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Week 1: Witty vs. Dancake- WITTY WINS BY NS (OPEN FOR FEED)
AOWL Season V, Week 1 Good luck @Witty and @DancakeSUMMARY OF RULES: Verses are due Sunday, July 19th, 11:59p.m. PCT Monday, July 20th 2:59a.m. EST Monday, July 20th 7:59a.m UK There are NO extensions. Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words). Votes are due Wednesday, July 22nd, 11:00p.m. PCT/8p.m. EST/4a.m. UK. Failure to vote will result in automatic sign out for the next week. Read the full rules here! TOPIC: http://i.imgur.com/82O9WVAh.jpg |
I love you.
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And I you
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Quote:
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I'm going to try. I just realized this was up.
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I feel the touch, as my skin crawls; it's disgusting
The lusting stare throughout all of the thrusting Adjusting my seat, so my customer feels at ease And unzipping the jeans as I fall to my knees The patron of filth for all the night's sleaze I kiss and I lick, without meeting the eyes Feeling the rise of demons that eat me inside I don't do it cuz I like it, I do it for the rent I do it for the dollar and I do it for the cent No one's gonna save me, superman's a myth In a world full of villains, only lex luthor can exist My customer stares, lost in my tired eyes Complete lack of emotion the cost of expired cries A prisoner in plain view, frequent visitor of hell My cell invisible, the land of pity where i dwell Treat me like a doormat, wipe your dirty feet Tread upon my spirit, leave me cryin' on the street Show me I'm a dirty whore, treat me like it too Choke my undeserving throat, beat me black n blue Tell me that you hate me, make me gasp and weeze You can scrape and maim me, just pay me as u leave I'll cry as you drive away as grief makes me bezerk I'm just a male hooker, on the street waiting for work. |
Perfect ending with the male references, breathed the picture more life, very unexpected. Loved the verse, I want to meat a girl like this and show her a good night, at least for me.
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Lol I was going to say this was dope til I realised it was about a male prostitute lol the mechanics were nice the flow was tight lol just thought u could have dealt with the topic in a different way lol can't understand why you chose to take the verse thst way but regardless it was written well and I look forward to seeing more from you. Good luck with the rest of ya shit in this league
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