles cus here we still apply to u as mediocre
what does 'apply to u as mediocre' mean? I get what you're going for but that doesn't make sense to me
The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name
mag lines are dead to me. Maybe its because I write them on the reg but they're done to death


man close but I got bust with slihglty better misses and thats' really all. tight battle, props to both.

v/bust

Destroyer 08-12-2015 09:36 PM

I'm not trying to go all crazy with the breakdowns
I got lotto here tho
was t feeling much of busts verse, didn't understand all the fraze references
thought odd job was pretty dope, mediocre was ok too
v/lotto

Victor. 08-13-2015 08:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bust (Post 517721)
Dooooog,

I spit phrases that thrill, but it's a hobby to murder too,
See i got some frazes that kill.. In fact He Constantly bodies n buries u,
cool personal attempt here, but the execution felt sorta lazy.. if the setup here was more relevant to him constantly losing to fraze I think it could have been a stronger line
If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that
LOL ok this is dope
Ur too girly man, type to self tan in early Jan., n claim to suck a dick up mean
Damn, I'd love to find a reason NOT to call latte bitch but when he coffee spits up cream
cool attempt here, I like how u tried to tie in the multiple schemes in the punch, I just find the LATTE bit forced. maybe not tho, its borderline. I still dig the bar for the creativty
Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..
LOL! this my fav style of punch, I really liked this line. super sting
^thsts awful taste, so get back to tossin salads n talkin fake
Cuz Why worry bout lotto smirk, when baby wipes'll get that shit eating grin off ya face
this is aight, the "baby wipes" part thru me off cuz it dont add anything to the bar

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lotto Smirk (Post 518050)
if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust
ok but sorta bland
I'm a Bond villain u lack vision no-ones predicting u might win
u had a good run on the odd job but now ima take ur head off just like him
ok but again its sorta just there, its really lacking emotion or ur personality. i think u need to find a away to come thru more in ur bars
this is easy for me, u sleazy wen u free, against u I'll waste ten
cus when I write Ispaz rhymes u just looked retarded when u faced them
ok cool, this is good
don't give a fuck what u done on RB cus on netcees u a joker
u NEED that work on rap battles cus here we still apply to u as mediocre
eh, this is kinda just a bar that should of been left on the cutting room floor
The guns are out making sure u dead, hush featured u for to long ur lame
So I'm entering the next round, emptying it N leaving u w/ just 2 mags to your name
hmm. the beginning was fire. entering the next round and emptying it... that was really good. u ended it awkward and weak sadly. so the punch didnt land full power
G/l

I got bust here.

Unfukwitable 08-13-2015 11:16 AM

If u can't beat um join um, that's a bitch move n u no longer should Rap
S'like fraze gets u the ball on the block n u lob it up. u gotta POST stronger than that
Always writing long as verses.. Pure trash, I'm like bitch surrender the pen
I mean ull drop 20 lines to get 1 quote.. Resulting in a hit percentage of 10..

vs

if the weapons out, I'm killing I ain't missing u TRUST
cus when I'm letting them off it's certain the shots are destined to bust


One had the more clever ideas and the stronger execution, the other one just came w/ a dry drop no lines wowed me or anything, 100. v/Bust

Hush 08-13-2015 01:38 PM

5-2 Bust wins


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