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Hush 07-26-2015 06:41 PM

RND1. Witty vs Killing Spree {Witty wins}
 
Battle Arena Tournament

@Witty @Killing Spree

Rules

Due Dates:
  • Verses are due SUNDAY,
    August 2nd 2015 11:59 PM PST.
  • Check Ins are due WEDNESDAY, July 11th 2014
  • Voting ends Friday July 16th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
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  • Extensions are 24 hours
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    must match the 1st person's line amount.

Witty 07-26-2015 06:50 PM

Check and g'luck bro.

Might drop tonight @Killing Spree

Witty 07-26-2015 07:50 PM

Want my Toy's Story? it lives above Dis Knee ready to hit Cars
And when it's Drawn Out, shit gets uglier than your Pixar
Lars lost to a few dudes, called 'em out b4 he splits, to land even
If u did that shit, it'd be quicker to list the dudes u HAVE beaten
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
U think he tried clappin'? fuck no...music's all this guy's blastin'
It's ironic, we all saw ur name was killing spree...and died laughin'
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member

Kill Spree 07-27-2015 07:57 AM

Check @Witty
I'll try to have a verse tonight or tomorrow

Kill Spree 07-27-2015 06:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hush premag intro
Welcome to the first Battle Arena tournament aka the BAT. Maestro hit the music

Quote:

Originally Posted by witty in the kareoke roast
Looks normal tbh.


see...
alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
think u winnin? step to the plate, end up cracked till ya dead
Cos only Victa saw u N the BAT, as it swung & opened the back of ya head
plus we know u king D/R, & keep ridin as long as u feel weak
but jus cos u all over Kare Package, doesnt mean u'll level UP to Kill Spree
Got bars for life that'll keep u swamped in paper for thinkin u so tough
so let this put ya mind in bogs, right next to ur body & the others i dispose of
u been chill but i've always hated this faggot so im deadin this hoex
between us? its cuts, two ways, me startin wit ya gut & end wit ya throat
@Hush
lets open this for votes. good shit @Witty

Chyeahhh!!! 07-27-2015 08:08 PM

he speaks....
 
Witty had the opener and closer, solar system, the Lars shit


Spree had the kare package


Vote Witty

Useless 07-27-2015 08:50 PM

Want my Toy's Story? it lives above Dis Knee ready to hit Cars
And when it's Drawn Out, shit gets uglier than your Pixar
Lars lost to a few dudes, called 'em out b4 he splits, to land even
If u did that shit, it'd be quicker to list the dudes u HAVE beaten
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
U think he tried clappin'? fuck no...music's all this guy's blastin'
It's ironic, we all saw ur name was killing spree...and died laughin'
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member

I enjoyed the whole verse. Thought a couple lines were light but yaknow a jab is better than miss. Good shit witty.

Vs

alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
plus we know u king D/R, & keep ridin as long as u feel weak
but jus cos u all over Kare Package, doesnt mean u'll level UP to Kill Spree

Both these lines were dope. But ur other three were misses.

Gotta give it to witty on his consistency. He didn't have a bad bar. Spree had two haymakers but witty had a haymaker too.

V. Witty

Flow 07-27-2015 09:00 PM

Witty had the last two bars and the died laughing bar. The rest were good concepts just didn't feel them.

Killing spree really only had one bar that matched with either of the three I mentioned by witty.

Vote witty

fraze 07-27-2015 10:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Witty (Post 511968)
Want my Toy's Story? it lives above Dis Knee ready to hit Cars
And when it's Drawn Out, shit gets uglier than your Pixar
cool word association bar. but i think you could have done better with a different set up focusing on the pixar wp
Lars lost to a few dudes, called 'em out b4 he splits, to land even
If u did that shit, it'd be quicker to list the dudes u HAVE beaten
ok. a little light
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
nice assocations again, but light jab
U think he tried clappin'? fuck no...music's all this guy's blastin'
It's ironic, we all saw ur name was killing spree...and died laughin'
ok
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member
this was funny

Quote:

Originally Posted by Killing Spree (Post 512770)
see...
alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
tooo soooon. this is cool do.
think u winnin? step to the plate, end up cracked till ya dead
Cos only Victa saw u N the BAT, as it swung & opened the back of ya head
nah. forced with wording issues.
plus we know u king D/R, & keep ridin as long as u feel weak
but jus cos u all over Kare Package, doesnt mean u'll level UP to Kill Spree
nah.
Got bars for life that'll keep u swamped in paper for thinkin u so tough
so let this put ya mind in bogs, right next to ur body & the others i dispose of
not bad.
u been chill but i've always hated this faggot so im deadin this hoex
between us? its cuts, two ways, me startin wit ya gut & end wit ya throat
doesn't quite hit to me

Witty had Pixar and the closer. KS had opener and bogs. Witty had a more creative verse with better concepts, but his punches were generally pretty light. KS had much harshers wording which amped up his verse a little, but the misses cancel that out to a certain extent. It's kind of a weird clash of styles so i could see it going either way based on preferences, but I think Witty has a better written verse and I want to reward the creativity.

Vote: Witty

Victor. 07-28-2015 04:00 PM

Bump.

Amen. 07-28-2015 04:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Witty (Post 511968)
Want my Toy's Story? it lives above Dis Knee ready to hit Cars
And when it's Drawn Out, shit gets uglier than your Pixar
- Creative. I fucks w/ it.
Lars lost to a few dudes, called 'em out b4 he splits, to land even
If u did that shit, it'd be quicker to list the dudes u HAVE beaten
- Simple but straight forward.
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
- Mild
U think he tried clappin'? fuck no...music's all this guy's blastin'
It's ironic, we all saw ur name was killing spree...and died laughin'
- I believe I've seen someone used this exact concept on him on RB.
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member
- Simple but straight forward.

Fox - Not a bad verse bro. I think this may be like the 1st or 2nd time I've ever checked one of your battles out. Decent, never knew you had it in you tbh. Always thought you were just good at your man poems. Keep battling man.

vs

Quote:

Originally Posted by Killing Spree (Post 512770)
see...
alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
- Wording & execution was very choppy. Should have taken a little more time on this.
think u winnin? step to the plate, end up cracked till ya dead
Cos only Victa saw u N the BAT, as it swung & opened the back of ya head
- Didn't like this, plus a minor reach here.
plus we know u king D/R, & keep ridin as long as u feel weak
but jus cos u all over Kare Package, doesnt mean u'll level UP to Kill Spree
- Nah... Statement'ish. Should have worked on this one a little longer as well.
Got bars for life that'll keep u swamped in paper for thinkin u so tough
so let this put ya mind in bogs, right next to ur body & the others i dispose of
- This had potential. Mild as is.
u been chill but i've always hated this faggot so im deadin this hoex
between us? its cuts, two ways, me startin wit ya gut & end wit ya throat
- Nah...

KS - Not sure if you are just rushing your verses or actually not inspired to write but it's sensed by the readers. To me, it felt as if you just through some shit together and didn't give a fuck about the outcome. I've seen a lot better from you. You are wayyyy more creative then this. Wasn't really feelin this verse from you at all my man...

Witty got the edge

8===D~~~~(}: 07-28-2015 04:34 PM

Want my Toy's Story? it lives above Dis Knee ready to hit Cars
And when it's Drawn Out, shit gets uglier than your Pixar
played man
Lars lost to a few dudes, called 'em out b4 he splits, to land even
If u did that shit, it'd be quicker to list the dudes u HAVE beaten
lol alright
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
cool attempt at wp but no real punch here
U think he tried clappin'? fuck no...music's all this guy's blastin'
It's ironic, we all saw ur name was killing spree...and died laughin'
lol cool
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member
real shit, good personal

vs


alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
cool concept, wording a lil iffy, but overall not bad
think u winnin? step to the plate, end up cracked till ya dead
Cos only Victa saw u N the BAT, as it swung & opened the back of ya head
ehh nah
plus we know u king D/R, & keep ridin as long as u feel weak
but jus cos u all over Kare Package, doesnt mean u'll level UP to Kill Spree
alright
Got bars for life that'll keep u swamped in paper for thinkin u so tough
so let this put ya mind in bogs, right next to ur body & the others i dispose of
bogs lol @ the word choice. decent here
u been chill but i've always hated this faggot so im deadin this hoex
between us? its cuts, two ways, me startin wit ya gut & end wit ya throat
nah just some basic horrorcore bar not feelin


First off, I applaud the good man Witty for puttin in work in text, havent seen it but you arent bad lol. Had the played opener, but for the most part the rest of your verse was pretty decent and consistent. KS idk i feel you could have easily posted something better and won, maybe like 2 haymakers could have done it. I liked ur Witney like but thats about it, kare package was ok. Im going with Witty here.

Unfukwitable 07-29-2015 12:28 AM

I just used a Pixar bar on RB last LLL seaon so I'm not really impressed with that line.
.
.
You promised ur girl the universe, but Sun her glow is missin'
Needed drugs, so took apart her car stereo n sol' her system
I'm a legend on RB, U a nobody, just a lonely, wack, pretender
U got over 20 losses on a site where ur the only active member

vs

I just used a Kare Package bar too a couple of battles ago, Im not really impressed either.
.
.
alumni? I'll Pop guy & leave a legend Herb slaughtered
start wit shoot'n Witney's & finish wit him dead like her daughter
^^ grimey ass nigga, aint even give it a week

felt wit came with stronger material he had a couple clever ideas that came of as a statement but still had enough for the W here. v/Witty

iSpaz 07-29-2015 02:19 AM

pixar, list, die laughin

vs.

witney, bogs

got witty with one more hit. witty had some pretty simply concepts and some of the punches were straight forward, i think he just had really nice wording. killing spree had sick concepts but something was off so some of the lines didn't land for me, the witney line went hard tho.

v/witty

Hush 07-31-2015 01:36 PM

8-0 Witty wins via KO


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